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There once was a princess. her kingdome was the night, and all the dreams that dwell within it. True to her name, she would come to my dreams and sing me a lullaby. This princess is gone now. She went mad, and maybe that's what have happened to me too, because I know I'm going to be gone soon. Not that I care, but still....it's nice to think that I'll meet her again, soon.
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I haven't finished reading it yet, but I would like to give a suggestion: please get someone to edit this. I can't talk for the story itself quite yet, but I can say this: there are an alarming number of grammar issues in this story so far. Just a suggestion.
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Like said, this was made on one afternoon, and I'll definatly try and hail an editor! ^^
Big blue what?
Told who?
How is unnecessary.
Tighten.
Return doesn't need the E at the end.
Needs.
None, I'm assuming, but it's redundant to point out there was no emotion if you've already said the voice remained cold and emotionless.
Definition of a word should go in italics.
Peaks.
Guide.
Before.
Preferred.
Did, and drop the To next to it.
Didn't.
Was always.
Contained.
Hear.
From.
Fateful.
Princess'.
Broke.
Stars'.
Breathe.
Lullabies.
Fills.
Hasn't.
Stars.
Don't.
Fulfilled.
Hearts.
Thoughts.
I'm not really liking the repetition at the end of the sentence here.
Drops.
Looked.
Looked.
Shook.
Started.
Chin.
... burning a moment before freezing, the droplet freezing and forming into a crystal. Or something similar, assuming that was what you were trying to say there.
Embraced.
Gave.
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Thank, I'll inflict this changes into the story tomorrow. PM me if you got something for me to preread! ^^
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I'd rather you read my stories because you wanted to and not because you felt obligated to. Feel free to pick anything from my collection if you insist, however.
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I'd be happy to read and comment on any of your stories , and I'll make sure to do so when I have the time!
I really appriciate that you helped me with the story, and I hope you enjoyed it apart from the horrible grammar!
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I did. It was an interesting idea, and it'll look a lot better with some of those technical problems ironed out.
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Yay! Thanks again for your help!
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You're welcome.
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Finished editing, adding a thing both you and me missed the first time,
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Oh. What was that?
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Before editing, it said wing, as in one wing. But as you see, it should be wings as in many wings.
I also fixed an issue with using "her" about several ponies in that sentence which could possibly creat some confusion about exactly who I'm referring to.
Also, first time writing first person, yay!
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Ah, I didn't miss that, I just thought it was one wing being used for the hug was all.
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Anyway, good that I saw that. I imagine the filly standing in front of her grandmother, and when she start to cry, her grandmother wrap her wings around her and pull her closer to her body, hugging her.
Beautiful. Simply beautiful. Faved and liked
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Thanks. Glad you enjoyed it.
“You can love someone so much...But you can never love people as much as you can miss them.” ― John Green
“Ever has it been that love knows not its own depth until the hour of separation.” ― Kahlil Gibran
Though it brought tears to my eyes you did a wonderful job of expressing love in a time of loss, it was great to read all the way to the very end.
6532643 Thanks! ^_^ I would also like to invite you to read the sequel, Crystal tears that bloom to flowers
6532851 Thank you I will.
6533709 Thanks! ^_^
This was a good, short sad story. Seemingly Snowdrop gives up and leaves her daughter, and goes out into the snow - ready to give up.