20. Happily Ever...
Button shook himself clear of the water.
An annoyed "heeeeeey!" followed by a laugh made him smile.
"I had just started to be nice and warm!" complained Sweetie Belle with a frown although her eyes were showing no sign of anger.
Button leaned in and placed a kiss on her lips.
"Pardoned?"
Sweetie Belle rolled her eyes and leaned back onto her beach chair. "Yeah I guess."
But the furious blush in her cheeks showed how happy she was.
She had grown so much... One year in their teenage times away certainly had changed both of them.
Sweetie Belle was taller and her features were now more... more mature.
As for Button, ponies said that he had become a fine young stallion with a strong heart and will to defend his marefriend - something that hadn't changed from the game.
He was about to dive back into the lake when Rumble came galloping to them, a huge smile plastered on his face.
"Guys!" he chirped. "Check this out!"
The colt tossed a page of some newspaper on the ground with a triumphant grin.
Sweetie Belle got off her beach chair and lifted her sunglasses. Button approached the newspaper and picked it up before reading the headlines :
"VIRTUAL FOALNAPPER JUDGED" he read out-loud so that Sweetie Belle could hear.
"Ingenious game creator GameSpark was finally judged for his criminal acts that had consisted in foalnapping two young kids of the name 'Sweetie Belle' and 'Button Mash'.
The princesses just announced yesterday that he would be convicted and sent to prison for two years."
"Yeepee!" squealed Sweetie Belle, jumping on Button and tackling him with a huge hug.
"My uncle was judged as well but non guilty since he helped rescue," announced Rumble, feeling somewhat jealous at the love filled couple.
A moment of silence ran by.
"Remember when we came back?" suddenly asked Button.
"Oh yeah!" giggled Sweetie. "The looks on everypony's face!"
"All thanks to me!" smiled Rumble, inching closer to Sweetie Belle.
Button's ear gave a slight flick. He had noticed that the gray colt had been a little too nice to his fillyfriend. And he never seemed to make her forget that he was the one who had saved the day.
Button grabbed Sweetie's shoulders and gave her a peck on the cheek before giving Rumble a provocative look.
"And Rarity cried of joy for two hours strait!" laughed Sweetie Belle, not seeming to notice the tension between both colts.
"It was only three months ago..." started Button.
"Yet it seems so far!" finished Rumble.
They all let out a happy sigh, remembering their bumpy arrival...
Button put his hooves on his eyes as the white light blinded him.
Sweetie Belle's form in his hooves had disappeared.
"Ow, ow, owww! Something's burning!" whined a voice.
"S... Sweetie...?" mumbled Button, slowly opening his eyes.
"It's the camera! Guys help me put out the fire or my mom is gonna kill me!" said Rumble's voice and Button saw him putting his bed sheet over the starting flames.
Button got up and helped him, before realizing that the world wasn't blocky anymore.
His mouth opened wide.
"S... Sweetie Belle?"
He span around and saw she was looking out the window.
"We're home..." she murmured.
"Guuuuuuys! Trying to prevent my house from burning here!"
But Button ignored him and joined Sweetie Belle.
"We're home!" he shouted and they both opened the window and jumped out, huge smiles on their faces, enjoying the warm round sun.
Shocked screams were heard everywhere.
"We made it!!" chirped Sweetie Belle, lifting her hooves up in the air.
In the corner of his eye, Button saw Lyra and BonBon stand up from a bench and both shift their eyes from the couple foals to the nearby wall.
Button looked over it and saw a 'MISSING' poster with their smiling faces on them. He quickly grabbed it and tossed it on the floor.
"TAKE THAT GAMESPARK!" yelled Sweetie before jumping up and down on the poster.
She stopped when a huge gasp came to her ears.
Sweetie stopped and looked in the direction of the sound.
There, dressed in black stood her sister.
Tears came up to the delicate mare's eyes and she held a hoof to her mouth.
"S... Sweetie Belle...?" uttered Rarity. "Is it really you...?"
Sweetie Belle, too shocked by the emotion, simply nodded.
"Oh my darling!" cried Rarity, running to her and hugging her with all her might.
"Button!"
The scream almost made him jump to the sky.
He turned and saw his mother shaking at just a few hoofsteps of him.
"M... Mom..." he muttered, unsure how to respond.
The mare threw her shopping bags on the ground and galloped to Button, way too amazed to cry.
"My baby! My poor baby!" she screamed. "I knew it! Where were you?! Do you know how much I was scared...?!"
Her motherly instincts were taking over again and she was unsure if she had to act angry or glad.
Her son on the other side saw Applebloom and Scootaloo hugging Sweetie Belle to death and Princess Twilight Sparkle scribbling on a parchment with rapidity.
Button smiled at the crowd of ponies that had gathered around.
He grabbed Sweetie Belle and gave her a huge hug but she took his face in her hooves and once again kissed him.
Exclamations of shock, then cheers were heard all around them. He even heard a "FINALLY MY SHIP HAS SET SAIL!" somewhere.
Applebloom and Scootaloo were jumping up and down upon seeing the new couple.
Rarity was crying again and Button's mother was laughing her head off, murmuring 'finally, finally, finally' between each breath.
Button smiled to himself and Sweetie looked up at him.
Her sparkly green eyes were showing relief as she though the same thing as him.
It was over.
It was all over.
And they had both gained something extremely precious along the way...
You kids... You kids really think it's done...?
You'll see.
You'll ALL see.
Once I'm out of prison, you'll be sorry for ever messing with me...
It's dooone!
Thank you guys so much for your support!
And as I promised I'll be listing all the bronies who made me smile or helped.
The Slending Angel for all his support and helpful comments along the whole story!
TheVideoMaker for his logic and nice videos popping up in the comments.
GaleSinger for his constructed criticism.
Faller in Equestria for always supporting me through the last chapters.
ButtonMash for making me realize the most important error of the whole story 
And then AwesomeRaisins, ApplesApplesApples, Sentinel053, Shadow Storm 16, XYZDreadnought,Pseudonymous and epicn00b for your comments throughout the story that always had the effect of giving me joy!
And last one is NaiadSagalotaOar for his very first comment on my story that helped me continue.
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I'll be releasing a sequel once I'm done another one of my long stories. The first chapter should come out soon and it's not as long as SweetieMash so I guess the sequel will be out real soon!
Stay tuned for it!
Can't wait for the sequel
6704034 mark it complete.
6704659 I knew I had forgotten something!
so is that ending a hint to a sequel
Your Welcome!
Can't wait for the sequel!
I gotta say, this was a unique take on the whole "Ponies go into a video game land" idea, and I liked how it turned out, can't wait for the sequel!
...I was in the credits? What the hell?
6705284 Right.
Reads author notes* ...I was here too
even though this is probably my first comment on this story..
6705715 Well, I know I was in the Credits, but the question is why.
6628159 Holy shitballs, Ssundee!
6707309 Don't make me feel guilty! I'm easily influenced
6704955 Sure is!
6705233 Thanks!
6708246 ok....
6708345 *Covers her eyes* Must. resist. pouty. face.
6708148 What I meant to say was "I know right." But I think we were in the credits was because she wanted to thank the people who supported her while making her story.
6708366 ...
6709005 Ah.
6709465 You're Welcome.
6709477 *you're
6709490 Oops.
6709495 *nods head in agreement*
Oops.
6709005 Exactly c;
6708366 Did you ignore me? oh, that one hurt right here
!
6711969 Make it stop! Any pony!
I've finally gotten ahold of internet!
Thank you CristalGalaxy, and I wish you happy holidays 
6732651 To you as well!
6784055 Glad I am!
6784755 just binge read this at midnight! Love it! Hope the sequel is even better! My only complaint is that gamespark only got TWO years! Like seriously, he not only kidnapped them, he found them and left them for dead! He should be given at least 20!
6815314 Haha yeah I thought about that, but it had to be only two for the sake of the story! (Did you know the sequel was already out?)
And thanks for your positive feedback!
6815437 Yeah I knew, that's how I found this one! But I probably won't start reading until there are more chapters, because I read fast and don't want to be abruptly stopped in the middle of the story! Still, I hope it's as good, if not better, as this one was!
6816391 Thanks!
That was freakin' AMAZING. I have a tip for your future writing, however: when a character is speaking and their dialogue spans several paragraphs, each paragraph starts with a quotation mark. For example,
"Hi, I'm Button!
"Yesterday, I got transported into Minecraft.
"It was really cool but also really scary, and I'm so glad I made it out ok!"
Now, I'm not suggesting you break paragraphs up like I did there. What you have written is good in that regard; I just needed to illustrate my point and I didn't want to write three full paragraphs of dialogue (yeah, I'm lazy xp).
7079175 Thank you very much! (Just saw your comment now...)
7123339 Yeah that is a typo error, I actually thought it was his real name at first! And since they're really in Minecraft, I decided to leave their inventory opening to you guys. Either they think 'Inventory!' and it appears, either they just reach into their pockets and the inventory slots appear!
7123463
I think I had woken up a little too early that morning...
7123763 If you scroll down, you'll see the dozens of people harassing me to stick it in. So yeah, I kinda had to.
7123832 Now that is reserved for the next story...
7123913 Thank you! I'll work on that!
7123913 (Oh and don't forget the sequel's out!)
7124753 I'm going to wait until the sequel's finished to read it, because I power through stories and don't like being left hanging. I'm tracking it, though, and as soon as it's completed, I'm in!
Sweetie Belle will be adorable in this story, right?
7144900 She will also be badass
Alrighty! For this story I read it as it came out for a bit. But then I stopped and said "I'll read some later." Now, it's done and has a sequel, so I binged it. And I'm glad I did! It was evident that there was an improving quality throughout the whole story, and by the end it was on a great, readable level with a good pacing. Now, onto the ratings:
Characters: 5/6. Now, everyone knows: I'm a sucker for ButtonBelle. That being said, I felt this story did really well in breaking the 'Button is a coward' cliche, and seeing that is nice. Not to mention other characters were always refreshing to see. In any case, I felt that the one problem was GameSpark and Rumble. GameSpark was a bit generic, but honestly I couldn't tell because we saw too little of him. As for Rumble, he got a random crush on SB outta nowhere and Button got uncharacteristicly defensive. Other that that, though, stellar.
Universe: 4/4. I like Minecraft. I like mods. I feel like the one person on planet earth that liked SAO. Therefore, I like this universe. Speak of the devil, I need to go back and count how many times you said therefor instead of therefore. Therefor is a word, but the word you want in that situation is therefore, with the 'e' at the end.
Pacing: 3/3. At the beginning it felt kind wobbly, but it still worked out really well because of how it ended. I enjoyed the progression, and I loved the ending.
Continuity: 2/2. This story didn't have much continuity to keep, but that it did have some, and kept it to the tee. Props to you:
Add the bonus point for ButtonBelle, and you get my final rating:
15/15: You lift bruh!
7557105 Holy shit you killed me right there
7557324 That was an amazing review! Really helped me out on a whole lot of levels about how to improve. Sorry about all those grammar errors though! (At least I'm not writing "sighed" with a 't' anymore... Dark times man, dark times...)
I'll do my very best to follow your advice and continue to get better. Truly, I thank you for taking the time to write something like that!
7559064 at least you aren't saying Buttons anymore. Now THOSE were the dark ages.
7559087 Yes... *shrinks down* sorry...