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  • A Hearth's Warming Romance
    Sparity for Hearth's Warming with Twilight antics.

    5,018 words · 5,495 views · 441 likes · 6 dislikes
  • Love Makes Fools of Us All
    Sweetie Belle helps Rarity realize she acted too quickly about Spike.
    2,002 words · 3,731 views · 256 likes · 7 dislikes
  • Tricks and Treats with Spike and Rarity
    Rarity and Spike attempt to prank Rainbow Dash in revenge on Nightmare Night.
    2,611 words · 2,560 views · 162 likes · 4 dislikes
  • A Harvest Feast to Remember
    Celestia invites Spike and Rarity, plus her family, to have Harvest Feast at the castle. If only it was ever that easy.
    3,692 words · 1,387 views · 134 likes · 3 dislikes
  • Eternal
    26,528 words · 4,063 views · 286 likes · 18 dislikes
  • The Balance
    36,550 words · 1,897 views · 144 likes · 9 dislikes
  • 30 Minute Sparity
    5,788 words · 1,680 views · 91 likes · 6 dislikes

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#1 · Chapter 1 · 114w, 1d ago · · ·

I'm aware it has some grammatical issues but none that are making it the slightest bit unreadable.

That being said I'd love to know what you guys think about it. It's my first time writing clop but I really like how it turned out. :moustache::heart::raritywink:

#2 · Chapter 1 · 114w, 22h ago · · ·

Aside from some grammar errors, this is really good. Sparity forever! :moustache::heart::raritystarry:

#3 · Chapter 1 · 114w, 22h ago · · ·

Not bad for for a first attemp:pinkiehappy: but the whole two dicks is just a little too wierd even for clop:eeyup:

#4 · Chapter 1 · 114w, 22h ago · · ·

>>595584 actually a number of lizards have double phallus apparently. Theirs a few other Spike clop fics that use this little factoid the best of which is probably Like Fine Wine . So yea between that, the tongue, and the fact he has finger/claws its safe to assume Dragons are the single greatest gift Luna has given to mare kind.

#5 · Chapter 1 · 114w, 22h ago · · ·

>>595581 :eeyup: In order to meet my little "out before I surrender my week to Diablo 3" deadline I had to forsake having it proofread.

That being said it took seven and a half hours for this thing to get through submission so I'm assuming their really backed up.

#6 · Chapter 1 · 114w, 22h ago · · ·

Aww, that is Sooo sweet and Romantic:applecry::fluttercry::fluttershysad::twilightsmile::raritywink::heart::moustache:

#7 · Chapter 1 · 114w, 21h ago · · ·

>>595631 That's weird. My new story took only I believe like 30 minutes to an hour to be accepted.

#8 · Chapter 1 · 114w, 21h ago · · ·

>>595635 and kinky!

#9 · Chapter 1 · 114w, 21h ago · · ·

>>595638 my last one did to but apparently they didn't have any mods on till later in the evening yesterday so they had a huge list to go through.

#10 · Chapter 1 · 114w, 21h ago · · ·

>>595643 So what do you plan to go back and edit this story?

#11 · Chapter 1 · 114w, 21h ago · · ·

I hate Sparity fics, but well, this was quite good.

#12 · Chapter 1 · 114w, 21h ago · · ·

>>595623 I agree completly and thanx for the fact i pride myself on knowing as much about animals as possible and that i truley didnt know... :twilightsmile: but yea it did add to the clop a bit to:eeyup:

#13 · Chapter 1 · 114w, 21h ago · · ·

It really is an excellent story!!!:pinkiehappy::twilightsmile:

#15 · Chapter 1 · 114w, 21h ago · · ·

>>595681 I'm gonna let the first part of that go cause I like the second part.

>>595674 Maybe, kinda depends if I can find a proofreader the overall content won't change it'll just get cleaner grammatically . Less run on sentences basically better comma use that kinda thing.

>>595683 Happy to inform :moustache:

>>595691 :rainbowwild:

>>595698 :raritywink:

I can tell you lot are gonna really love the other none one-shot  Clopfic I'm writing

#16 · Chapter 1 · 114w, 21h ago · · ·

>>595710 *laughing* I don't even know. I'm a go with yes.

#17 · Chapter 1 · 114w, 21h ago · · ·

>>595718 Okay then.

#19 · Chapter 1 · 114w, 19h ago · · ·

>>595855 Spike and Rarity seemed pretty into it to.

#20 · Chapter 1 · 114w, 18h ago · · ·

:pinkiecrazy:yesh, very delicious

#21 · Chapter 1 · 114w, 18h ago · · ·

>>596289 I'm a go lock my doors now.

#22 · Chapter 1 · 114w, 18h ago · · ·

>>596293

Level 100 lockpicking!:pinkiecrazy:

#23 · Chapter 1 · 114w, 18h ago · · ·

>>596300 ha! it takes lvl 525 lock picking to open my door.

#24 · Chapter 1 · 114w, 17h ago · · ·

>>596310

I meant the windows :pinkiecrazy:

#25 · Chapter 1 · 114w, 17h ago · · ·

>>596491... well played. *pulls out broad swords* my turn!

#26 · Chapter 1 · 114w, 16h ago · · ·

Holy fuckballs...

#27 · Chapter 1 · 114w, 16h ago · · ·

>>596758 I'm gonna take that as a good thing. :trollestia:

#28 · Chapter 1 · 114w, 16h ago · · ·

What the heck is with the two penis thing?:fluttershbad: Only thing that bothered me

#29 · Chapter 1 · 114w, 15h ago · · ·

>>596866 Some reptiles have two (not sure why to be fair) and it just makes the whole thing kinkier don't you think :raritywink: Plus all the fun of double penetration without having to share :moustache: <-- is the man.

#30 · Chapter 1 · 114w, 15h ago · · ·

Hello, I'm Venatus75, and I'll be your editor today!  I just thought I'd post this to let you know, and edit my corrections into it later.  

#31 · Chapter 1 · 114w, 15h ago · · ·
#33 · Chapter 1 · 114w, 13h ago · · ·

>>597560 and as their brains melt my CONQUEST OF THIS WORLD SHALL BE COMPLETE! :yay:

#34 · Chapter 1 · 114w, 13h ago · · ·

OH SWEET MERCIFUL JESUS, IT’S OVER!  NOW I CAN GO BACK AND CLOP TO IT- I MEAN READ IT THROUGH!   Haha, I really liked the story, but there are quite a few issues that need to be addressed.  Please note my massive amount of usage of words like perhaps and maybe.  These are SUGGESTIONS, and I am NOT an English major or anything.  In fact, I’m still in high school.  Take these as you will, but please do not be offended.  I do not mean to hurt you, only help you.  I hope you can take these 2 hours of my time to help your writing skills!  I wish you luck, and don’t be afraid to let me know if you require anything else edited, though I think I’m out for today.   Two hours is a while, and I plan on doing some stuff like, I don’t know… eating?  Haha, either way, I enjoyed this, and I hope you’re happy with almost THREE THOUSAND words of corrections.  :D

The edits are now in a PM to you.  For those of you just randomly seeing this comment, before the first paragraph of this comment, there were just under three thousand words of edits.  Your welcome for fixing up your comment page!

#35 · Chapter 1 · 114w, 13h ago · · ·

>>597590 Well I'd be happier if you PM'd the corrections to me gonna kind throw off other commenters with the whole fic in a comment below. I would suggest removing the actual edits and story but leaving the last paragraph with your exasperation lol. I do enjoy the comments :pinkiehappy: You took 2 hours of you life to assist me so I'm not in the least bit offended by any corrections/suggestions. Thank you for your assistance *bow*.

#36 · Chapter 1 · 114w, 13h ago · · ·

>>597632

Yes, that MAY have been a better idea.  I'll fix it now, lol.

#37 · Chapter 1 · 114w, 13h ago · · ·

>>597663 Yea its a tad bit intimidating :fluttercry:

I also have to leave shortly so I might not have a chance to implicate the suggestions until tonight

#38 · Chapter 1 · 114w, 13h ago · · ·

>>597674

Oh, that's quite alright!

#39 · Chapter 1 · 114w, 13h ago · · ·

Just one question... is Spike still supposed to be at his usual size from the show?

If so, how does he fit a pair of super-stallion sized schlongs into any portion of his anatomy, even flaccid?

#40 · Chapter 1 · 114w, 13h ago · · ·

>>597762 Yea I didn't really specify that for a reason. Chock it up to dragon anatomy if you want him to be the same size if you're more comfortable making him teenage size (greed spike stage 2 size) go for it I left it open ended for a reason. The only thing you really have to know is that he can sit down so she can bend over :raritywink:

Personally the cover art I used gives him a nice size if you ask me.

#41 · Chapter 1 · 114w, 10h ago · · ·

>>596520

Summon creeper! Attack, my pet!

Zay
#42 · Chapter 1 · 114w, 10h ago · · ·

That was amazing. I am speechless beyond those words. :x

#43 · Chapter 1 · 114w, 10h ago · · ·

>>598739 Stop summoning superheros like Jack Rider!

>>598742 Yea I'm awesome :ajsmug:

#44 · Chapter 1 · 114w, 9h ago · · ·

“You are to address me as Master!”

"yes..Spike are you ok?" Spike was cluching his head.

"can't you hear them?"

"the what?"

"THE DRUMS!!!!!"

"Uh Spike?"

"IT IS THE MASTER!! dum dum dum dum" Spike taped his claws on his legs in a beat of four...

#45 · Chapter 1 · 114w, 8h ago · · ·

>>599171 was that a Dr. Who reference?

#46 · Chapter 1 · 114w, 8h ago · · ·
#47 · Chapter 1 · 114w, 7h ago · · ·
#48 · Chapter 1 · 114w, 6h ago · · ·

ahhhghhhh.....ahhhh...ahhh. NOICE, whiteness all over!

#49 · Chapter 1 · 114w, 6h ago · · ·

Nice ^_^ :raritystarry:

#50 · Chapter 1 · 114w, 6h ago · · ·
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