My thought was that the Crystal Empire extended through the Crystal mountain range (or just along it), but the surrounding areas of the remaining city works to I suppose.
Further while I hold no objections with wanting to eliminate Sombra, I would have qualms with a torturous death, aside from the moral implications, a torturous death also generally allows a chance to escape, best to just off him before he does something more devastating or simply escapes to fight another day.
Not to say it wouldn't be tempting to consider such demises but best to keep them from becoming reality.
6770171 You should add the tone of how she says it, for example that she snaps at him. Also plain expand it because the pace is too high. Try more descriptions and more dialogue.
6798975 To be honest, I've been losing inspiration with this fic for a while now. Reading over it, the fifth chapter sort of gave it a good ending. I may or may not end it there. Also, I have a bunch of other stories to work on.
it seems a little easy for Cadance. I would expect Celestia to come along and help her get settled. Though maybe that might upset some crystal ponies so she might introduce her to a crystal pony to help integrate Cadance into the empire.
Prologue to The Crystal Empire's involvement with the Mane 6 and Spike.
My thought was that the Crystal Empire extended through the Crystal mountain range (or just along it), but the surrounding areas of the remaining city works to I suppose.
Further while I hold no objections with wanting to eliminate Sombra, I would have qualms with a torturous death, aside from the moral implications, a torturous death also generally allows a chance to escape, best to just off him before he does something more devastating or simply escapes to fight another day.
Not to say it wouldn't be tempting to consider such demises but best to keep them from becoming reality.
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You should add the tone of how she says it, for example that she snaps at him. Also plain expand it because the pace is too high. Try more descriptions and more dialogue.
6798569 Thanks for the review.
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are you planning of changing it?
6798975 To be honest, I've been losing inspiration with this fic for a while now. Reading over it, the fifth chapter sort of gave it a good ending. I may or may not end it there. Also, I have a bunch of other stories to work on.
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I'm saying to maybe rewrite the middle. Not extend it.
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why did you put a password on the chapter mentioning the spanking?
6799595 I didn't. I thought I took those chapters down since I've decided to end it (for now) on chapter five.
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oh, so that's what happens when you do that. When I try to access it the site asks for a password.
6799714 After thinking about it I've decided to put the chapters back up and edit it.
I think Cadance has 2 titles. Princess of Love and Empress of the crystal empire.
it seems a little easy for Cadance. I would expect Celestia to come along and help her get settled. Though maybe that might upset some crystal ponies so she might introduce her to a crystal pony to help integrate Cadance into the empire.
Loving this story in general.
The only thing I can specifically point out as a problem is that the crystal ponies don't seem nearly as shell shocked and amnesic as in the show.