Brothers Till Death

Everypony remembers the civil war between the Solar Empire and The New Lunar Republic.

Yet a lot doesn't remember how it ended.

But the actions of two brothers from another land.

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Nova Arc

Nova Arc #1 · Jul 18th, 2015 · · ·

This was true poetry. If there was a continuation, I would fave and track this. But you still get a thumbs up. Great work.

Ryuk9091

Ryuk9091 #2 · Jul 18th, 2015 · · ·

this good story man keep up with good work

I stabs you

I stabs you #3 · Jul 18th, 2015 · · ·

That was really good

hakim35

hakim35 #4 · Jul 19th, 2015 · · ·

I can't say how i feel when i read it. This is one amazing story. Good job castok.

Mr Extra

Mr Extra #5 · Nov 27th, 2015 · · ·

To be honest, I couldn't finish this. I don't know if you were going for some stylistic word choice or whatever, but the effect was that everything felt stilted.

who's words held great effect to build

Who's vs Whose

But yet it explains a lot.

On top of that the tenses were all over the place. Things that should have been plural weren't and others that shouldn't were.

The older sister got more supports from her own people.

Overall this took work to read and I wasn't able to concentrate on the story. I felt like I was in a pinball machine, jarring back and forth from the same errors and awkward word choices so often I couldn't tell left from right.

Thunder--Clash