Dark Flame was a young stallion of the mining village, Stonewall. But after a dragon thought to be of myth attacks, Dark becomes the only survivor and now attempts to remake his life. However, his past isn't willing to let him go so easily.
A human who dies in an infiltration mission, gets sent to Equestria unharmed and alive, but his body has been changed to adjust the magical world he calls home now. He'll do everything he can to fight for his new home world and keep it safe.
Sunset Shimmer after much thought returns to Equestria to redeem herself from her past. With the help of Twilight, can Sunset be forgiven for what she did?
5984277 well i suggest get a second editor, or dong upload any more chapters until your current editor looks at them. Its not bad, but the few problems are noticeable.
5984279 Will do I was actually about to work on the second chapter but if the errors are that noticeable then I'll stop posting until he edits this one. Thanks!
5984610 i just dont want to see you get criticized for noticeable errors. Dont be afraid to ask for more help. A lot of authors have more than one editor.
5984651 see, there ya go. Like i said, if you ever have concerns, worries or just need help, dont be afraid to ask. Thats what we do in the MLP community. We help each other out
5984941 sure I'll edit for you. I'll have this chapter finished by tonight. When its finished, I'll pm you and let you know. Just pm me your email and I'll email it to you when its done
5984946 I'll be working on the 2nd Chapter tonight then finish it up by Monday. Before I post I do double checks on each chapter so I can catch some major errors that will cause controversy.
5991429 Thank you, I actually took my time with that Chapter as I will take my time with the next one but I will let you in on something that is both shocking and not a surprise at the same time. Golden takes down Pinkie with an Arrow.
5991435 good thats what i like to hear. And omg! Im gonna love seeing that. I would delete that part of the comment though, so to keep it a surprise for everyone else
Your stories are awesome and very interesting and for Your next book I'd love to see twilight getting the upper hand (or is it hoof) when it comes to sunsets teasing and also would love to see what the mane 6 plus sunset would look like drunk (it would be really funny to see what they are like drunk )
No offense but I already found a few problems. If you dont mind me asking, do you have an editor? If not, i would be happy to help edit this for you.
5984144 Yes I do have one but he's working on the first story.
5984277 well i suggest get a second editor, or dong upload any more chapters until your current editor looks at them. Its not bad, but the few problems are noticeable.
5984279 Will do I was actually about to work on the second chapter but if the errors are that noticeable then I'll stop posting until he edits this one. Thanks!
5984610 i just dont want to see you get criticized for noticeable errors. Dont be afraid to ask for more help. A lot of authors have more than one editor.
5984617 Well I have one his name is Realm he edited the Prologue of the first story.
5984651 see, there ya go. Like i said, if you ever have concerns, worries or just need help, dont be afraid to ask. Thats what we do in the MLP community. We help each other out
5984657 Well if you can edit then while he edits the first story you edit this one. If you want to that is.
5984941 sure I'll edit for you. I'll have this chapter finished by tonight. When its finished, I'll pm you and let you know. Just pm me your email and I'll email it to you when its done
5984946 I'll be working on the 2nd Chapter tonight then finish it up by Monday. Before I post I do double checks on each chapter so I can catch some major errors that will cause controversy.
5986536 awesome
I can tell this will be an awesome story and I will gladly follow it.
5990214 Glad to hear. Not many people like a Love and War type story.
5990226 hey I am just a little curious will there be a book 3?
5990237 I will not release such a spoil until the time is right.
much much better. If there were any mistakes, i didnt catch them. I look forward to future chapters
5991429 Thank you, I actually took my time with that Chapter as I will take my time with the next one but I will let you in on something that is both shocking and not a surprise at the same time. Golden takes down Pinkie with an Arrow.
5991435 good thats what i like to hear. And omg! Im gonna love seeing that. I would delete that part of the comment though, so to keep it a surprise for everyone else
5991445 True but that's only a small portion of the next chapter.
5991464 that's true. Either way, i cant wait!
Great story /)
*gets blowtorch* Who do I give a blowtorch to the face
Sunset is right Celestia has always sent somepony else to fix major problems I wonder why?
The tension builds also if I was with them all I would take is a blowtorch the best weapon known to me
Why kill off Flash Sentry?!!!!!
Your stories are awesome and very interesting and for Your next book I'd love to see twilight getting the upper hand (or is it hoof) when it comes to sunsets teasing and also would love to see what the mane 6 plus sunset would look like drunk (it would be really funny to see what they are like drunk )
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ooh that'll be fun
but why
lol Flash Piercing and Golden betting also in just a few seconds went from serious assassin to trickster
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cuz it's his/her/attack helicopter's story and they get to choose
judging from pinkie in this story i think pinkie is a lethal weapon herself she'd annoy enemies to death
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not sure they have blowtorches do they even have lighters
yay! he's alive!
Wasn't there a 3rd story?
good series i can't wait to read the next one in the series