Celestia has tired of seeing her sister, Luna, drink herself stupid day after day. Celestia can see it destroying Luna's life, but her attempts at intervention have failed. But now, she's given up convincing the alicorn to give up her moonshine, and instead is going to force her to cease in her destructive ways. Even if it means that she has to join in her sister's drunkenness to show her the kinds of problems it creates.
But why did Luna become an alcoholic upon returning from the moon? What was it that changed the once strong-willed, independent alicorn into a drunken mess?
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Loved it.
Overall a very good story. My only complaint is that you kept using splayed, and although you said it is an elegant word, treat it as such. Try not to use it too many times. But other than that, I adored this story. Drunk Celestia was done very nicely, and Luna had a good reason to drink, which is always a plus over the constant 'HEY LET'S GET DRUNK FOR NO REASON' plots that seem to be popping up every now and then.
Keep up the good work, AP.
I really enjoyed this. Thumbs up! I didn't notice anything wrong in particular. I'm sorry! I'll try harder next time.
moonshine....
i see what you did there
That was really well written, i liked it ALOT Good job!
That was simply amazing. In fact I do understand Luna a littel bit... I've learned in a hard way that drinking is not a solution to your problems, even if getting drunk seems to be the best choice in the beginning. Regardless of that again great story! Keep up the good work.
Great
I saw some grammatical and spelling stuff:
> her moon, and her’s alone - Should be "hers"
> We Require more time. - Lowercase r in require
> So you could see how much is sucks - it sucks
You also use ellipses a lot where commas would be better
Other than that sad business, however, good stuff.
I TOLD THE WITCH DOCTOR I WAS IN LOVE WITH YOU!
Fantastic story. I expected a comedy, which I wanted, but instead I got pulled intot his deep and sad story about adorable Luna and her pain. Well done, well done indeed.
missing a few apostrophes now and then, but an otherwise well-crafted and beautiful story.
Seen this sort of thing done before, but you mad it better.
"Crazy spinning castle." I could actually imagine Celestia saying everything in this. Luna's lines were good, but Celestia's dialogue was really the part that... *sunglasses* shined. YYYYYYEEEEEEEEEEEAAAAAAAAAAHHHHHHHHH!
this story i like it ... ANOTHER!!!!! ... if you would mind ... that it
Excellent story with a very original plot device. I think this is the first addiction/vice story involving Luna I've even seen - let alone read - so you're onto a winner here.
I think you've got the crux of what could spawn a sequel or too - after all, the road to recovery for any addict is a long and difficult one ...
I loved it too. Feature box?
Almost clicked, but then "SHOTS SHOTS SHOTS SHOTS*" started playing on my PC.
SHUFFLE YOU RUINED IT.
* I can't remember the name ok.
I like it!
Very nice. cute and bittersweet.
Wonderful
She should have downed the rest of it in one go, lowered the Sun, and then raised the Moon.
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JUST SHUT UP AND DRINK SOME MORE!!!!!!!