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Magicman7997


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My entry into the Magic of Love: A Twidance Prompt Collab. My prompt word was Cult.

Twilight is taken hostage by an evil cult hell bent on resurrecting Nightmare Moon. Can her wife Cadance find her before she loses her forever?

Cover art by Katsaysmeh. Check out their page!

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MORE, soon, RIGHT?? :D

4892007 Hmm. You know, this was originally a one shot. I might be open to continuing it once I've finished Resurrection. Thanks for the feedback!

4892014 Yesh, continue!! :pinkiehappy:

“Please, please, let Cady know I love her. Please let her know that I'm sorry I couldn't say goodbye. Please let her know that I'll be waiting for her on the other side.”

Exactly what I think of Katie! :heart: Except spelled different... :trixieshiftleft:

When I first started reading this, I thought I was rereading Past Sins. :rainbowlaugh:

4892440 Wow, that's either one hell of a compliment, or I just really dropped the ball on being original. I'm gonna go with compliment. :pinkiesmile: Thank you.

4892452 This story is really awesome! The only question is where the heck did Shining Armor go?

4892571 I'll leave it to your imagination for now. I've got a few other prompts in that Twidance thread. In Excitement, Mythbusted, and Lineage, I have a bit of backstory as to what happened to Shining. Cult doesn't fit in that trilogy, but it's one explination. I may go back and add to this story since it has gotten such a favorable response.

"Hello, my name is Princess Mi Amore Cadenza. You kidnapped my one true love. Prepare to die."


Sorry, couldn't resist.

4896476 I am SO gonna use that line when I expand this story.

This is a very solid story with plenty of room for continuations. I'm no expert when it comes to writing romance (in fact I think I've met planks of wood that could write better relationships than me,) but the emotions here seem genuine. I can't find any glaring problems with the writing itself either. There aren't any grammar errors to distract a reader from the story. You have no idea how many times I've found an interesting idea for a story only to discover that it's littered with too many pacing and grammar issues to be enjoyed. It's good to know that this one doesn't follow that pattern.
The continuations I mentioned go beyond Cadence's roaring rampage of revenge/ rescue against the cult. All we need is a bit more information about how this world diverts from canon and we could be looking at a decent 'what if' storyline for Past Sins. I'm certain having Cadence around as Twilight's wife would change the original storyline quite a bit. I'm half tempted to write that scenario myself if you don't want to.
I enjoyed this story quite a bit. Now I just have to wait for that expansion you mentioned. Oh well, I'm patient. Seeing as how many of the stories I'm waiting on take upwards of half a year to get a new chapter posted, I'm sure adding one more storyline to the list won't be too much of a problem. I look forward to the update.

4926974 I am humbled and honored by your critique of this. I am on a small vacation as a childhood friend of mine is getting married. When I get back, I plan on working on my other story Resurrection and continuing this one. Thanks for the favorite!

Your making more of this story right

5366877 I am seriously considering it. I have been on a bit of a hiatus due to health issues, but I am on the mend and should return to writing soon. Thank you for the favorite!

Then cadence blows a hole through ten cultists in one shot


4892440 exactly
4896476 you just made my fucking day man

5366966 there will be an actual ending right? There will be more....right!?

It’s been more than 3 years and I still want an ending to this!!

That's it? No sequel? That's the ending?

Also I the story it's mentioned that Twilight is a unicorn but in the picture it shows that she is an Allicorn.

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