I wrote this when I was sick and out of practice. It's not awful, but its not especially good. If you checked this because The End, be aware this story will be nowhere near as good.
I know its not original but I was ill and wanted to do something something fun.
Rarity fights a gigantic crab. Again. But with a lot of action.
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Rarity has crabs?
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short, cute and to the point I like it. found these thought you ought to know.
“Unhoff her you brute!” [ unhoof]
but she shift it away, [shifted ]
he hadn't done any real damage [she ]
but after several tense second, she pulled on its legs up! [ seconds ] [one]
vainly trying got balance itself [ to ]
Rarity leap up, [ leapt ]
The crab waddled, but still advance, [ advanced ]
until the monster feel with a ground shaking boom [fell ]
A few errors that I happened to notice:
"Un-hoof" or "Put Her Down"?
"You're" (You Are).
And you might mean "fashionista" in the description (I could be wrong).
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Less then twenty-four hours ago I made a comment mentioning this very topic... and then this popped up. *click*
It was better then I expected along the lines of spelling/grammar. I think it could use some more explanation if you want it to be a better story, though.
5630795 Thanks I fixed it up. Guess I should have read it more thoroughly and not relied on the limited checking abilities in open office