Twilight Sparkle has always known her parents. Twilight Velvet and Moon Catcher. But if they aren't her true parents? Say goodbye to her current reality. Follow Twilight as she earns the crown, and meets challenges on the way.
Rated Teen for Violence in later chapters (these also explain the Dark tag.)
Alternate Universe for the fact that Twilight has different parents.
Romance for a little TwiDash that will be pretty light until The Sole Ruler-The Epilogue will be pretty romantic too.
Despite the two ominous tags, it is quite light save three chapters (Melding the Crowns, Darkness, and The Elements)
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You should probably tag this [alternate universe], for starters. Twilight's parents are clearly shown in the show itself; and you changed Luna's background story. So it's not in the MLP universe we all know, basically.
It seems to be somewhat dark as well; but I don't know if you want to add that tag.
It requires tags, period :l
pm me and I'll prof read it for ya.
Proof readers?
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Definitely [alternate universe].
There were some [sad] elements in it, so that may be a good tag to add.
Perhaps [slice of life] depending on how you go forward.
however all these things are hard to say so early.
But if Luna became NMM the secound time she was send to the moon.
Then why did Celestia sed her there the first time?
If you have to retcon chunks of existing cannon to fit in your story, it's generally not a good thing.
It tends to be jarring, and often invites plot holes if you don't plan things well in advance.
It's usually better to work within established events, but just put a clever spin on them.
Anyone who volunteered to proofread-please do so :) Love the Katniss scene xD
And alternate universe definitely. I'm going to fix Luna's story up a bit, so it's actually logical, or she may conclude it in the next chapter.
I know the Mane 6 have been big main characters so far, but they'll be gone within the next chapter or so. I apologize for making them so big in this xD Luna is really going to be huge here, and Rainbow Dash may get a bigger part in this... but why
you'll have to wait and see!
Will track but something you may want too fix is the fact that Luna basicly told the mane six that Celestia stole her child before banishing her again and they don't seem to care. You should be clearer on wether Tia is evil or what
cant wait for the next chapter
Ok, the whole information dump seemed a bit rushed. If felt like you were just trying to set things up for your universe quickly so you could get into the action. Think about the other characters, their reactions, and then add them in so it feels more like a story and not a textbook. We get enough of those at school.
That's really the only damper for me in this story. A big damper, I'm not going to lie about that, but one that should be able to be easily corrected.
Sorry about the negative dump. Had to get that out. Howoever, there is quite a bit of potential for this story, and I am pretty curios to see what you do with it. Nice twist making Luna Twilight's mother.
I like the looks of this one.
I know twilight has been made an alicorn in stories before, but I have not seen one were luna is her mother.
well done on bringing a fresh approach the alicorn twi storyline
can't wait for next chapter
I always thought Luna looked more like Twi than Celestia xD And I'm slowly editing CH 1 at the current time being, so the reactions will make more sense and such soon.
Scratch the mane six leaving-as of chapter two, they'll become very important characters. Not as huge as Luna, but pretty important *cackle*
EDIT: This is going to become dark later, and here's a preview of the future chapters' titles:
Awake
Becoming Princess
Learning
Melding the Crowns
Darkness
The Elements
The Sole Ruler
Epilogue
YAY MORE PRINCESS TWILIGHT!
I have a question, didn't Luna command a royal sized bed be brought in at the same time that she requested the 5 normal beds? Wouldn't she then already have a bed and therefor now have two beds after this chapter?
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you know how it is sometimes one bed is not enough ^^
maybe the first bed was for Twilight? i mean she is growing.
Second story in 2 days that I favorited about Princess Twilight.
It's okay, they're really different! 
Chapter three and eighty favorites~
I'm so proud! I may start chapter four today, if not some time this week. Enjoy a dancing penguin.
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yay cake filled night
I did notice that almost every story involving the princesses involves them and cake. One I read even had Celestia obsessing over Jaffa Cakes in more of a Yogscast way.
CAKE!!
And then Twilight comes in, sees only crumbs where the cake had been, then falls to her knees and screams "THE CAKE IS A LIE!"
huh, is there a fic where Twilight is the daughter of Discord? would probably interesting to read.
cake can fix all ills! don't believe me? see for your self.
the pinkie test is 100% accurate, 100% of the time
*warning cake cures are meant for uses on ponies only. cake is not a lie. how ever it has been known to mislead*
oh I bet its Discord or something along the lines cant wait for the next chapter!
maybe sabotage by a certain pony who doesn't want to give up their throne mayhaps...
Poisen Joke, a cruel plant that can screw ponies lives and cure them of deadly threats, dood.
Nice story, dood, but man, i thought I was bad with walls of Text, can ya turn that down, dood?
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(AKA Baronvonkame)
/whistles innocently.
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Oh i assure you i would do worse if it was my attempt, keep an eye out in next weeks news!
well looks like a certain princess is angry over something...
like a plan failed or something?
I mean if it was me, i'd keep my cool,but you know...practice....
-cackle- I'm looking forward to the next chapter! No spoilers though xD
I know it's such a clichéd plot idea but I love Twilight becomes an Alicorn fics. This one is on the unique side, though. Tracking.
Thanks! I'm working on Ch 6 right now, where things really do take a twist
A/N: I honestly am feeling adrenaline course through my veins as I right this, so I hope it stirs up some sort of emotion for y'all!
Don't get me wrong, you've done a nice job, but this just isn't quite my cup of tea.
ohhhhh exciting. CONTINUE! XD
I sense a truly EVILdl.dropbox.com/u/31471793/FiMFiction/emoticons/misc_Octavia_plot.png coming to fruition.
Terror Sundl.dropbox.com/u/31471793/FiMFiction/emoticons/misc_Lyra_cry.png Y U KILL LUNA?
I'm not entirly sure but this chapter doesn't work for me, at the end my repsonse was 'WTF just happend?'
It feels rushed and confuseing.
I like your name for the evil Celestia.
Terror Sun. sounds quite mean.
with your permission I may use it in a fic at some point.
i hope that when and if terror suns returns to sanity, which'll probably happen when they beat here and before she dies, they show her Luna's corpse to see if she still has any sanity left. Either way she'll die but she needs to realize that she killed her sister, if she cares at all that is...
Probably not but anywho, good luck trying to kill it with fire gals.
DRIVE-BY EVIL!
Seriously, where did THIS come from?
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It's not a cliche if it's written well.
THIS IS NOT.
you said it was going to be a twist that was not a twist you were hinting that celestia was evil so her being good and some unknown or one of the mane six being bad would be a twist
LIAR!
WHEN ARE YOU GOING TO CONTINUE IT!?!?!?! BLARG!
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not necessarily, it is possible that Luna's short return was simply kept out of the news, as well as her having a child. Just because it shows Twilight's parents does not mean they are her biological parents. there is a difference between difference of the back-story, and the difference of the perception of the back-story.
on an unrelated note, do I detect a reference to Mommy Nearest? I think I do.
MOAR
Saw that coming actually, but very good story
, a little rushed on the whole fight back part at the end.
This and the previous chapter felt kind of rushed.... It almost felt like I was watching a movie on fast-forward.
Should you decide to re-write those, I would suggest you take a few chapter's to explain what is going on, cause I'm completely lost...
Biggest complaint from me would be that there was no real character build up into 'Daymare Sol' (evil celestia). It just kinda happened.
minor complaint would be that Luna is dead, but since it helps the story go along (kinda) It's cool. Also, Twilight would normally have had a major panic attack with something as big as becoming Sole Ruler of Equestria being thrust on her plate. (lol, probably would have made a few new nebulae in the process.)
Just my opinion, though.
This always comes to my mind when reading wing sprouting scenes:
Looking forward to see where you take this story.
for some reason, Twilight seems out of character, and her personality seems to fluctuate
also: that escalated very quickly, and left me feeling like wtf just happened
alsoalso: please update soon!