I don't really know what I'm doing. You should probably tell me.
Second Lieutenant Jonathan M Casey was shot down over the Korean DMZ.
Upon ejecting from his aircraft he would find himself in a very different reality. A reality that, for all intents and purposes, shouldn't be real.
Now he must come to terms with his training, his reality, and the colorful equines that inhabit it.
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"intensive purposes"
should be
intents and purposes
Angle of War
What kind of angle?
man this was great you got yourself a tracker, please keep this up.
Oh goody, another story centered on some jughead in Equestria that doesn't know how to put his gun down and stop using his caps-lock.
Sorry mate, but you got a real problem when your title is spelled wrong. I think you'd benefit a lot from a good editor.
You got a new tracker, now go write moar
Angle of war?
I know it must be acute or obtuse
because there ain't nothin' right about war.
710100>>710276 He means Angel.
710326
Ya DON'T SAY!
710342
Sorry but i down voted it, because its damn to close to a story i have been writing for the past 7 months.
Soooo.... is the name of the story supposed to be obtuse, or acute?
I'm liking this. Liking it...still liking it.
I'm surprised how popular it is to send some guy from the military to Equestria is becoming. That aside as far as HIE stories are concerned I prefer ones like this that involve the person having no awareness of MLP. It kind of takes the fun out it to place a pony loving person in their dreamworld.
Anyway this was enough to intrigue me so I'll be watching it.
Thanks for all the feed back:
lol, no but if you think I plagiarized or ripped any ideas from you I swear (upon my honor) I did not. This chapter was actually written summer of last year when I first got sucked into this crazy wonderful fandom. I am interested in seeing just how similar your story is though, If you link it, I will endeavor to try and take my story in a different direction from yours. I can't make any promises, but I defiantly would want both your story and my story to be original and different.
710092 - hmm, I may have been saying that wrong for years then, well this is rather embarrassing
710100>>710276>>710961>>710365- Yeah, the title always did prove to be problematic. It is actually suppose to be "Angle of War". I originally had it as "Angel" but I misspelled it when I sent it to some friends of mine for editing, when the typo was caught they actually preferred it and we left it as is. Either way you want the title it gets the point across.
710134 - Thank you, It really does brighten my day to read that
710264 - Thank you, and I actually have Ch3 almost entirely written, Ch2 is going through revisions. There's definitively more to come and I have every intention of finishing this story.
710156 - I defiantly understand that impression, But for the sake of making the story believable It had to make Casey respond rather violently (at least at first). Hopefully I explained that it was more his training and less him being a dick. I always hated it when the humans (in a human in equestria story) simply just accepted the ponies, that always felt really fake. Oh, also "jughead?" you mean "jarhead?" that's actually a USMC reference, Casey is Air Force.
710393 - So wait, does that mean you don't like your own story?
711113
Touche. While having a human outright accept the ponies is pretty awful, having them react in a violent manner is almost just as bad if it isn't handled correct. Personally, I would try and find a balance between the two. Try to have him act with more tact and cautiousness rather than being on the offensive, otherwise the character will end up looking stereotypical. It's whatever you want to do though.
Oh, it's jarhead? Fff... sorry. It just goes to show you that I know little to nothing about such slang.
711113No I love mine. If I didnt like it I wouldnt of been working on it for months now would I. Ive tried to link the story to others it doesnt work, and I will honorably take your word it just seems a little similar to eachother. Look i'll show you the first paragraph. The whole first chapter is long so here you go.
"I never really put much thought about were ill go when i die, but i never thought it would be like this. I guess the warriors soul never dies. It all started on that dreaded day i should have of known something bad would of have happen. My squad and I were checking out some bunkers to eliminate some stragaling nazi scum, but the little bastards are cowards and would sometimes leave traps, I really would have seen it coming. Was I a good leader for my men. Of course i was i saved them with my own life, I dont know if they will think the same way about it, Everyone will think im a deserter. Have i dishonored my country with my death. Did i do the right thing. I dont know and i will never find out".Tokeahv mumbled to himself while drifting in and out of conciousness."I think were losing him"! Nurse redheart screamed to nurse tenderheart." Were is the docter when we need him"? Complained nurse redheart." Can you do anything for him"? Nurse tenderheart screamed back." I cant when i dont know what he is he, doesnt have a tail or anything, and he has this armor on we need to get it off before we can proceed".edheart said while struggling to unstrap his armor. As she was doing that a gloved hand shot up and grabed her arm, and yanked her down. Then with the other hand grabed her neck, and pulled her closer."Were am i"! He yelled into her face behind a gas mask. "Your in the ponyville hospital". She struggled to say while chocking. He slowly released his hand, and she slumped to the ground trying to catch her breath. He started to get up but fell over. Using all his strength he pulled himself up. Stumbling he pushed the hospital doors open, and gasped at what he saw. It was a brightly colored world diffrent from the one he saw before."Humans cant be brightly colored or have tails, my eyes must be playing tricks on me". He said while fainting.
That was the first part of the first chapter.
711113And one thing since yours was fully released first just do one thing for me. Please ust put down for anyone who sees this fic tell them this isnt the only one. Because ive had problems in the past were i had a similar fic to someone else and people said i copyed them just because they had it out before me in thet case of fallout equestria fics.
711005 - I'm glad
711007 - Yeah I know what you mean, I think the attraction comes from integrating war with a very peaceful universe. It's sort of an appealing concept. hopefully I'll mange to set mine apart from the "heard". And the Brony in Equestria stories are really hard to pull off, it's possible but it requires much more skill then I have.
711197 - you hit it right on the head actually. Violence wasn't entirely my goal with this chapter, more of panic, and when people panic or are place in a situation that is unfamiliar they cling to things that are familiar. With Casey's situation, his training- pilots go through extensive survival training before completing flight school that basically teaches them that their defense is the highest priority and in most circumstances even takes priority over the lives of others. Hopefully I avoid the stereo type though of "angry man with gun"
711303 - Huh, defiantly a very good beginning. I don't think you have anything to worry about though. I mean both are Military Humans in Equestria, but other then that I don't see too many similarities. Yours is allot more grim-dark then mine and the writing style defiantly separates it from anything I would write. I say keep at it and don't worry about anything clashing, I feel we are going two different directions. When you do post it, if you run into any problems I'll be more then willing to back you up, and clarify any problems. You got your story and I got mine, I'm in no way going to try and steal your thunder or claim your work for my own
711499Thanks. I will now proceed to punch a baby good day to you sir.
711499I have a question if our characters met would that be a time paradox since they are from two diffrent time periods.
711548 - Considering that they are both in a land of magical horses... maybe?
711572Interesting. Somepony somewere just had its head explode.
I'm i the only one who got pissed offed when twilight took his gun
BTW great story
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I'm done with the human tag. I'm just done. This is like the 30th stranded pilot in Equestria (They are so common that I designate them SPiEs). There is no originality in these damn things anymore.
intresting
713325
picture is just so funny
rofl
713325 - I'm sorry you feel that way. I haven't really noticed any other "SPiE's" but then again I don't really follow fanfic all that closely. Do you have any pointers on the lack of originality you are referring too? Also, I would like to point out that the Fic picture is a pilot ejecting, if you hate "SPiE's" so much, I feel like that photo with a human tag should have been self explanatory... Also the description.
714006
If you want it, here is my generic 'don't for an HiE' list:
1. Self-inserts. Just don't do it. Trust me.
2. A manticore is so over used, I feel insulted whenever one makes an appearance. Bonus anger if once shows up in the first fuckin' chapter.
3. Try to skim over the awkward meet n' greet scene that all these stories have. No one wants to hear about how bad our world is for 7 paragraphs.
4. Don't have a mane 6 instantly fall for your character or if you do, give them a fucking reason.
5. "Is that grass?" Fuck. No.
6. Cell phone. Again, fuck no.
7. "I am going to save the world!" bonus anger if the MC has magical powers that he pulls out of his ass.
8. "I instantly love this world and would never hurt a fly in it." This makes me want to cough up blood.
9. "I will adopt Scootaloo." NOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOO.
10. A mary sue. There is a special place in Hell for authors that make these.
11. Spelling. You don't want to sound like an idiot to your readers.
12. Grammar. Refer to rule 11.
13. Format your story properly.
14. No. more. FUCKING. pilots.
and number fucking 15. If you commit this, I will hunt you down and send a .44 through your head.
15. Brony in Equestria. 'Nuff said.
714021 - I agree with most everything on this list, actually I agree with everything except 14, but honestly I haven't read another pilot in Equestria story before so I can't really comment on it. I'm a little to committed at this point to fix that "problem" anyway. I really do appreciate your opinion though, even if I don't entirely agree with it, you brought up some points that I hadn't looked at before and defiantly gave me stuff to think about, so thank you.
710156
Thanks for insulting me
714388
What? I'm sorry... I didn't mean to offend you or anyone personally.
714397
Hehe, no worries mate. I was just teasing
Seeing as how you liked my stories so well, I just found it a little weird that you didn't like my friend's for it's editing, since I preread the story.
i love stories that include fighter jets/ fighter pilots :)
714086
Hey, I'm just glad I could enlighten you. I'll just take my vote and leave now.
Now if you'll excuse me, I BiE author's to hunt down:
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lol ARE YOUA SPY!!! LOLOLO
Ooooh dis gun be gud!!
“I come bearing good new! Nurse Redheart said you
news
good update, keep em coming im very interested in this story
712675 - Thank you, and angry? not quite what I was going for but I suppose there could be worse reactions
714503 - Well I'm glad I'm not alone
721435 - Yes, someone else found that as funny as I did
721667 - I sure hope so
723969 - Ah, missed that one, thank you. And I'm glad your enjoying it
lol FUCKED UP KOREAN COMMIE PONIES
The only comment I have is when Casey is giving the big 4, you forgot to add his DOB. Standard U.S. protocol.
ZOMGWTFBBQ!!!!!1!! NEW CHAPTER
So far so good sir, the answer that twilight has to give should be quite interesting. Looking forward to the next chapter as always.
though you might want to check your final thoughts a few times before submitting them, because last time I checked tanks are quite expensive and no matter how good your editor is, I'm getting one before he does.
Finally!!!!!!
You're doing a great job by the way.
Keep it up!
Hmm, I have to say that perhaps he was thinking it was a hallucination for too long. Other than that, it's a decent HiE fic. Looking forward to where this goes.
DAT CLIFF HANGER! god damnit!
i need more i say MOAR 
please continue, and i will read even at 12:22 am 
I was a little skeptical about this at first but now i'm really looking forward to more
Keep up the good work!
moar!! I DEMAND MOAR!!!!!
omg need mooooaaaarr
A really interesting fic so far, keep it up.
‘LT CASEY: 1, FUCKED UP KOREAN COMMIE PONIES: 0’
What about applejack fucking raping his rib cage with a beat down of a life time...