delicious

I'm guessing the last line was supposed to be funny.
If so, I don't get it.

Because of you Swiper

I HAVE SEEN SO MUCH PORN

624507 Tl:DR
To
Long
Didn't
Read

it is a synopsis of the entire thing without being to wordy

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GLAD TO SEE THAT!

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i really didnt know where to place it at first and now i cant get it out of my head

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So, what did you think of the whole story?

Did I do an okay job portraying a human girl for the first time?

dude you did good. you basically were able to make someone born from the 90's. so ya man great job

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Sweet!

>She didn't come across as too whorish, did she? I was going for more 'spunky' and 'funny'.

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like i said dude you hit the nail on the head

thats a no she didnt come off as whorish

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Looks like vaginas e.deviantart.net/emoticons/t/trollface.png

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I was thinking of a car grille.

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The vaginas of your world scare me.

Well done, Swiper!

well done
i would love to see more featherweight out of you
and some more zecora
maybe both at the same time
.....

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First, be adorable:
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Next, be hung like, well, like a horse.

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That's right!

Also, be very kind and bashful but have interesting stories to tell as well as being a great listener.

627091 that moment that i just realized that my friend looks like featherweight
other than that...i0.kym-cdn.com/photos/images/newsfeed/000/108/590/tumblr_likkepXdqY1qaj5jro1_500.gif

... Fucking finally I could set enough time aside to bloody read this!
Great stuff as always and oh god another fic idea. Hope you don't mind if I steal your universe for it

Hmm...now which ponee will my human OC get to fuck?
Back on topic; I didn't really like the ending at all, bad experiences and all with smaller cousins. Restraining order from panicking parents.

Comments typed at 3 am are best comments.

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Oooooooh... maybe fuck one of the cuter background ponies that don't get enough action. Roseluck? Mayor Mare? Junebug?

Anyways, glad that you love it!

Please let me know when you write your new thing!

630057 As always.
Hmm...
I need a pet name for you...
Swipey perhaps?

Anyway, know any fannon introverted extremely intelligent ponies? They would fit best.

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Swipey is fine. That's what they used to say when I hung around on 4chan's pony things.

Have you ever read my story Avalon? It has a very subversive view of Derpy as an intelligent girl that's plagued by being a klutz with a serious self-confidence problem. She bonds with this stallion who also has a lot of problems. He ends up saying that he wants to come back to Ponyville with her, and they're implied to end up married.

Just throwing that out there. Think outside the box.

630080 The most depressing story I've ever read while aroused.

U needs to add the 'Human' tag.

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Fixed!

Good clop section. Normally I'm not really too intrested in human in equestria stories, -shrugs- but this was alright if you ask me.

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i really liked this 1

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What is a A tl-dr?

Amazing story, i hope we can see some kind of sequel or more like this

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It stands for "too long, didn't read"-- internet slang

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Thanks! Yeah, I like seeing stallions with human girls... I should do more soon...

877497 I've had enough of your disingenuous assertions!
*FALCON PUNCH*

,,,,,dammit. this is still so dam smexie!!
i have read a lot of clop and non of them made me as frisky as this xD

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Sure, thanks for reading!

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Like it.

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Sweet Mother of Zanzibar, All that modern Girl-talk/slang.

Cool story otherwise.
And, Shining Armor has it better than you, Featherweight. Twilight as a sister, Cadance for a wife, Good and noble job, gets to bang aforementioned wife.

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Well, I wanted to write from a human girl POV, so I had to make a lot of things... girly...

Anyways, I'm happy that you loved it!

Featherweight is right, and you're wrong, but being such a simplistic minded guy he doesn't think it through... typical...

Aweome story.
Thi is offically his first story to get me wet. Just saying.

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Thanks!

After reading (and writing) so many fics about sensual fun-times from a human guy's POV, it was quite nice to write something from a woman's POV.

This is the first story of yours I've actually sat down and read. I wasn't disappointed.

And these people asking for a sequel... I mean, sure, I'd love to hear more of what happens with these two, but it would have to be sad, if what was asserted about what happens to humans is fact. Granted, I love sad stories.

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Thanks for reading! And please be sure to check out my other works!

A sequel, well... oh, gosh, this story worked so perfectly in my mind as a 'four act play' type scenario. I don't know how I'd expand it out. Seriously, I'm drawing not much in the way of ideas-- although the fact that I have Conversion Bureau-esque subtext that humans can't stay long in Equestria sets things up for a bittersweet very end. We'll see.

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Ah, that part of the comment was more directed at the people who had already asked for a sequel than at you, really. I do like that you seem to be half-considering it, though.

Too busy laughing to clop.

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1608293 Sequel?

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Honestly, I have had ideas bouncing about in my head. It might never happen, but I could... I'll just have to see what happens.