Two ponies stand together in the rain. One talks, the other listens.
Then the other talks, and the one listens.
“Sometimes, whenever I look at the night sky and see Luna’s array of twinkling stars, I feel so small compared to them. Thinking of how big this world is, and how I’m nothing in it, really scares me; but I still know that my existence could mean a lot to a specific pony, and I hope she will feel the same way one day.“
Pre-readers: ChappedPenguinLips
Editors: Twidashforever
Chapters (1)
Aww, this story brought a tear to my eyes. Your characterization is pretty on point but Fluttershy seems to aggressive in some spots. idk why. Still this is an excellent story!
that's just my two cents.
Open up your eyes
Open up your mind
Fall in line with what you're meant to be
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Imagine Dragons—Summer reference. I like it.
~Lunatone
That was so sweet!
I'm always a sucker for stories involving Rainbow Dash and Fluttershy becoming a couple. Nice job and very well written! You get an up vote from me. I gotta say though, what was that incident that lead to their argument?
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Appreciate your kind input and words, and I'm glad you liked it.
Evidently, are you referring to the start of the story?
~Lunatone
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Well, you didn't exactly explain what happened earlier that day before Rainbow and Fluttershy had their heart to heart.
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Oh, that, right, right. It's sorta of indirect and subtle. Probably would've been better if it was more obvious, huh?
~Lunatone
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Yeah, while being left out on what those super important flashbacks could be forgiven, not knowing what happened earlier that day was rather confusing. Any talk about the day prior is hinted at, but is a little to vague for me. Those sequence of events would have helped story flow, in my opinion anyway. Otherwise this was really good! everything else came together and concluded real well.
Have a Rainbow Dash!
this story is beyond awesome. you nailed everything to the coffin.
write more flutterdash, please!
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Ah, okay, I see what you mean. I'll remember that for next time!
Glad you liked it!
~Lunatone
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Haha, thanks, a lot, bud.
You know, I've always been a TwiDash and OctaScratch fan and I will be forever, but I've been taking a strong liking toward FlutterDash. I'd consider writing another FlutterDash story.
~Lunatone
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yeah flutterdash is pretty awesome. I love appledash mostly, but flutterdash is something everyone should love. they're complete opposites, that's why they're so good together.
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I agree. I kinda wanted to get away from my norm and comfort zone, so this is what I came up with.
~Luantone
D'awww, loved the feels. Especially that bit about looking up at the stars and feeling small within a huge universe. Is it weird I actually do that sometimes? Stare at the stars and wonder if up there, somebody is staring back...
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That was my favourite part of the story. I actually wrote that part while looking at the stars during the night.
And no, not at all. When it's a clear night, or when it's a clear dark morning, I look up at the stars all the time to admire their beauty. It gets me thinking.
~Lunatone
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look forward to it.
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Best time in the world, the middle of the night under a clear sky, or just as the sun starts to light up the horizon or dip beneath it.
Hope you don't mind me sticking a follow on you, I like the way you think and write.
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Thanks, I really appreciate it.
Morning and night are my favourite times of the day because of those two reasons.
~Lunatone
I want a sequel... Pleeeaasseeee
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Really?
~Lunatone
6864091 yeah it's good. Oooh may a prequel. Still... May we have some more?
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All right, I'll consider it.
~Lunatone
6864528 oh thank you thank you thank you thank you yay
I officially enjoy this story
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Glad you liked it.
~Lunatone
That was an AMAZING fan fic
Just beautiful
This story was spectacular! Wait no, that's not the words. Dazzling? Awesome? Cool? Sweet? Ahh, anyway, you know what I mean.
I caught a few mistakes in the story, but that doesn't really matter.
This story focused on my favorite ship, FlutterDash. It was a great story that brought tears to my eyes at each flashback.
I rate this out of 100:
101/100
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Thanks. I appreciate the kind words.
Glad you liked it.
Thoughts?
~Lunatone
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I really appreciate that.
~Lunatone
This was a very cute and well-paced story. I had quite a few problems with the writing at the beginning, but it smoothed out as the story progressed. Also, the quality of the dialogue is a bit shaky at times, but that's more of a nitpick on my part.
I read this a few months ago, and then I couldn't find it and I was so sad, but then today I found it and I was so happy! I love this fic! And I think that the sing that plays in the show Star Vs. The Forces Of Evil when they destroy the magic would go really great with this because if the storm and also the feels lol ❤️❤️❤️
Cute. Poetic. Certainly a story I’m surprised to have missed, but it’s nice to have found and read it now.
Hey there! I did a reading of your story! I hope you enjoy it!