Eight years is a long time, but not nearly long enough to heal and forget when you've been let down by the only pony that mattered to you. That's at least how Autumn Butterfly feels when she suddenly end up bumping into her ex-husband Apollo for the first time since their divorce eight years earlier.
Water Lily is only eight years old, and when your that little, it's hard to understand why your mother lock herself in her room and cry endlessly, especially if it is because of a father you never met.
Three ponies: a stallion, a mare and a foal. The mare and stallion know what's going on, and they need to solve the situation for the sake of said foal. Will it all work out in the end, or is it just going to bring more hurt to the hearts of these poor ponies?
Written for the OC contest in The Weekly contest group
Simply a lovely story <3
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Thank you! <3
6033004 Twas simply the truth <3
6033011 I believe you
I just found these small errors in the description:
ends up
when you're that small
And in the story:
cries
wasn't
Such a beautiful story, it really warmed my heart!
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Thank you for the corrections and I'm glad you enjoyed it
CONGRATULATIONS!
Your story now contains a theme song!
Theme from the Keam Production-United Artists Release ''TEACH ME TO TRUST AGAIN''
(Coffey) (JCP Music Corp., ASCAP/Daffodil Spark Music Co., BMI)
Adapted from the composition ''TRAUMLAND''
(Brighten-Hayhouse-Hee) (G.E.M.A., ASCAP)
A set of eight years has passed on
How long have I healed and moved on?
I've been turned down by the one man
Who mattered to me in this whole land
Teach me to trust again
Tell me that I can be happy again
Tell me I don't have to stay
Anymore in this misery and pain
Now my child is aged 8 years
And only knows her father through the tears
She has never met her father
And heartaches only traveled farther
Teach me to trust again
Tell me that I can be happy again
Tell me I don't have to stay
Anymore in this misery and pain
I have locked myself in her room
And I have cried endlessly to the moon
Only we know what has happened
We're haunted by a past flight with regret
Teach me to trust again
Tell me that I can be happy again
Tell me I don't have to stay
Anymore in this misery and pain
All we need to do is to resolve
The situation that has gone unresolved
We need to save ourselves from this mess
For our daughter's happiness
Teach me to trust again
Tell me that I can be happy again
Tell me I don't have to stay
Anymore in this misery and pain
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XD
Thank you wonderful as always
6036812 Thanks
Interesting plot line. The emotional states of the Autumn and Apollo runs deep and is highly relatable. Lily's reactions and behavior suit a young child going through this, and her reaction when she learns the truth is believable. Looking at how everything flowed together, it gives the impression that the writer has some experience or knowledge on the subject, which only stands to add to the quality of the piece.
Very good, I look forward to see how it fairs.
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Hi there
I am glad to hear you like it. I have, in fact, no personal experience with this kind of things, but I'm glad you think it seem that way and that you think it's a good piece
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6048423
Picking up where Alchemicgee left off, I think this story is pretty nice. And if I hadn't read the comments before reading the story would have though that there was an element of experience in it. Aside from a few punctuation and grammatical errors I found the story really enjoyable. Also I don't know if this was intentional but...
Nice reference...
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for getting my reference:
Oh, trust me, that reference was on purpose! You’re now getting 3
There are some grammar errors but two things I mainly don't understand. Why the husband left and why the song was so conveniently there.
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Yeah, the grammar errors is to be expected! I speak English as second language! ^_^
The father left because they pictured a very different future. Aka, they wanted different things for the family they were now going to have (Lilywas unplanned)
The song was there cuz I love it and it's my fanfic
6300964 Yea mine too.
I see interesting. Career vs children? Hmmm...
I mean why is it that we don't know where it comes from. Not the song itself. The song is awesome and I loved it, but it just seemed to air conveniently out of nowhere. I mean it would be logical if it was a radio or something.
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Oh, really?
Yeah, kind of. Apollo was a travelling musican, and wanted to keep traveling, while Autumn wished to settle down
Well,it IS mentioned afterwards that the somg was Apollo and Autumn's theme
6301086 Yea I'm Greek.
I see. I guess it didn't matter much to the fic? I initially though that one abandoned the other and that something harsher had been done.
I meant the source of the sound.
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wow...I'm Swedish
Well, nothing harsher. I imagaine it kind of being a spark that lead to a huge fight where they criticised EVERYTHING about eachother, which ended in a separation.
Huh?
6301129 I meant the source where the song sounded.
6301150 an LP player I believe it was said
6301155 Ah sorry i didn't notice.
6301157 well, now you know.
6301161 Oke! Hope you enjoy my story! If you do read.
6301248 I'll make sure to read
“Let us make one point, that we meet each other with a smile, when it is difficult to smile. Smile at each other, make time for each other in your family." ― Mother Teresa
wonderfully done, tugged at my heart strings the whole way through. my only question is how their little family will turn out, the answer quite simple only time will tell.
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Their familie's future will be good...
Did you win the contest?
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Actually, I did. The civer pictute on this fanfic was my reward!