This is a triumph. I'm making a note here: Huge success.

Lemons are only good when they're written with class, and this fic has a lot of class. Five stars.

Um....WOW. This is really good. Though I have to ask, why is Cherrilee and possibly Pinkie Pie dead in this? It's not right.

I also loved how Rarity reacted not only two spike having two you know whats, but also being able to go on as long as he wants.

Me gusta

Ever notice that no one uses their real username when commenting on a clopfic no matter the subject or how well it's written.

That being said, you took a popular shipping pair and whereas most people would have gone straight to the nitty gritty and made a straight forward clopfic, you created something deeper and meaningful. Instead of making the filthiest story imaginable you sir built it up, threw in some light comedy, gave it true emotional pathos, created a breathing world and actually made the reader care about those involved in said relationship. Yes, it has the standard gratuitous sex scene associated with the rating. However, to call it just a clopfic would be an insult to you.

Side note: Please chop this story up into smaller chapters to avoid scaring future readers away.  

Peace Out.  

To summarize:    I loved it.  Immensely.

>>3348233482

Doesn't worry me in the slightest.

Absolutely wonderful.  Writing was great, emotions and humor all well presented.

>>3348233482

This actually is my Username, I'm just not registered to FiMFiction.

SleeplessBrony you are...just....amazing. The way you write your characters is so unbelievably convincing, the way they convey their feelings is just wonderful. Everything feels right, nothing contrived. Few people can hold my attention enough to read 20k words in one go. Every bit as well written as RR.

Minor minor typo "They’re eyes meet and they both look away instantly"

Wow. I don't think I have much to add that hasn't already been said. You are just an incredible writer. Your stories should be published as books or something. Seriously, you should look into it.

Also, I'm slightly curious as to what happened to the rest of the mane six in this story. I will admit you did a wonderful job of keeping the details of that minor, while still sating the more pressing questions. At the right times too, without it feeling forced. Like, for instance, not explicitly revealing it was Pinkie Pie who died until later. Can we hear anything about them as they are in this universe as far as you've thought them out?

Thank you for writing this.   SO MUCH!

Five stars. All of them well earned. I'd give you a sixth, but...

Im going to be honest... I think clop-fics ruin my innocence and are the true face of depravity.

But I'm going to favorite this because it is really entertain...in a non-sextual way......

I really hope you consider a sequel to this story.. maybe something about how Rarity other past suitors react to Spike and Spikes reaction to Rarity being a whore in the past.

Dammint now I have a piture in my head about Spike going all possesive on her...

Great story....Your going to hell though.  

Don't worry though all the decent one go there anyway....see you there

Holy shit, SleeplessBrony you are a GOD  

Sooo..... sequel plz, maybe even have him either make find or craft an engagement ring or something when he gets back from some aggressive diplomatic mission with twilight

Sooo..... sequel plz, maybe even have him either make find or craft an engagement ring or something when he gets back from some aggressive diplomatic mission with twilight   

Stupid smartphones taking too long to show up text whatever happened to the mobile version of this site

A damn fine romance. Loved the part with Rarity being curious about Twilight and Spikes duties to the princess. Thanks for the great read.

Wait what about sweetybell she had to hear shrieks moans and stuff like dat even if she were asleep

Hey, you gave Spike a hemi too! Good to see I'm not the only one!

I seriously need some writing lessons.

I do believe Shrinky Frod put it best. That story was all kinds of awesome

I do believe Shrinky Frod put it best. That story was all kinds of awesome

Again, obviously an excellent job. I don't need to tell you, though, since there are obviously so many others praising you for me.

Few things:

1) USE COMMAS IN DIALOG. Too often, I see this:

"I'm sorry.” She says.

It should be

"I'm sorry," she says.

Remember that if you use a period, the phrase that comes after it will be read like a complete sentence. Same goes for interior monologue. Instead of:

No, it can't be like that. She thought.

You would say:

No, it can't be like that, she thought.

2) Watch the tense

She's resting against him now, comfortable in her fresh bed.  She tossed her bathrobe off right away – the whole bed is warm, heat wafting into her from his rising and falling chest.

This is past tense intermingled with present tense. DON'T DO THAT!

Also, it's jarring when you suddenly switched to past tense in the final scene. If you're going to do that, at least make the entire scene last in past tense, instead of switching back to present halfway through.

3) Clarification

“Heh...not really.  Twilight asked me once to...”

He jolts and stammers, rubbing the back of his neck.  Rarity shakes her head, blinking.

“...What?!”

“Duh...I mean...jeez, she's gonna kill me.  She made me promise not to tell.”

Rarity just gawks at him.

“I guess this is payback for when she told everyone I had a crush on you, huh?”

Rarity continues to gawk at him.

“...What?!”

“It was...it was right after.  You know.”

Rarity's mouth snaps shut.

“...oh.” She says.  “Oh my.”

By putting that first bold line in there, it makes it sound like you've switched subjects and are now talking about Twilight telling everyone about Spike's crush. I did a double-take a few times before I realized Rarity and Spike were still talking about what Twilight asked. When I read the second bold line, I imagined Pinkie Pie inside the mirror, telling Twilight she shouldn't have spilled the beans about Spike. It didn't make much sense.

4) Ellipses

This is a personal preference. I used to type my ellipses the way you do now, but many of the reviewers, pre-readers, and more sophisticated writers prefer to put a space after each ellipse. I've adopted that technique myself and find that it works quite well.

One advantage of adding a space is that if you have a long list of single words broken only by ellipses, the computer will treat this as one word. However, if you place a space after each ellipse, the computer will naturally break them up and "wrap" the line to look much cleaner.

I'm usually not one for reading the more mature oriented writing, but i have to say now that i've read this one i might start looking for more, very well writen and thought out.

If you could, more stories (of diffrent pairings) would be very much appreciated

...Wow........... That was Great!!!!! beautifully detailed, well written, and an almost poetic ending. i could picture Teenage Spike as clear as day when reading this. i felt so sorry for twilight... *sniff* i would literally pay you to write a sequel if wasn't already broke

That was amazing. TY for the great read

BRAVO BRAVO you are clearly a writer with beauty in your heart and lust in you lower region. i say much luck to you in all your goals.

Yours are the only clopfics I read completely.

But it's more than just a clopfic. It feels alive, on it's own.

umm... wow   *blushes*

Well that was just great. Romance Reports and now this? You are a very delightful artist.

Glorious.

>>6043860438

What that guy said.

I have linked this in the MCF thread due to a well done writing job!

Good work on your part and much embarrasment ensues due to the, lets just say "Messy" parts XD

Damn that was superb amazing piece of work i D'awwwwwed and the end with the list part

The clop itself doesn't even give this a place in my top 10 clop-fics, but the story behind it puts it at atleast 5th place. Kudos to you for being one of the few to add more story than sex to a clop-fic.

What the fuck? The story says Cheerilee dies, and people on the comments are saying Pinkie Pie dies, can SOMEONE FUCKING EXPLAIN WHAT HAPPENED?

Reads the part about cupcakes.*

HOW THE FUCK...DID THIS HAPPEN...WHERE'S CHEERILEE IN ALL OF THIS...WHAT...THE....FUCK!!!

Has a massive heart attack.*

'Nuff said.

Wha...? What happened to the rating? This was at 5.0 for the longest time, and now it's down below 4? How? Spike/Rarity fans who went looking for stories after "Secrets of My Excess" and didn't expect this?

This was a triumph

Making a note here: HUGE SUCCESS

Finally a word between the issues!

I was forgotten,

I was left.  Alone.  Too long.

Then you came and washed away my sadness.

Heart of my hearts,

Made up of scale, and bone, and tears.

Don't go away just come and stay beside me.

Stay beside me.

stay beside me.

I don't want to be alone.

poetry!

Poetry is as poetry does!  You my good friend deserve a hulking heap of praise.  I bow before you and wish to finish reading the rest of your works.  

PS!!!!     CHEESE!

CHEESE!

I bow my head. A great read.

Fantastic modifications. Gets better eveytime I read it.

Oooooh. I just re-read this after you made the modifications. I had actually forgotten how incredibly powerful this story is. The part with Rarity wearing the gem that Spike gave her was really sweet. And that whole awkward teenager part, after Spike confesses his love, but before the sex... Some parts of that are just so funny. You add a little bit of every element in your stories to make a perfect mix of imagination fuel. Please continue writing, SleeplessBrony, so we may further enjoy the wonderful worlds you think of.

I don't understand how this can only be three stars.

There's something about your stories that conveys emotion very well, and I really enjoy that. Thank you.

Um, I think in the re-formatting you may have accidentally center-aligned the entire story. It's... not very readable, that way.

>>7238772387

Fixed.  Very weird, apparently the "import from google docs" option adds a bunch of

>>7244172441

Ha!  That's what I get for commenting on no sleep at all.

>>7244472444

It's almost like a meta-commentary on the tag snafu itself.

Now go get some rest. :P

>>7209572095 As I said, I don't get it, and in fact I believe somebody is deliberately downvoting SleeplessBrony's stories, seeing as all of them have taken a nosedive ratings-wise over the last few weeks. "Need" at 1.9? Seriously? Someone out there doesn't like you very much, Sleepless...

Huh. Now the rating seems to be back to where it was before. Curiouser and curiouser.

Sorry to bring this up, but i notice you still put "gentleman" where I'm pretty sure you meant "gentlecolt". Maybe you did that on purpose. Anyway, awesome stuff dude! Top Marks!

Okay, a few comments on inconsistencies or other stuff I've noticed (see, I can do more than whine about bad ratings for great stories):

-"He hugs it to her chest, amusing her."

From the flashback to "A Dog and Pony Show", this should read "to his chest".

-"there's no small dangly thing in the back of his throat, for one."

Granted, this is incredibly nitpicky, but when did he lose that? It's definitely there in the Big No he gives in "A Dog and Pony Show".

- "She leans her arms and chest on him"

Arms? Shouldn't that be "forelegs"? I can understand not wanting to sound repetitive, but this still breaks immersion somewhat.

-"her whole being yawning in anticipation"

I'm admittedly not a native speaker of English, so this might be a metaphor or figure of speech I haven't encountered, but is "yawning" really the right word here? "Yearning" seems more appropriate to me; "yawning in anticipation" actually sounds like an oxymoron.

-"She grips his arms tightly with her own, holding her breath."

Similar problem as above; Rarity doesn't have arms.

-"Rarity turns her torso, wrapping Spike's neck in her arms and pinning him to her."

Oh look, that makes it three.

-A general thing I noticed: with the added reference to the ruby from "Secret of My Excess", why is there no mention of Spike's first attempt at declaring his feelings to Rarity? Though that is easily justified, seeing as how long ago that was from Rarity's perspective.

Those issues are incredibly minor, though. This story manages to keep in-character while exploring themes the show, by its very nature, can't deal with. It manages to be touching (the Cheerilee pendant, Rarity's problems with aging, and especially the scene with the sapphire), funny ("You have TWO?" and "Eggs?!" come to mind ) and, yes, incredibly arousing, but it's miles away from "just another clopfic". Kudos, SleeplessBrony, and as some others have already said: Sequel? Pretty please? I for one would love to see, say, Silky Smooth or anyone from "the List" try to get close to Rarity again *ahem* and then realize who she's dating now.

One final note on Rarity's feelings as they're described here: I got the impression, both from her not being that scared and from the quality of the lovemaking, that she actually loves Spike without realizing it (or at least without admitting it to herself) - and that this is actually the first time this has happened to her, or it has been a long time since she felt something like that. The last line cements that impression for me. If that was intentional, even more kudos - and if not, no two people will read a story the same way, especially one dealing with emotions like these.

In short: Thank you.

To call this porn, clopfic, or perverted would insult you. This was genius! Me and my girlfriend loved it! (don't judge me for reading this with my girlfriend) Its not just the author saying lets make this sex as filthy as possible you said lets not do a sex scene lets do a love making scene. Sex is meaningless without love and you brought the love and if you would make a sequel that would be amazing!

The talks about Cheerile confused the shit out of me. I missa story? I already read Romance Reports, and in one go I might add, but there another one I missed? Great work BTW loved both this an Romance Reports.

>>9610896108 No, you didn't miss anything. The mention of Cheerilee is in there (if you allow me to speculate) to establish a link between this fic and Romance Reports, and to add a little background texture.

>>9620096200 Hmm . . .  Now I debate whether to ask Brony to make a new story on that. My problem is, there wasn't any real details as to what might've happened. So I can guess at two real possibilities there, she either died somehow, most likely in some accident or another, or they broke up, and it was kinda nasty. Given Brony's M.O [Motive and Opportunity] I'd stake a wager he could build a story in which that break up was coming and expecting, to us at least. But I'm not sure if I'd want to read a story with Cheerile dieing, but I would end up reading anyway, juts I ended up reading Friendship is Tragic. That story ruined my whole day, made me all sad and stuff BUt it was VERY well writen, almost as good as Brony's stories here. It was a lot on the dark-side of things, I'm going to go ahead and stop there, before I spoil anything to someone who hasn't read that yet. Which, they should, even despite it's dark nature, it really was worth the read.

>>9656896568 My guess would be she's dead. Rarity and Spike's behavior points to someone who's dead, not someone who just up and left - they're sad, not angry (and why would Spike miss someone who hurt Twilight?). In particular, Rarity's line about "we all miss her, she was lovely" (not a direct quote, it's in the restaurant scene) points that way. As to why - well, this IS several decades in the future from Romance Reports. People (and ponies) die.

But I agree, the time period between Romance Reports and Like Fine Wine would make for some interesting story opportunities, particularly considering how Spike describes his post as Twilight's partner. More "Adventure" than "Romance", but certainly worthwhile if it matches the quality standards set by Sleepless' other works.

>>9676796767Amen to that. And yes, I'd have to agree with you on the fact she's dead. I do hope Sleepless fills in the blanks with more badassness. Regardless of the tags, I'd read it if it's from him. I stay away from stories tagged Dark ever since I read Friendship is Tragic, awesome story, very well written, but, well, refer to my previous comment about that. But if Sleepless did it, I'd bunker down, and trudge on through the trenches to read it.

This fic nearly gave me a coronary.

I... Have a hard time forming words. No not even words. Opinions.

I'm not sure if I liked it.

I know I found it completely uncloppable.

No. It wasn't bad, it's just so far beyond anything I was expecting or have experience with. Not just the clop, the entire story.

All I can say is I felt sad, then bittersweet, than warm, then freaked the fuck out, then REALLY freaked the fuck out, then sad again, then mildly aroused, then freaked the fuck out again, then completely horrified, then just I don't even know what to call it... Then I was sad it was over.

I mean this went from one of the saddest fics I have ever read, to sweet, romantic shipping, to terror fetish (I did not realize this existed. I understood what it was immediately, but you showed me something completely beyond my experience, which I did not realize was even possible.), to extreme penetration, to brutal extreme double penetration, to total after coitus freak out (which I was theoretically familiar with, just not expecting AT ALL).

I think I actually hated a lot about this fic, not in a "feels bad" way but in a "that's not my fetish" and "this story makes me bawww" way; but wow, what an intense experience.

Oh, also I hope this is just one possible alternate future. If this is canon to Romance Reports I may not be able to read future installments in that universe.

my reaction while reading this:

oh god no  a spike rarity clopfic. why?

but its by the guy who did romance reports so  ill guess i'll read it

oh this is really well written

oh shit now im thinking back to my own teenage crush..

wow this is like emotionally moving and deep ..

oh umm huh....

i have the weirdest boner right now....

why am i clopping to this?

aww even the ending is sweet!.

but seriously, you have major league writing ability . congratulations.

This was an epic read! I wish I could give it a thousand stars!

Upon re-reading this (I make a point of doing that at least once a week, if only to remind myself of what standards writing in this fandom can and should aspire to), I noticed a strange simile: At one point, Spike's teeth are described as "big as steak knives". Since this story is told from Rarity's point of view, I have a question: how would a herbivore know that simile?

No, I, what? Why did I not read these sooner? Uh. Yeah. Sorry, but still all I've got is: Holy Shit.

>>136477136477

Well, the steak knifes aren't necessarily used for just steaks, so it could just be a comparision.

But I see what you mean.

We found this fiction to be of great quality and entertainment.

Bravo.

Just beautiful. This was the first pony fan fic I ever read, and I admit, I was drawn in because of the clopfic premise. This is so much more, though. You perfectly captured each character's personality, especially Rarity. Absolutely fantastic from start to finish!

>>7710777107 The correct name for a horse's front legs is "arms." Which reminds me of my own fanfic anatomy nitpick: it's not a snout, it's a muzzle, damnit.

Nitpicking aside, "Romance Reports" was one of the first fanfics I ever read, and it made me realize that fanfics could (and should) live up to the standard of quality of any other form of fiction writing. Any of Sleepless' stuff is better than a lot of books I've read, and I love every word of it. Except snout.

>>158231158231 Okay, that's interesting, didn't know that. But my point still stands - if I didn't know that horses' forelegs are called "arms", a lot of other people won't know that either (and I've seen quite a few complaints of this kind on other fanfics). Then again, as I said, this is a minor quibble - similar to your snout/muzzle dilemma, and that one would be even more complicated to resolve in this fic, since you can legitimately use "snout" in Spike's case.

Sleepless, you magnificent bastard! That was faaaantastic! I can't wait for your future works!

Starting to read it...

This is a clopfic... why so much story ?

Hmm.. this definitely reminds me of something. . .

Why is Twilight wearing that pendant ?

Meanwhile, finishing reading it.

I see the author again... Wait a minute... he wrote Romance Reports !

That necklace Twilight was wearing...  She loved Cheerille. She really did. That WAS love.

Great fic ! I wish my writing was as good as yours. Just amazing !

Oh my...

SleeplessBrony, you are the greatest romance writer of all time.

Seriously, there is only one word to describe this fic, ORGASMIC!

BTW, your stuff is so good, I printed out the entire Romance Reports, as well as this, and got it bound.

Okay, nitpick alert again:

"He collapses onto her, and now she really can't breath."

That, unless I'm mistaken (and I'm never mistaken - your Princess Bride quote for the day ), should be "breathe", as in the verb.

>>224451224451

A lot of people seem to make that mistake. That and "light(e)ning".

Amazingly well done I must say. The best clop fic I've come across. Though I'm curious about why Pinky Pie and the other pony (forgot her name) are dead. I think you should do a follow up fanfic. Like this with more character development between Spike and Rarity. And the idea that Spike won't get any bigger because he's a rare type/breed of dragon and he was hatched with magic.

All in all 5 Stars!!!

>>229242229242 I've noticed that, too. And the "breath/breathe" thing actually appears at least twice in this fic, from what I can tell. It is an easy mistake to make.

AWWWW~!!!! That was the sweetest, most romantic story involving death and vomit that I've ever read! I hope you continue tis; I'd LOVE to see Twilight's reaction... Or if Celestia finds out~

On the critical perspective, I notice you used "breath" instead of "breathe" at least three times:

she can't even breath

remembering to breath

she really can't breath

Like a BAWWWS

See, this, and Romance Reports, are both shining examples of how a story containing "adult" themes should by no means be thought less of than others, or judged differently.  You don't have to skirt certain subjects to write a beautiful story.

I read this before I was registered on FIMFiction, and I need to say:

THIS. IS. A. FABULOUS. FIC.

That is all. *slow clap*

I normally avoid clopfics like the plague but it seems I've read every single Spike <3 Rarity (my favorite topic) story so I've begun to delve into the mature content here that relates to them.  I must say with most other clopfics I skip ALL of the sexual parts because they seem either unrealistic, or just too focused on the actual act and not the personalities of the ponies that are performing it.  I must say however that this is the first that I've read that actually has an actual story to it (trying to refrain from using the word "plot" ) and not just some FiM characters fucking constantly for stupid reasons.  Another spectacular thing about this particular fic is that I actually read the part that deals with their lovemaking.  I did skip that part on the first passthrough but after reading the spectacular non-sexual parts, I decided that I owed you at least a full readthrough, sex and all.  My first impressions on the actual scene was "Oh here we go again," but that thought quickly faded as I found that you actually added more to the sex than just insert penis here, ram hard, jizz and I again applaud you for that in itself.  This single piece alone has renewed my hope for the "Mature" content about FiM and I have decided to permanently check that little box so that I may hopefully find more Spike <3 Rarity fics that are even 1/2 as detailed and well written as yours.

PS If you make more about these two I will definitely read them

This story was very impressive, it had a strong plot and a good speed so as to not seem forced. I'm a fan of clopfics but I really hate when they're obnoxiously written and to quote the first commenter "this fic has class." This fiction shows a lot of talent, time taken in detail, and a level of maturity rarely seen on this type of fiction. I'd have to give it 5 stars if I were to be giving an honest opinion. I rarely see any Spike/Rarity stories worth reading, so if you make any more I will gladly follow them. Keep it up.

#65 - Needs more pumpkins...

Voting Thumbs Up!

I wonder where my comment went. Good thing I saved it. I guess the "truth" is easier to take when they all agree with you.

"Yeah, making Rarity a cock sock was such a good idea. We know that she holds herself in a very high regard, so it makes sense that she throws herself at every stallion possible before the fic happened. We know that she strides for the best (and likes Canterlot) so it makes sense that she's a slut with names in a black book. And her being afraid of Spike? Genius. Never mind the fact that she kicked a manticore in the face without so much as a blink of hesitation, and wasn't even a little bit scared of the red dragon in that Fluttershy episode. It was completely in character. And Spike has wings apparently. And Pinkie Pie and Cheerily are dead. That was smart. And having several thousands words devoted to her talking in circles and having being described what a dick inside her feels like. Because I didn't get it the few dozen times before it.

Seriously, that fic was written by the MLP version of Tom Preston with the subtleties of a CAD comic. You're all stupid."

I'm just going to go ahead and publicly state that I have never, nor will ever, delete comments.

I guess the one exception would be spam, but I'm not going to delete any actual comments just because they're negative.

So, go ahead!  Post some scathing critiques!

And thanks for reading!

>>463024463024 Your user icon cools out my rage like a bucket of water on a lit match.

To the Author: I approve of this story. I have to admit, this story is probably what put me firmly in the Older Spike/Rarity camp for couplings. I know that, personally, I would be interested in more from this setting. Not just Spike/Rarity, but some of the history they spoke of. It also made me feel classy, yet naughty. Good job.

>>462279462279

On that, we will disagree. It's fine for a lady like Rarity to have delved into her more carnal nature. It's a case of accepting her own sexuality. It never really says how many lovers were taken, but this is over the course of, I would assume, to be 15 or more years. That is a -long- time to build up one's "little black book". Also, I don't get why if a lady does this sort of behavior, she's a "slut", but if a MAN does this, he's a "player" or a "pimp" or simply just "ladykiller"/"ladies man". Why is it good for the man, yet bad for the woman?

You could have also mentioned Rarity dealing with the full grown dragon in episode 6, however, there is a similarity in that case AND the that of the manticore. When Rarity got roared at from point blank range, she got the hell out of dodge. She isn't fearless. And she doesn't have to be.

Thank you for the insult at the end of your comment, too. Quite high brow. Please, feel free to critique the story, but I think it'd be best if you refrained from taking shots at the other readers, especially because they enjoyed a story that you didn't.

>>474617474617

Fine then, here's a better critique:

Brevity.

Many writers tend to write too much, or the wrong things. The reader doesn't want to plow through endless dialogue, description, etc. that you think is fascinating, just to get to whatever contributes to the story. Keep it brief. This doesn't mean no description etc., just keep it to a reasonable amount, and keep it relevant. For instance, we really don't need a detailed description of what every character is wearing.

On the other hand, many other writers are too brief, with a story that moves way too fast, with no atmosphere, no description of setting or emotion or appearance, often without bothering to mention where the action is taking place. There's a happy medium.

In general, every sentence, every word, should serve a purpose. It may advance the plot, develop a character, set a scene. If it's there to be amusing, be damn sure it really is amusing. Don't repeat things endlessly. We only need to see one or two scenes with the characters expressing their deepest feelings, not twenty. Don't have repeated scenes of characters discussing unimportant things, apparently just to pad out the story. It gets boring, very fast. At the same time, take the time to slow down and explore what the characters are feeling once in a while, and what they're seeing, hearing, and doing, as long as it says something relevant and new about the character or the situation. What you write should be enough to make the reader 'see' what's happening in the story, not enough to slow things down.

And I keep forgetting that this takes place after Romance Reports, which is why every character is stupid and broken.

Also, I don't get why if a lady does this sort of behavior, she's a "slut", but if a MAN does this, he's a "player" or a "pimp" or simply just "ladykiller"/"ladies man".

No, that's called a man-whore. And who said it was okay? The stereotype comes from the fact than the man usually has to convince the woman to have sex, and all the woman has to do is agree or not. Buy it's still not okay. When did I say it was?

You my good sir, have reduced me almost to tears. After finishing the Romance Reports its very hard to comprehend that Cheerilee died. And after making her so unbelievably believable (as redundant as that is) and just ending it made me almost die a little on the inside. I haven't even finished one third of it and i just cant decide if i want to finish this. I feel like I've missed so many important things that occurred between the original ending and now. I hope that maybe later you can do some short stories and such about some of these amazing adventures Twilight went on and go more into the subject of Cheerilee's death and everypony's reaction after. But as always, very compelling writing and the characters are so far, as believable as always.

Best Sparity story I've ever had the pleasure to read.  Perhaps someday I'll be able to write even half as good.  Now.  On to read the rest of your magnificent stories, you bloody genius.  You've stolen my mind!    I absolutely loved it.  

BEAUTIFUL!

At first I was like

But then I be like

I'm not ashamed to admit that this is my first ever clopfic. I've skimmed the like and they've all been garbage...with some exeptions that had good lead up stories... this however...this was romance...TRUE ROMANCE...That's hard to find even in human fiction.

In a way it was my "first" as far these types of fics go.

I don't clop...but I feel romance when I find it.  This is a prime example.