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An unofficial sequel to A Mothers Love Never Dies
As repentance for their actions, the entirety of the Changeling race now lay dead in an inhospitable badland, their flame finally snuffed out.
Or, so Celestia would have her nation believe.
My submission into ocalhoun's writing contest. Got first place in Least Down and Best Description.
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Just reading the description is giving me bad thoughts about this fic. Because it's going to take a lot to convince me that an attack on the city for the sake of survival by a queen and her soldiers would incite Celestia to commit genocide. What is this, Undertale?
7122650 I'm sorry, but… if you actually read it, then you'd know this wasn't the case. Best not judge a book by its cover—you'll miss out on a lot.
~ Chapter: 13
I like this new revision. It gives more detail and emotion.
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Dang, this was good. Strong emotion, and Celestia is very in-character here. Excellent work.
7221575 Thank you! That really means a lot ^_^
~ Chapter: 13
I like this story. It makes for a fine continuation (or epilogue?) of A Mother's Love Never Dies. At the same time, I feel like it was a bit abrupt in the changeling's inner turmoil over Celestia's offer. I just feel like there could have been more of a discourse between him and Celestia; granted, I'm not sure how it could have been extended any more without it being dragged out in such a way that it falls flat, but that's just my thoughts on it.
Again though, I do like this story.
Also, that bit at the end might start some rumors that could get some of those Canterlot nobles to show Celestia a bit more respect of the "Don't cross me or I'll smite you" variety.
7620457 Yeah, it, sadly, had to be a little rushed to make it function as a story. I honestly wanted to make it longer, lasting possibly several days, but it would have just ended up as literary redundancy. Such is the struggles of a writer.
And I'm gad you like it!
~ Chapter: 13
hm forgot to read this when i first saw it a few weeks ago its a great story and a sad follow up to the prequel also man thats a long line of deleted comments
7806941 Had someone spamming my comment section. Ended up having to get a mod involve. It was not a plesant experience.
And I'm glad you liked it!
~ Chapter: 13
Have to say i love it, love a more "practical" Celestia story that has dark undertones in it but its still a Celestia i love.
way to go, got my feels acting up again
pity, it doesn't have the same level of emotion the original did but it was nice to at least have some closure...
8560328 I never expected to live up to the original, but I am proud of what I got. Makes me smile to see that you enjoyed it. Thanks!
~ Chapter: 13
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Weird story. You bank a lot on changelings being different from chrysalis but then lean into the 'ponies are bloodthirsty as well' idea.
8751449 Not exactly. I based this one changlings having their own individuality, while ponies being spiteful to those who threaten them. If a 'monster' tried to take over your country, and kills many of your brethren in the process -- is it so hard to believe that you would be angry and malicious as a response? It's also how changlings are so different from them. Ponies are able to distance themselves and think of them as brainless monsters, not fellow sentient beings. It's like how in WW2 it was easier for allied soldiers to shoot-to-kill Japanese soldiers then German.
But, take it how you will. Sometimes what you write doesn't come out as you believe it too.
~ Chapter: 13
8752442
Well Changelings already have individuality. The show showed that already. Maybe you need to rethink the context?
8752762 Perhaps. I'll keep that in mind with the next story I write on the subject.
Thanks for the input!
~ Chapter: 13
Interesting story, and well done.
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