Thanks to my editor Frenchie for fixing my many, many mistakes!
While trying out to play at the Canterlot Garden Party, Octavia sees Vinyl Scratch with her turntable and rap music. Octavia automatically hates her. She soon is surprised to learn that the two of them have a lot in common. More in common than Octavia thought. Octavia is surprised to discover she becomes friends with Vinyl. But will spending too much time with this new pony change Octavia? Will she still be the sophisticated, classical-music loving pony when the Canterlot Garden Party comes?
Cover picture is from http://bigmacintosh7.deviantart.com/art/Octavia-VS-vinyl-scratch-295289327
Chapters (8)
Well done friend, good start
What a great start! I'd definitely like to see more!
It's just marvelous! Can't wait to see how 'Tavi changes. 
OH NOES, MAH FEELINS
Forgive me if I sound rude, but there were a few things I needed to nitpick in your story. If I sound really, really stupid or really, really mean, it's because this is my first time trying to truly critique a story. I'm new to the site.
"She’s been saving up for awhile now..."
Shouldn't it be "She'd been saving up for a while now?
"...at the music hall until she almost ran into."
Into? lnto WHAT?
This is just me being picky, but I'm pretty sure Octavia-level pieces have more bow lifts. My sixth grade pieces had much more.
"When Octavia walked through the doors, she was greeted by the sound of a tuba playing somewhere. Octavia walked through the same hallways she walked through since she was a little filly going to perform her first concert. As Octavia entered the auditorium, she saw a mare on stage playing a saxaphone with a judge sitting at a table in front of the rows and rows of chairs. There were many ponies sitting in the rows of chairs waiting for their turn to play.
Octavia took a seat in the back row where she unpacked her cello and took her sheet music out from inside her case and looked at the music again. She was ready."
The first paragraph seems rather repetitive, while the sentence in the next line seems a bit run-onish. The paragraph after that (which I didn't include for adding unnecessary length to this comment) seemed to have the word "play" in it a lot. There's a lot of choices for how to fix these, so I'll leave you to your own devices.
"The pony with the saxaphone finished her solo and exited the stage as Octavia and the other musicians applauded. Nopony would find out if he or she were accepted until a week from tryouts."
It seemed to jump somewhere else suddenly between the two sentences. In between them you could put something like "The pony was slightly nervous as she stepped off the stage, and she had good reason to be:" blahbitty blah blah.
Also it's saxOphone.
"...because hers was really big..."
This is my biggest peeve. You could have said, rather large,pretty big, etc. Really big seems kinda...meh.
I don't believe that Vinyl is yellowish-white. She's really more of a white in general. Yellowish white makes me envision a light pastel yellow.
"...playing some kind of rap music, which Octavia hated."
Wouldn't she be playing something like electronic or (dun dun dun) dubstep?
"Octavia finally snapped out of her stun..."
I feel like it shouldn't be stun. It's just that I don't remember what it's supposed to be.
"...and start walking down the opposite side of the street. Sorry, I typed that wrong. She didn’t start walking down the street, she started dancing down the street."
Could replace that middle sentence with something like "Or rather,"? The sentence you have right now kind of jerks you out of the story.
"'Do you now,'" I'm probably wrong on this, but shouldn't there be a ? instead of a comma?
"Oh My Gosh!" should probably be "Oh my Celestia!"
And something on the plot itself. I feel like Vinyl and Octavia are warming up to each other too quickly, making the story go kind of fast. I think it needs more buildup.
So my total thought of the story as a whole? I know that I've done nothing but be negative so far, but this is AWESOME. I can't find anything but OctoScratch fics involving the two, which is a pity, because I love the relationship you gave them here; friends, but that doesn't mean they can stand each other. Shipping isn't always necessary, after all.
So yes, a favorite and watch from me!
^ ...
that's like saying i cant read number's,...... THAT WAS A GOOD STORY CANT WAIT FOR NEXT CHAPTER
751956 Thank you for pointing out my mistakes and stuff.
When you said "My sixth grade pieces had much more." My 6th grade sheet music had more too. I was just trying to think of another musical thing you do with when you are playing. For the "oh my Celestia" part- thanks! I spend so much time talking like a human I forget how to talk like a pony! 
This story is my first on this site. When Vinyal scratch is playing rap, I just wrote "rap" because I wasn't exactly sure what you play on turntables. The part with "she almost ran into." The reason I came done to my computer this morning was to fix that. :D The part where it says : -"she snapped out of her stun..." I couldn't remember what it was called either. That was the best I could think of. So, yes I have a lot of mistakes and thanks for pointing them out. :) Oh, and Vinyal Scratch is mostly white but does have a little yellow tint in her coat. I said yellowish-white because that's what it said here. Thanks again for pointing out my mistakes and giving an opinion. 
751384 Thanks! It really is my start because this is my first story here! I'm so glad you like it!
.............I'm not sure what this means
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I has seemed to have finally find an Octavia & Vinyl story that stands out. JOLLY GOOD SHOW, MY DEAR CHAP.
752128 Thanks so much!
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Thank goodness, I thought I was being too picky.
I hope to see more from your story soon!
751963
Well, this is my first time critiquing something as seriously as I possibly can, and even my real life friends say I'm too touchy about writing.
wow awesome story.
756995 Thanks!
Great. A lot of potential, but first, grammar mistakes must be posted!
1. I called the ponies who are incharge of the party and told them I wouldn’t perform at the party.... I bought you this
There should be a space in between "in" and "charge"!
2. Vinyl, please don’t to the sad puppy dog face. You know I hate that!
Please don't TO the sad puppy dog face? Shouldn't it be "do"?
3. Vinyl got her mane cut first. It was just a little trim so it wouldn’t hang down like Octavia’s.
There are two spaces in between "hang" and "down". I've made that mistake plenty of times.
Amazing story. Can't wait for the next chapter!
759856 thanks for pointing that out. Oops
759877 You're welcome! Just helping people out!
Oh my celestial I am off tonight! THANK YOU SO MUCH!
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760107 Don't worry.
We all have those moments...
I still see the same mistakes I mentioned before. (Involving grammar)
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I can't wait until the next chapter. ^^ And I found a few mistakes:
1. They're first stop was dinner where they had spicy chili. (etc. because I see a few sentences like this.)
Wrong "They're". A lot of people make this mistake, but it's supposed to be "their".
2. Vinyl bought an short electric blue dress.
It's supposed to be "a". Not "an."
"An" is for adjectives/nouns that begin with a vowel, while "a" is for adjectives/nouns that begin with a consonant.
Anyway, make sure that there is less mistakes in the next chapter.
767645 Thanks!
What about unicorn? Which is correct? "It's an unicorn?" or "It's a unicorn?"
Which is correct here: "I have an hour to pack?" or "I have a hour to pack?"
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"It's a unicorn" is correct, even though it is an exception.
"I have an hour to pack" is correct because the "h" is silent making the "o" sound like the first letter.
Whoops.
I'm still new.
768194 It fixed itself.
Anyway. On the lookout for more mistakes.
Awesome chapter. Of course there are mistakes, like in most stories. And people will rant because they want more, but I say we would like more politely.
A few mistakes (I can't stand not pointing them out. Sorry.):
1. Octavie picked up her things so she could continue making her trek to the train depot.
Who's Octavie? Classic typo. Remember O-C-T-A-V-I-A.
2. "In the meantime, why don’t you start playing your instruments with us.”
It would make a bit more sense if it was "In the meantime, how about you play your instruments with us?"
3. (This is in it a lot, but just to point it out.) Ceasar
It's Caesar. Remember that.
Awesome chapter. And every chapter has a few mistakes.
768321 I like when you point out the mistakes. No worries.
Thanks again.
768337 It's a pleasure. I am a grammar Nazi, so I kinda have to.
768368 LOL!
768379 Sometimes I look at what people are saying online and I think "LEARN HOW TO FREAKING SPELL!!"
768430 I have the same problem. FELLOW GRAMMAR NAZIS UNITE!
You also seemed to have placed random spaces at the beginning of chapters again.
772200 I was indenting in Googledocs but it takes them out when you put them on Fimfiction. I think the random spaces is where it didn't take out all the intenting.
773046 I hate it when it does that.
Whenever I put something on some site like this site from Open Office, it takes away the indents. Grr.
Dang. Poor 'Tavi and Vinyl.
Hopefully Hilarity Ensues and everything will turn out alright.
Will it?
Great story. Can't wait for the results.
Of course, new chapter, new mistakes.
1. "They said we weren’t ladylike."
Shouldn't it be "lady-like"? Just add a hyphen in case.
2. I already had breakfast at the hotel... I’ll go see what there is to see in canterlot,” Octavia decided.
Canterlot, not canterlot.
Capitalization error.
3. "Where are your tickets!"
QUESTIONS end with "?". SHOUTING ends with "!"!
Wrong punctuation mark.
Well done chapter, anyway.
I truly didn't see the end coming... they seem so good hearted! I guess ponies change...
798956 Everypony changes.
Will everypony turn their muzzles up in disappointment at 'Tavi and Vinyl? Or will 'Tavi meet old friends that will be disappointed in her style change? And what music will 'Tavi play at the party? Find out next time on "More in Common"!
This is great. Nice depiction of Vinyl and Octavia, and I can feel the build-up of awkwardness that will appear, sometime in the future.
And mistakes. I think a proof-reader is in order. And, if you have one, then he/she seems to be missing stuff.
“I don’t know. We’ve been in her about an hour,” Vinyl answered.
Unless you are calling the cell a "her", it should be "here". And there should be "for" directly afterwards, too.
Octavia and Vinyl stood on the tips of their hooves as they tried to see through the bars of the jail and over the guards heads in order to see the pony who just walked in.
The guards need ownership. Normally, it would be "guard's", but since there is more than one, it needs to be guards'.
"Clothe," Vinyl said. "and I thought we agreed you would call me DJ Pon-3."
Shouldn't it be "clothes"? Or is that a spelling trait in your culture?
Octavia was holding her plush Luna, and Vinyl was holding her plush Celestia..
Seems to be two full stops.
"V-V-Vinyl, WHAT are you wearing." Octavia asked.
If Octavia asked Vinyl a question, why isn't there a question mark?
“What? When have I ever embarrassed you.”
Again. Same thing. Octavia asked a question, no question mark.
There also seems to be random long spaces that shouldn't be there.
but you are worried about me embarrassing you
“Okay! Let’s go! Oh, by the way, ” Vinyl said as she jumped up and down.
834415 Once again, thanks SO much! I was wondering if you could be my editor who proofreads everything I write? Please?
835167 Gladly.
761170 Excited about the story, I see?
836446 YAY!!!! THANK YOU! THANK YOU! THANK YOU! THANK YOU!!!!!!!!
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Great, now I have to go find and buy a Celestia plush for my Vinyl plush!!!
IT'S GLORIOUS!!
I saw some spelling errors but it was a fine chapter all and all... still wish it wasn't that short... please make longer next chapter!
892790 Sure thing! This one was short because I went on a trip and didn't have internet access for over a week so I just wanted to put a chapter up quick. Don't worry, the next chapter is sure to be longer!!!
896363 Sorry, I was wrong. The next chapter isn't that much longer, but I'll post two chapters at once.
This a very fast-paced story, but otherwise very good!