Three thousand years ago the alicorn swine of Equis destroyed the Human race. We helped them thrive and build up their empires but they turned on us. We were considered scum and too chaotic to be left alive. Unfortunately they won and slayed every last human but a young boy... The young boy was a last attempt at saving humanity. He was a normal orphan but humanity turned him into something greater. He became a human with psychokinesis and other telekinetic powers. He is named Alpha 302-X7Z but was originally known as Xavier...
These ponies wiped out his race and now they will pay with their lives along with everything else they hold dear!
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Haven't read yet but in the description it helps to have no errors otherwise they turn people away.
The young boy was a last attempt at saving humanity, he was a normal human but after he was chosen to become humanity's savior they changed him into something greater.
5757813 Yeah Im gonna fix that hold up
5757813 okay how about now does it look better?
5757826 still have the out of place capitalized He in it.
5757839 kk fixed can we take this to the pms?
A good star on your story. I,ll keep my eye on it and that great work.
Hope you find a editor.
5758642 Yeah I do too! thanks man!
Well it seems like the plot is a good one, but there are a few problems concerning grammar and the like. Also it seems a bit rushed, there isn't an introduction to how this all started, you just get thrown into the fray like cannon fodder against charging rhinos.
5759485 Im not one for calming scenes I like to get to the action but have enough calm parts to make it a good story
5759658 hmm well it's your story bud, do what ya wish, just be careful of grammar and that
This story has potential but... it seems to be a bit rushed, and the grammar could use some improvement.
It seems interesting though - Keep it up.
5760268 Yeah thats why Im looking for a editor so that can be fixed and the reason it is a bit rushed is because I hate writing slowly in the beginning
I like it
keep going
5761092 Thanks I have a assload of Ideas flowing through me and Im writing as we speak. There will probably be a new chapter in the next hour or two...
5761097 It's gonna be soooo awesome
5761102 I know you like what Discord I mean Brigadier General Daren R Francis did with the galactic war ship?
Warship time, Bring down hell Kappa
5761468 Oh you have no idea how much the Hellbringer will fuck over the ponies!
5761488 I can't wait to see.
5761491 Its about a quarter done
5761494 perfect >:)
5761502 bro shit is about to hit the fucking fan
5761512 heh
Great chapter. Can't wait to know what happen next.
Keep up the good work.
5761820 He had a trauma moment where all his memories came back to him making him go into a heart attack/stroke like state
5761832 Ok.
Hmm. Wipe out an entire Human race?
Almost sounds like a The Conversion Bureau story but it's not.
5761844 Whats you're point here hmm?
5761847
I'm not sure. But me beveling Pony kind wiped out the human race? I find that impossible.
5761852 Just go with it I will get to that part in the prologue story when I write it
5761859 Ok. Because I don't know why Pony Kind did it. Sure the Human race can be considered scum and too chaotic but not all humans are evil!
I been seeing a lot of stories of Ponies fighting Humans and Humans fighting ponies. 
I can't keep up! There are so many in this website! *Faints*
5761868 Please just read the story and go with the flow
5761876 Fine
5761878 trust me You'll be like twilight trying to figure out her pinkie sense
5761890
EH?! Are you saying that I'm acting like Twilight?! 
I really can't beleive you and the references atm, just wow, good work
5761946 Can u guess them and what they're from?
5761950 I can't remember them off the top of my head sadly, I haven't been able to remember things well lately :(
5761955 Aww well thas okay!
5761957 im currently getting it looked at, but no promises it will be fixed, so I forget stuff a lot.
Is it a Indiana Jones references.
5762095 That's one reference what about the other at the end of the chapter?
Hellsing at the end
5762851 lol there u go
5761107 love it my friend
I cant wait for more 
This is extremely cliche, all about wish fulfillment and completely generic. Which could be forgiven of done well but it's not. They released something they knew would cause major destruction to their world for no reason. The dialogue is terrible, you don't explain anything not pertaining to your character. It's rushed and lacks any kind of subtlety to it. In short, I didn't enjoy it.
5764377 okay you're loss
>Equis destroyed the Human race
stopped reading after these words. magic sucks against technology + humans are not so stupid to help their possible opponents to evolve
5764971 okay first time writing sci-fi fic and personally Ive seen others do it too so what ever
This shall be good