Chapter 17 A needed break
Last night was a rough sleep as I recovered from the hellish nightmare of being near murdered by angry Parliament members, 'saved' by my aunt Luna and sister Sunset I 'lived' to see another day...I just hope I am better today than that night.
I awoke feeling terrible...Sleep was a bad term to use for what I had....It was more barely enough to call a 'power nap'.....But sleep it was even if it was to say nothing of the sort, I just slid from bed to my feet feeling some victory in the first order to not fall on my face, I then head to the shower...after using the Porcelain throne first.
Once the water hit it started to work, though it I feel made me more willing to hit the bed than wake up.
"God why? Why last night?" I asked as if expecting a reply.
None came but no need; anyways I bathed and brushed before exiting to dry off, as I did I looked at the Near Navy-Blue unicorn stallion staring back in the mirror.
"You look awful," I remarked at my reflection.
"Well better try to fix this," I drawled as I brushed my mane best I could; my eyes looked half alive more than half asleep.
Once done I moved to dress myself, then headed to the Thrones Room to eat; once I was half way I met somepony walking down the hall with me.
"Oh, heloo Starlight," I said near slurring.
"Hey David; you okay?" She asked me genuinely.
"I had a bad night," I said rubbing my eyes.
"Aw sorry about that," She said with a sympathetic look.
"I will feel better later; I hope," I said sounding near unconvinced by my own words.
"Me too," She said placing a hand on my shoulder.
"Thank you," I said smiling back best I could; she said you are welcome and we head to our common destination.
When we arrived there in her seat was Twilight, to my surprise in her night clothes of a rather attractive body hugging button up light-blue shirt and matching pants going over the morning paper as a cup of coffee sat steaming lightly in front of the paper in her hand.
"Hey Twilight," I said with eyes widening a little bit in regard to Twi's clothes, drawing her attention from her paper.
"Oh! Good morning; how did you-...Oh dear," Twilight said once she saw my face.
"Bad night? Was it a nightmare?" Twilight asked sweetly as she looked concerned.
"I did; Luna and Sunset saved me," I reported.
"Oh wow; that must have been some nightmare,"
"It was," I said yawning.
"Care to talk about it?" Starlight asked me.
"Please?" Twilight pleaded.
"After I wake up more okay?" I requested.
"Of course," Twilight agreed caringly, "What you like for breakfast David?" she asked smiling to lift my spirit.
"I will see in what is here," I replied slumping into the throne on Twi's right but next to Starlight's seat to my left.
"Fair enough," Twilight replied softly continuing her reading; I then looked up to the tree roots chandelier above me.
It was still a sight to me, amazing how each gem had a picture of a memory from the Mane 6's past along with other images unknown to all and me not shown in the TV series.
"Quite something huh? I remember seeing it my first time and appreciating it for real; it was amazing how special Twi and her friend's friendship is," Starlight said.
"I know; it is hard to imagine I am looking at it in person...or Equine rather," I chuckled resulting in Starlight giggling too as well as Twilight.
"Rarity is still modest about how she got the spell to put our memories into the gems," Twilight said placing the paper down.
"I recalled that about her," I said rubbing my eyes of their sleep.
"M-Hmm; but on a serious note we have work to do, your speech," Twilight said looking almost reluctant to start this task in light perhaps in part on my condition of lacking proper sleep.
"I was thinking about that," I sighed glumly reclining in my seat.
"Please David just tell me, I can't wait for you to spill it after 'waking up'," Twilight pleaded.
"She's right; you'll feel better," Starlight encouraged.
"Fine," I sighed in defeat, "I dreamt about giving my speech, but the sheet was blank so I was drawn a blank," I began.
"Oh gosh; let me guess, Parliament turns on you?" Twilight asked.
"Worse; my mother and Luna spurn me then Parliament turned, after that they chased me and right when I was on the floor in a hallway with one member clutching a knife to murder me Luna shows up with Sunset and they save me," I finished.
"Wow...." Starlight said as both her and Twilight's mouths were agape.
"Oh David; that was no nightmare, it was a glimpse of Hell," Twilight said in surprise and sympathy.
"Tell me about it," I said running fingers through my mane.
"I would lose sleep too with a dream like that," Starlight agreed.
"I know; sorry to disappoint but talking about this helps very little...." I sighed face down on the table.
"It was worth a shot was it?" Starlight asked.
"It was a noble effort," I confessed.
"Thank you for at least telling us David; this is far better than bottling up your fears and emotions," Twilight said smiling warmly.
"I know...I just fear my insecurity will be seen as weakness and I will be seen as less a stallion because of it," I stated sitting back up, "That has always been my case, the paranoia of being shunned for my lack of confidence and low self-esteem or lack thereof,"
"I felt that in spades last night and with Sunset when she snapped at me; if I was not an insecure colt I am now...." I vented.
Twilight and Starlight could look at each other after that, then to me as I looked probably pathetic and vulnerable; I could only feel shaken by the terror gripping me and low self-confidence and ebbing self-esteem as I went into a trauma-like state while tears leaked from my eyes, it was near like after Sunset snapped at me when Celestia commented my tour of 2 places in Equestria would not be my winning argument things were clearly not going my way in this plan for return.
"I want to so badly be the Prince Equestria deserves but I do not feel like I am; I am no prince Twilight....I am a pauper colt playing a prince," I sighed tears streaming down my cheeks in a near unbroken gentle flow.
I felt a hand on my shoulder as Twilight I saw was looking at me caringly.
"David, you are not any of those ugly things you said; certainly you are not weak, you are just being given more responsibility than you are prepared for coming from a position in life with no responsibility over anything but your own life." Twilight began.
"It is unfair so much is being dropped on you at once and that when you think you got things right more comes and tears you down again,"
"This is an ugly test you were given but as we told you you are not alone, you have your family and friends helping you, and I am for one am not going to let you fail, not now, not ever." Twilight finished.
I smiled in reply, feeling a little better about this but that speech...My return...That was what kept me in check, unless I do something I will be chewed up and spat out by Parliament....
"So what do we do?" I asked eager to use today to find a solution quickly.
"First how about we eat and enjoy ourselves today? You don't have to work on this today you need a break." Starlight said kindly.
"I suppose I could." I replied; after a nice breakfast the three of us headed out to walk around town.
Walking in Ponyville seemed to be what I needed as we then headed to the park first to relax, along the way I took another look around the iconic town.
"You look better." Starlight remarked with a smile.
"I am feeling better, I guess I was acting like the time was fading faster than it really was; I needed this." I replied with perhaps the most carefree smile I made in a while.
"Great; and to perhaps help I know just where to go." Twilight said turning us toward out of town.
It did not take long before I saw where we were going, 'Ponyville Public Park'; a perfect place to relax and forget my troubles.
"This will be perfect," I said looking at the tranquil setting of small knolls, flat areas, dirt paths.
"Thought it would be; hey look we have somepony we know." Twilight said pointing toward the lake, it was Fluttershy and a family of ducks.
We then headed over to the butter Pegasi who was seated on the ground on her calves with her feet behind her, typically and adorably petting one of the ducklings around her as they peeped, and mother duck watched with motherly protectiveness while permitted Fluttershy the closeness and contact she had.
"Hey Fluttershy." Twilight said softly so to not startle her or the ducks.
"Oh, hey Twilight, Starlight, 'Bold Heart'." she replied in her signature soft tone, definitely a location to use my false identity I thought since she did not call me 'David'.
"I was taking him to the park to relax, he could use the break after having a breakdown earlier." Twilight explained.
"Oh no...Is it... The 'speech'?" Fluttershy whispered.
"Yes it is," Starlight replied, "He was really stressing out over it."
"That is putting it mildly; I want so badly to give a convincing argument as to why I deserve the throne but what I have is being called 'not enough'." I sighed dejectedly.
"I'm sorry I can't be of much help; if I was good with crowds and speeches I would help." Fluttershy apologized, her ears flattened out in a submissive manner to express her sympathy.
"It is fine Fluttershy, I wouldn't want to approach you with such a request out of your comfort zone," I said smiling to comfort and assure her, she smiled in response.
"But we aren't out here to think, we're here to relax." Twilight reminded kindly.
"Agreed; mind if I help you with these ducks?" I asked.
"Sure, I would love that." Fluttershy agreed handing me a loaf of bread and some dried corn; soon Twi and Starlight joined in and we all feed ducks and had a great time.
As I feed the ducks stress vacated me completely, I was back to my tour of Equestria again with not a care in the world; it brought me also back to a simple time when I was a kid feeding ducks with my adopted mother, it was a new form of nostalgia in essence and I loved it all.
"This was a needed break Davi-I mean...Bold." Twilight said correcting herself.
"It is fine Twilight; and yes I should have taken one the moment this weighed on me," I admitted with a chuckle.
"There's no shame in that," Fluttershy said softly.
"I know; but I guess I was afraid any break would be time consuming of work time...Since the tour was meant to serve a dual purpose, but that was maybe a suggestion," I reasoned.
"I suppose so; but it did help you bond with our land Bold...Maybe we're overthinking this whole thing." Twilight theorized.
"You know, that's it; we have been not seeing the big picture behind this small tour, it's the little things that can make the biggest impact!" Starlight said excited at this possible insight to my problem.
"That could be the angle you needed to state your stance on the reason you are taking on the role of prince after all." Fluttershy added in.
"You know; it might work...That is something to tell Celestia later."
"Good idea; I'll write her a letter when we get home again." Twilight said.
"Great." I replied satisfied we may have made the plan we seeked; after a while more Twilight, Starlight, Fluttershy and I left the park for Twi's castle, I felt like a new stallion as I made my way 'home'.
As we approached Twi's castle we saw there was an object in front of the castle, as we gained ground the object had revealed to be....My mother's chariot?...
"Oh my...." Fluttershy squeaked.
"Why is Celestia here?" Twilight asked.
"I have no clue why my mother is here...I hope she is not in a foul mood or brings ill news..."
"Whatever it is let's just get it over with." Starlight said as we headed toward and entered the castle, once inside we walked to the Thrones Room, there in Twilight's throne was my mother herself...The lack of a smile was disconcerting...Very disconcerting...
"David; shall we talk about a little idea you concocted?" she asked sounding like she was bottling disapproval and utter anger as her tone was strained like trying to remain calm...I was boned....
TO BE CONTINUED.
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so u know u repeated a spot twice.
We then headed over to the butter Pegasi who was seated on the ground on her calves with her feet behind her, typically and adorably petting one of the ducklings around her as they peeped, and mother duck watched with motherly protectiveness while permitted Fluttershy the closeness and contact she had.
"Hey Fluttershy." Twilight said softly so to not startle her or the ducks.
"Oh, hey Twilight, Starlight, 'Bold Heart'." she replied in her signature soft tone, definitely a location to use my false identity I thought since she did not call me 'David'.
"Hey Fluttershy." Twilight said softly so to not startle her or the ducks.
"Oh, hey Twilight, Starlight, 'Bold Heart'." she replied in her signature soft tone, definitely a location to use my false identity I thought since she did not call me 'David'.
"I was taking him to the park to relax, he could use the break after having a breakdown earlier." Twilight explained.
Just figured i'd point that out for ya.
7381675 Thank you I shall repair this glitch.
7381613 Excuse me may I have those back, I had comments I liked on those. :(
7382068 I really love this chapters more please
7384565 Thank you...1st positive feedback thus far...Lost a like and gained a dislike after that chapter so this helps.
7382062 much better bud. so far the story is great
7384857 Thank you; 2nd good feedback I gained. :)
7384667 no problem my friend
7395498 Wow; sorry you would take such news harshly; thanks for the feedback regardless you are the first one of your type.
7395826 Well think about it for a second, he was raised by his family pretty much his whole life, he loves them (at least I'm assuming he does, I haven't actually read the rest of the story yet), and yet now he's being told that his whole life, the only one he's ever known, was supposedly nothing more than a false identity made for an inter-dimensional witness protection program, and now he's supposed to just up and leave it all and go back to the woman/mare that gave birth to him...
Even if he was to somehow ignore the multiple world-view shattering revelations that were rapidly thrown in his face, there's still the more mundane fact of him essentially being adopted from birth (I say essentially since he doesn't seem to have any memories prior to his childhood on earth).
Let me tell you a story:
*Ahem*
Once upon a time, there was a boy who was raised by his loving family. They weren't perfect, no family is, but he loved them all the same. One day his mother told the boy he was adopted, to which the boy responded by simply shrugging and saying 'okay', greatly confusing his mother for she didn't expect such a response. She asked the boy if he would like to know anything about his mother, to which he responded 'but she's not my mom, you are' causing her to smile with tears in her eyes.
About a year later, the boy came home from school to find his mother talking with two strangers sitting on the couch, who his mother informed him were his birth-mother and her new husband. She asked the boy if he would like to meet them, to which he quickly shook his head and hid upstairs, fearing he was going to be taken away from his family, even if he later realized that would never happen.
As the boy grew and matured, so to did his conviction that while blood may be thicker than water, neither have anything to do with familial bonds, aside from the fact that most families happen to also be related in the genetic sense, simply due to the way the world works.
I was that boy.
So you can understand where I'm coming from when I tell you that there's no way in hell that conversation should have gone off without a hitch like that unless:
A:his adopted family treated him like shit,
B:he's in shock, his mind still attempting to process all the new information, and as such is just sorta going with the flow right now, but will obviously be slightly less accepting once he's fully cognizant,
C:
or D:he's actually somehow calm enough in this situation to think rationally and realize that not only is she not a total stranger (the whole shameless crush thing is gonna make things reaaal awkward during that first meeting isn't it?), but also that she didn't really have any other viable options at the time. And even that wouldn't change the fact that she's his mother in name only, at most it would serve as motivation for him to give her a chance.
...My money's on C.
7398569 Thing is I am not just giving up I did have a month or so even, plus if a nation is without heir I am not going to be selfish and forsake them; 2 I love my family I never would stop but if a calling beyond me is there and made...A fool would deny it and refuse.
I also understand your reasoning and logic, and took it into great care and thought; I find it insightful; plus I am most likely the calm one and knowing to take that there is more than what I see if it is staring me in the face, my family treated me well and it was all for a greater purpose all that happened happened; I am a calm person on things and known to take crazy stuff well.
Also I hope it does not detract and throw you off reading this story...
7398789 I'm not knocking the story itself, I'm still gonna read it as I find it's an interesting start to this type of story, but there are some serious issues that need to be addressed within the the first chapter alone, as well as in your reply to my previous comment.
To start:
I'm fairly certain you said that he had siblings?
So now you're saying that one's bloodline determines their 'calling'?
'He', that being the character, isn't aware of any 'calling' at this part of the story. From his perspective he's just been told that he's adopted by an employee of his bigwig birth-mother, and is now being told she wants him back.
Also, you keep saying 'I', but I was talking about the character, not you. Now I don't normally have a problem with self-insert fics, not even when the author doesn't differentiate between themselves and the protagonist. But when they do so and the character still doesn't react in a believable manner, or worse acts in a manner that's influenced by the author's knowledge of future events in the story, that is a horrible oversight from a writing standpoint.
If you, and I stress that I'm talking about you this time, were suddenly put though the events of the opening chapter, just this chapter, without any knowledge of how the rest of the story plays out... would you really act the same way?
As I said I'll still read the story either way, but I'm hoping you at least revise the early chapters to make him a bit less accepting of the whole situation.
Initially.
I'm not saying he has to outright hate Celestia, but accepting the situation outright like this is just... no. Have him give her a chance, then have said chance pan out positively over a couple weeks/months/chapters, and the believability factor would skyrocket. Furthermore you wouldn't have to change anything from the later chapters, yet because his reaction during the early chapters would be more believable, so to would his later interactions with Celestia. This is because we would actually get to watch them build their relationship, rather than simply being forced to accept that they have one that didn't exist before now.
7399886 My narration was an attempt at me looking back then perhaps indirectly asking the reader about things or asking them to put them in my place or something to that nature more leaning toward me looking back and talking to the reader...It is better if I could explain it in the meaning I wish you have to point things out, also I am a very rational guy others may be resistant to things and not be open but what I try to stress is I and accepting if trust is earn 100%.
Also the giving chance and bond is covered later after time I took to stay at home with my human family to make peace with the events that occurred; also yes I have a sibling but I guess I could try to work on explaining why not letting Sunset rule alone, but I could sum it up to Celestia wanting her family whole and not be without her kin, especially her foals which are of a stallion she loved dearly, which in turn as her son I am what I am and cannot selfishly forsake a birthright.
This is irrelevant seeing as they haven't even met yet at the point in the story we're talking about, so it's impossible for her to have earned any trust from him at all, let alone 100%.
No offense intended, but that line of thinking is incredibly naive. Refusing to abandon your life, family, and friends to become a prince in a foreign land isn't a selfish decision. It's realistic, justifiable, and in the event of having prior obligations, it's actually selfless.
Also, you keep talking as if I'm criticizing your actions and/or personality. I'm not. I don't even know you. Your protagonist is the one who's reactions I think should change, not you, and only for those specific points I've already mentioned.
Even if it is a self-insert, the fact is that the protagonist isn't you, it's just a character based off of you, so he doesn't have to react the same exact way you would in any given situation. If the protag acting the same way you would makes the story weaker as a whole, then why not alter the scene a bit to make it better?
7401265 If so I can maybe try to extend time but I am personally not resistant I am but not, Naive? No; I see your logic...The human family raised me and to abandon is selfish...But as I said I love them, I do; and I take that love with me on accepting this new life before me, also to deny a mother her son? Is just as cruel as just leaving my adopted family with no care.
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And to deny a parent and child their very bond is any less cruel?
While she had a good reason for sending him away, that doesn't change the fact that doing so robbed them both of the years worth of shared experiences necessary to form a true familial bond.
She didn't just deny the bond between them... she never allowed it to come into existence in the first place!
You can never make up for something like that. Oh you can try, you can even become just as close as you most likely would have been had things been different...
...But nothing can ever change the simple fact of what it is: a futile attempt to regrow that which withered on the vine before it had the chance to bloom.
7401711 A reason I am for you going to do surgery on this to lengthen the time to grasp this and bond with Tia over this...So they can bond more in early story.
7401737 Alright, and like I said, it would definitely make it more believable seeing as it's one of those things that would normally take a long time in order for it to feel natural.
7401843 After reviewing the beginning chapters I feel the time from when I was visited in July, to heading to Equestria in December, would be sufficient a time to let this info my insert learned sink in, just thought I should state the exact time between getting the shocking news to making the 'leap'.
I shall however see if i could without dragging the story out extend the bonding period between my insert and Celestia.
hey BlackHat, i was looking for the story that had the image of Human Celestia. it was a Human in Humanized Equestria, you know what it is?
7898043 No sorry I do not.
He loves the rulers... And Sunbutt is apparently his mother... is mother-son incest gonna happen anytime soon?
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The American Civil War only had about 620,000 casualties. The two World Wars had about 77 million combined, most of which was WWII. But then, you were talking about the US involvement specifically, weren’t you?
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No there will not be nor will there ever be, also that is if I continue this story when you see more content.
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*sweet home Alabama stops*
Would've been nice to see this story continue
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Sorry, just having writers block and confidence issues; and weak motivation.
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I understand I'm actually going through writers block for my stories to but I'll eventually find some form of inspiration for my next chapters of my stories like I know your will eventually besides every writer goes through writers block