Scootaloo wonders around the streets after a failed attempt to get a cutie mark and finds her special somepony and is in love with her but after that it kind of turns int a cuse soon leading to suicide.
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i was born in january my eyes are brown just like on my avatar and im short for my age
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Just a little note that Sugar Cane is just a character that i made up and the divorce chapter i've expearianced in my life
Well not the suicide par but the rest if seen also not the murders
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For the love of all that is good let this be a fucking joke.
uhm you have a mistake sir on the 'ti' part is it suppose to be 'it'?
is Sugar Cane a stallion or a mare? if mare then the kiss wouldn't even happen cause Scootaloo's a mare
I tried to put a smile but then I vomited now i'm sick
And then Apple Bloom and Sweetie Belle went to the club house and fainted from what they saw
THE END
Like if you agree at my opinion.
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6342735 I can spot his mistake at chapter 1
Hey dearie! I just wanted to say for your first fic, this is pretty good. I have soooo much trouble writing in Scootaloo's perspective, and I think it's awesome you made her a main (or mane, geddit?
) character.
I think what I'd love to see from you is some editing. While you had a clear story, there were a lot of punctuation errors that made it a liiiitle difficult to read. I'd also like to see longer chapters, that would help flesh out your characters a little more! Plus it will make the audience get more engrossed in the story. (Not to mention, it will also make them more upset when you inevitably kill of your characters.
But that's good! When you write stories that give people extreme emotion, it keeps 'em coming back for more!)
I'll be watching you closely--you have a lot of potential as a future writer and I can't wait to see how much you improve!
Wat da fak did I just read
Umm... why do you have your character freaking out over a tiny insult?
Overall, very bad grammar and overall awfulness.
It's amazing how some of these stories can make it past the mods.
Well this escalated quickly
6343334
That's a bloody good question. I can only assume that either the mods themselves are completely ignorant of basic spelling and grammar, or that they just don't screen for anything more than blatant violations of policies like "no stories in script format", "no MST3K-ing other stories", etc.
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Sorry, mate, but your writing really needs a lot of work. How far along in school are you, exactly?
6343394
And no way would Diamond do that, even though she is admittedly a bully.
Maybe Diamond knows something about her that we don't....
1/16?
Can it be that bad, really?
*Reads first line*
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Just wait 'till you get to the murder subplot.
6342711
In MLP, most ships are girl x girl.
But even so, Scootaloo isn't an idiot. She wouldn't kiss somepony she only knew for 2 days.
6343435
The mods are basically there to make sure it's pony enough and that it doesn't otherwise break their rules. Everything else is unimportant.
Ignoring all of the grammatical errors, there is still so much wrong with this paragraph. They only knew each other for a week! Didn't you watch Frozen?
Also,
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Scootaloo likes Tiara (or AB, SB, or any other pony really).
What did I just read?
It's obvious someone drugged you into making this story. I'm watching you...
And Diamond Tiara was hailed as a hero for killing this awful Mary Sue self-insert. She got the Key To The City, which she promptly sold on EHay because it didn't do anything.
6343503
Someone trying to be 'edgy'. Or something like that.
Here's my reaction to this fic:
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First off, the chapters are way too short: One hundred and twenty words in the first chapter? That has to be one helluva chapter if it's that short.
Also, there are countless grammatical and syntax errors.
That should be written like this:
Gonna be honest with you, it seemed like you half-arsed this instead of putting actual effort into it.
Have a nice day.
L
6343596
I think he just wanted to write a sad attempt at a 'feels' fic.
6343592 Mine too.
6343596
Haven't you read it? I'd say it's about 120 words too long.
6343776
Ha! I like the way you think.
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This has gone down the drain faster than the goldfish epidemic following Finding Nemo
Maybe you should combine some chapters with some transitions, besides that it was an ok story.
2197 words / 13 chapters = average of 169 words per chapter. That's a bad sign.
Ow. That hurts a little to read. First, that's a run-on sentence.
Second:
wonder - To be struck with astonishment; to be amazed; to marvel; to ponder; to feel doubt and curiosity.
wander - To move without purpose or specified destination; to go somewhere indirectly or at varying speeds; to stray from one's course.
Third, what's a "cuse"?
Edit after reading: Wow, that was even worse than I thought it would be. You really need to start paying attention in English class.
6342788 Thanks for being a kind soul with actual constructive criticism.
6343776 BURRRNNNNNNN
Pffffffff...
Even my fics are better than this. You're starting off bad. If you don't have the English language under your belt, go to a different website for a different language. Fanfiction.Net is good enough for it, as well as Wattpad.
There's a load of grammar and spelling mistakes. And that's not the heart of it.
This is trying too hard to be edgy. In one chapter, all that's interesting is that I haven't read it.
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The bold word is the mistake from chapter 1
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There are tons of mistakes in all the chapters. Spotting just one is no special accomplishment.
6345073 I know I know but thanks for reminding me!
6343471 I believe 'ignored' is a more accurate term. 'Unimportant' implies these things don't matter. They do, it's just that the bar really is this low.
6346072 Better than FF.net. It needs to be vaguely readable and understandable to make it here. Vaguely.
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i literally read this piece in 1 minute, think more next time
Trollfic.
Yeah. I'm sorry but this reads like a trollfic.
If this is a legitimate attempt to write a story then I suggest you learn how. If it's not then I guess you reeled in a couple fish.
Good lord this is escalating at lightening speed. Theyve only know each other for two days, already kissing and she's about to be killed.
wow. hehe eue
6343474 I ship this so hard 8D That pic is adorable.
I think this is the only fic where I can safely say that everyone was rooting for Diamond Tiara.
Good, on ya, Tia. Have a hug.
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Uhhhhhhhhh...
Yeah this... needs... so much work, it hurt ;v;