What if Queen Chrysalis won? What plans does the queen of changelings have for the citizens of Canterlot? And what is with the wails of pain and suffering coming from the bedrooms in the castle? Will Twilight avoid a terrible fate or is her own imagination getting to her?
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In my to read list, may read it at some point. Will let you know what I think of it then.
It was alright. There are a few punctuation errors and style issues, but it was still readable. One of the things that disturbed me most was the 'It's for possessive' thing. Never do that. I also think that the swearing was kind of unnecessary. It's so rare that you could easily replace it with other expressions. It just doesn't feel right. The jokes were well placed and got me laughing a few times. Good job sir.
Well, what can I say about the plot. Yet another one of those turnaround stories, but it was well executed. It took me until halfway through chapter 2 to figure out what's going on.
Chrysalis looks a bit too nice after the turnaround, I'd say. Surely she's supposed to be just misunderstood, but that doesn't mean she can't get a bit sarcastic, which she didn't do enough, imho.
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I mess up some words quite a bit "it's" and "its" being one of them. I'm quite bad pre-reading my own material as the entire thing becomes a swarm of words after a paragraph or two. As for Chrysalis being more mean spirited: I could have done it but it really wouldn't fit her tone after she was accused of trying the horizontal monster mash.
In any case, glad you liked it.
Lol. Some things it's best not to know.
What did I just read? This is plain torture! Those poor ponies!
Seriously, I had a good laugh.
That certainly was a twist I didn't see.
Uh oh please tell me Chrysalis is not going to do what I think she's going to do!
802268 Same here, but Chrysalis and her fellow changelings seem to have bad taste in movies.
I am so glad this is not what I thought it was, you really shouldn't do that though everything sounds so disgusting.
Where's the others? I only heard her mention Applejack and Pinkie Pie.
this is...... interesting.....
still interesting
TROLOLOLOLOLOL!
super mario bro's i saw that movie it exists only you changed the name still like it
*Facehoofs*
Now I'm curious as to what movie Celestia was forced to watch. Mortal Kombat 2 maybe?
Da faq did I jus read?
And why did I just click the fav button?
My mind was not in the gutter at any time during this fic!
It was in the sewer.
...
The moss is much prettier down here.
I really didn't know where you were going with story, it was totally awesome. A few minor typos here and there but otherwise fantastic.
Dafuq did heavy just read?
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Would the story be better if twilight was wearing
twelve different hats at once during it? :p
846585 Niet. I didin't think that there would be such a plot twist would have been better if twilight was right
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I thought about that but decided to keep this a Teen rating instead of going mature. I do have a zecorz x fluttershy in the work if you are into that kinda thing.
Jesus, I could have sworn that it was going to get nasty. Like FILLED with clop, but no, just mind games. Bravo good sir, bravo.
Oddly i was dissapointed there wasnt a rape scene
Total trollfic
Marvelous trollfic!
Now I want to watch bad movies with a bunch of changelings.
.................
i got nothing it aint rated mature so it cant be sex
Ok What the buck even was the "condom"?
I miss Billy Mayes.
I bet you they're not actually having sex, but doing something else and Twilight misunderstood everything
Yup, they're not having sex
3677608 It was wrapped up video game controller cord in a really tight plastic package
4512766 Hi, Billy Mays here. If you order now, you can get three times the nothing for absolutely nothing. (Man that video was awesome)
6944399 heh yea, that was a good Commercial.
Yes, only one way... Aside of, you know, dodging it.
... Huh...
Trollsalis is best Chryssie.
The horror!
Hahah, that at hilarious.
Looks good! Although...at some points the writing grows to be a little TOO good for a troll fic.
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Your right....
SHES GONNA MAKE HER WATCH THE TWILIGHT SAGA!!!!!
DAMN YOU GOT BURNED XD
Im calling 900% bullmanure they were all saying their sentence at the same time twilight sees what their doing...
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Oh god.....be merciful and just kill her now
Luna being the powerful alicorn that we saw inside Nightmare Moon.