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The following story takes place in the knights of the old republic era of Star Wars.

The Empire and the Republic are at war.Darth Stal is a sith lord who was charged with finding and slaying a jedi. This jedi had the intel to destroy the empire if given to the Jedi Council. When he slays her she feels his pain of loneliness he had through his life and with her last breath she sends him to a land with no hatred. The land of... EQUESTRIA.

Chapters (14)
Comments ( 92 )

I really want to see him dethrone the two I wonder if can still use the force and it be awesome if he still has his lightsaber :pinkiecrazy:

i noticed a lot of uncapitalized i's, and a lot of places where punctuation was needed. still a great read!

Moar. One thing though. Please allow him to regain his human form at some point so he can use his epic saber skills :pinkiehappy:

Definitely an interesting read. Please continue!

530700>>530771 Ty for noticing that i found the errors right after i submitted it i was like "NOOOOOOOOOOOOO" lol

Thank you all for the praise and constructive criticism. There will be more and I hope you enjoy it. This is my first fanfic ever so I am still trying to ge tused to this site and its set up. I hope you enjoy the rest and of course. May the force be with you Always

pretty short but i think its good too great job:pinkiehappy:

I really like the story :)

Make him kill someone already

539981 patience young padawan. You ask and you shall receive

Damn
I was hoping he would kill innocents cause Sith are just like that and sith are awesome.

544578 you said kill somebody. Not innocents You need to be more specific. just like if a genie ever grants you 3 wishes. be VERY specific lol

Pretty solid chapter. I like near the end, and the line at the end about "The dark side". Good ending to a solid chapter, and a potentially, if not already, great story. For a first fanfic, I am shocked by how good it is.:twilightsmile:

So... if he uses the light side his hair becomes white with blue eyes or does he stay the way he is because from my point of view he went Super Saiyan on Shanesen:unsuresweetie:

546363 Maybe. You will see later lol. But did you enjoy this chapter? I made him like that to represent corruption in the force.

it feels a bit rushed i think maybe try to expand the pre canterlot chapters to be a bit longer and maybe tone down the litteral mood wihplash that seems to be affecting him.
he was a sith after all that do leave traces in personality, at the moment it feels like he goes from a grey sith to a pink yedi in just a few sentences.

548865 Ty for the constructive criticism. It is my first fan fic so theres bound to be mistakes. lol:rainbowlaugh:

...I'm not really the good in making names but what kind of silent killer name is William:rainbowderp:

549188 did you read the whole thing. William is the guy who betrayed Alexx remember? lol . Ill make his name be Darth Shatayo or something lol

549205 Oh whoops I forgot about that I haven't been reading this story in a while:twilightblush:

:pinkiegasp::pinkiegasp::pinkiegasp::pinkiegasp::pinkiegasp::pinkiegasp: SO INTENSE :megusta: I NEED MOAR!!

549248 i would write more today but my brain is :derpytongue2: from coming up with 2 chapters of ideas in one day lol. Just wait till tomorrow.

Well that was interesting. So that is what you get with a Star Wars crossover? :pinkiehappy: Pinkie Pie moments will always be best.

Well someone thinks William is a good name for a silent killer

Wow, another amazing addition to the epic story. Great job so far! I wish to see the continuation of this story later on in the future:twilightsmile:

poor william i liked him :fluttershysad: and i sense something bad is going to happen next chapter :rainbowkiss:

I really love it!!! :twilightsmile:

EVERYPONY ty for all the views and likes. PREPARE FOR GLOMPING. :twilightsmile::twilightsmile:

YEEEEEEES JUST YEEEEEEEES :pinkiehappy: but the kisss :ajbemused: lol

>One red
>One purple

OGM ITS REVAN

Make his connection to the force come back, but strong enough to topple the empire by himself this time

558649 You are just full of ideas. Alternate ending perhaps... NO PROMISES. but i have set up a scenario for a sequel in case i want to keep writing.

558691
Alt ending:
Accepts Dark Council seat, leads invasion on Equestria, takes over equestria, kills leader of dark council for his seat and he becomes leader

558698 maybe ill hold a lottery of some sort to decide whos alternate ending gets posted

EVERYPONY!! THIS IS NOT THE LAST CHAPTER. i still have 1 chapter left and the epilogue to do. Stay tuned

now this is my fave chapter :pinkiehappy: and i think u should do that alternate ending and a what if series that would be cool

I still have an epilogue to write.

D'AAAAAAAAAAAAAWWWWWWWWWWWWWWWW :rainbowkiss:

me while reading this fic :pinkiehappy: while reading she was pregnant :rainbowderp: :derpyderp1: :pinkiecrazy: but then i went back to :pinkiehappy: xD great ending!

Still want that alt ending where he accept's the dark council seat.

559860 Did you not know? This was a redemption story lol. But yes perhaps i will write an alternate ending

559915

You know that being evil is SO MUCH MORE FUN than being the good guy.

559917 Sry i am a sucker for redemption stories.

i love the story buuuut ^

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