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nice begin
Yer uh wizard 'arry!
It could do with a few adjustments here and there in how some of it is phrased but for this not being your original language it's fairly good. 
4842397 I will do it as soon as I can. I promise :)
4842097 Thanks for beeing honest
. If you like you could send me a PM and tell me some examples where I went wrong. Would help me a lot.
4841921 Thank you
I am so sorry for the delay. I had some decent problems and after I finished the part I wasnt quiet happy with it and so the chapter is currently in rework status (75% done) so expect the next chapter soon.
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*check tags (Sex) (Mature) (tragedy)...*
This gonna be good.
5143998 Well THAT might be a bit early. xD I just imagined how it would/could feel for a pony to snuggle with a hairless monkey (or what else we would be called in such a world)
Be patient
5144046
But...seem he really young, he just a child.
are you sure he will...you know?
5144053 No no no. Not as a child. Definetly a No-GO for me. But well I have plans and ideas. The Sex-Tag is just for the future (will take some time but I added the tag before since the readers have to know where this story goes)
5144065
*Check first chap. 9 weeks*
I see..
So how long will get to chapter 3?
I know you are German but, does that mean will cost alot weeks and month?
5144076 No. The cause for the long delay were some circumstances in my life. I am not sure how fast I am about to finish the next one but you could say.... not longer then one month at max.
5144086 I see, good luck, i will check you story soon.
Those story sound like fairy tail and Lovely.
but, You talk like my sensei. in training day.
5143998
Robert is becoming a man soon
I'm gonna have to finish the chapter later but do you want a proof reader?
Pinkie Pie, not Pinky Pie
mmmmmm love it
Pinkie, not Pinky
No, you're not the holders
5218114 Sry I dont know why I keep doing this. .... probably stupid Word and I am unable to see it.
Thank you that you remind me of it. I will try to do better in the future.
This is a really good story so far, though i have one problem with it, and that is it seems you are trying to write in a perspective that is younger than you are, by a good bit, and that makes the character seem way too mature for his age, especially only being in 6th grade, and also i would suggest asking someone who knows English as a primary language to proofread this, just to help fix any small oddities that there might be.
5224731 thank you a lot for the critism. I am glad that you enjoy my story, even if it has its flaws. To write Robert correctly is not easy and I try to stay true to his age. Like when he was afraid to sleep alone or the fears when he reached Equestria but all in all you are right.
I appreciate your comment a lot and I will try my best to improve myself and I will take on the offer of a proofreader
this is a great story please keep writing more
MOAR!!!!!
LOLOLOLOLOL DAT PILLOW FIGHT DO
5355571 Did you like it?
5355708 Of course xD I thought it was hilarious
lol i loved it ! waiting for the next chapter
OBS: poor robert, he has no rest
Fantastic story for a beginner.
Welcome to FimFiction!
Have yet to read this but from the comments it seems this showed a lot of potential. Favoriting so i can come back to it when i'm not as busy.
5359085 glad you liked it :) I hope to mantain the quality and even improve it
5358302 you really think so? Awesome :) thanks
5359085 Well I don´t know about the potential but I try to make a good story
Thank you all for your comments
I am finding this story to be vary interesting to say the lest I will be weighting for the next chapter.
Awesome story so far you are doing great
Good story so far. Keep it up and keep 'em coming.
CHANGE PLACES!
I hope we get to see more fluff moments with him and the girls
I loved it!, i hope the next chapters to be good like this.
I am liking this story I made a decision to reread for the beginning for a refresher and I am glad I did.
this story is vary good it seams to be building yet and putting al the player in to play before the mane story hits.
I will be watching this vary closely as I think this is going to turn in to a rather good story.
yes it is a hie story but it different at the same time.
if any thing I would make the chapters a bit shorter maybe let of at a cliffhanger.
I say keep going you are doing a good job Blackfox1990.
happy righting and pony on
Harts Fire
Thank you all for the nice reviews/comments so far.
I will gladly work to improve myself and give you even greaters chapters in the future (hopefully
)
hum school is in.
it looks as if we have our fist test in the form of a nightmare.
Harts Fire
well I go back to school in exactly 4 weeks so I would probably prefer the shorter chapters
Just don't kill off the mane six and we're good, lol. Good job. This story is progressing rather nicely. And I loved Discord's rather hilarious/breath of relief interference.
It must suck to have your problems and possible encounters trivialized just because you're rather young.