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Octavia, a dignified mare of high class, the other a zealous DJ named Vinyl Scratch. Whats the possiblily that these two could have anything in common. One interesting night is all it takes to set the seeds of something more in motion..

Chapters (7)
Comments ( 25 )

I generally dont mind comments, but now i alittle gunshy to keep posting:fluttershysad: I shouldve warn you guys that this is my first fanfic ive ever posted.so yeh there are things im gonna miss during editing, but i do plan on finishing this fic:twilightsheepish:

So far it's going well. I, personally, think this could have been done in one chapter, but that's just me. :pinkiehappy:

Overall, good pacing, and nice development.

A few spell errors but that can be fixed with a reread other than that im looking forward to more

"Octavia glared at her friend, and then skeptically took a snip." extra letter in sip.
also it should be longer and slightly more detailed like on the music and what not.

"Octavia could only sit there with her mouth a gap at what was happening." agap should be one word it just flows better but its your opinion on that.
"...nod and mouth thank you shakily.Smiling Vinyl Scratch..." separate your sentences.
"I’m really, really sorry that you had night ruined. " you need a 'your' or somthen indicating that Octavia's night was "ruined" between 'had' and 'night'.
“Why hay not”, she thought." put a 'the' between why and hay.

Thats just some that I piked out while reading plzzz continue you've caught my attention.

Good story. Only a few errors. Thumbs up for a brotha

nice, I can't wait to see what happens next... though I do hope that you'd eventually get to longer chapters:pinkiecrazy:

270831

I apologize for that. I was revising alittle bit and accindently republished it. but i plan on making up fo that unintened tease. Chapter four is almost ready

oh by the way, i read your fic, nice its got potenial

271224 lol sweet thanks its cool i ulmost republish it when i was bord that would have been fun lol

Other than missing a decent amount of the's, and's, etc. More connecting words would be great.
but overall good. A little fast, but not too badly.

...th' frig is this possible? BACKSTORY MAN! BACKSTORY!

281897
Slight spoiler there will a flashback chapter explaining this :moustache:

That stallion at the end is a DICK!

Okay now i kinda stuck since the wedding episode, since the reaveal of Dj PON-3 eye color. i not freaking out about it, its nice they did another shout to the fans,but magenta? its a shade away from red:ajbemused:

Please tell me there is more to come! :fluttershysad:

Y1

"Giving the crowd the ponies of version of thumbs up as the strange mare disappear into darkness behind the stage."
"Ponies of version of thumbs up."
I'm sure you can see the problem there.
Beauty Brass comes across as a bit bitchy to me, seriously who tries to force their friend to do something they obviously don't want to on their birthday.

What will Octy write in her return letter hmm.

Vinyl's th' father!

i swear i've read a fic like that somewhere... but where? :trixieshiftright:

An UPDATE? I had long ago given up on this fic.

methinks your both thinking of threes company twos a crowd

Well here's a story id never thought to see alive again, oh goodie :twilightsmile:

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