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5937264

...I don't get the joke.

A bit lacking for a first chapter, but I still like it

5937279 It's a running joke and image from the youtube channel Game Grumps.

Futa, Gigantic Penis/Balls, Futa on Male, Biblical amounts of Cum

:rainbowderp:

Futa,Futa on Male

:pinkiehappy:i1.ytimg.com/vi/Wv2pvapjx1o/maxresdefault.jpg don't hate my fetish

Considering this is my first story, and I didn't know what stood as in character for Maud, I think I did pretty good. I might edit this later; I notice that the transition through the story is not particularly smooth. I'm too all over the place. Probably gonna need to lengthen certain parts of the story.

She had seen many mares go temporary insane and chase and rape stallions...

Eh, that's not so bad.

...chase and rape stallions, often without consent.

Whoa, whoa, back the fuck up. The mares raped them without the stallion's consent!? The nerve!

Sorry to be all witty about a typo, but this just made me laugh.

Edit: S/he fixed this part. This comment no longer applies.

5937819

I don't understand. Where's the typo?

5938081 Er, well maybe not a typo, more of just making the sentence redundant. The whole meaning behind rape is that it's sex without the person's consent. Saying they raped stallions, often without their consent is just... weird, lol.

This story should flow much better now.

Decently written, but very short. Also... Maud's a bit OOC, if only slightly. I'd tone her down just a smidge.

preggy herms make more cum~

5938980 I can't put my finger on it, which is annoying me... I'm sorry I couldn't be of more help, but I guess Maud's very grounded and simple in the way she looks at the world. Analytical and literal.

5939230

I kind of guessed that too. Which was I found it hard to write this story. I just couldn't get her personality right. I blame the fact that she was only in one episode.

5939325 Well, you've got pretty decent prose, and good descriptions, so I'd just give it your best shot. I'll happily read whatever comes next, and eagerly await it.

Changed and extended the Shining Armor scene, hope you guys like it.

Great story and can't wait to see the next chapter

5940268 I really really liked it. And the cumshot was hot as well~

This story reminds me of a weird dream I had once.

Has anyone ever had a wet dream where you wake up as a girl with a d*** and some random guy is jerking you off?

5946574

I had a dream I was a girl and my pussy was getting rammed by some guy in back of my dad's car...while said car was being driven by said parent. And that's not even the weirdest dream I've had. Doesn't even make it into the top 100.

Last edit. I swear upon the heavens that was the last one.

Cant wait for more!!!

I kinda like it. I'm down for more.

Oh my celestia that was quite a scene. I can't wait to see how far this goes. :ajsmug:

well that was....something.

6014145

Is that a good something or a bad something

6014154 well the scene of the after effects of her cum was a strange type of something, while the story as a whole is a unique type of something. i, personally, have never read a story where the herm was interested in guys. the male aspect of their bodies usually made it so that they preferred to be the pitcher instead of the catcher.

6014166 They can be with a guy and still be the pitcher. :pinkiecrazy:

I expected Strong Charger to beg for the cock halfway through tbh.

6014892 guys are kind of a no-go zone for me during sex. just having them mentioned during a sex scene is a serious turn off. i think i'm a bit of a homophobe, now that i think about it. huh, ya learn something new every day.

6014957 So wait, you're a homophobe yet you get turned off by anything that isn't lesbians?

6014968 hmmm, what's the phobia for just dudes? not necessarily dude on dude, but just guys in general? eh, it doesn't matter. wouldn't be the first time i didn't make sense.

6015001 closest thing I can think of is misandry. Androphobia?. I don't think phobia means what you think it means though.

Androphobia is usually something experienced by women who are rape victims.

6015232 pho·bi·a
/ˈfōbēə/
noun
an extreme or irrational fear of or aversion to something.
"he had a phobia about being under water"
synonyms: fear, irrational fear, obsessive fear, dread, horror, terror, hatred, loathing, detestation, aversion, antipathy, revulsion;

6015267 Exactly, all you've said is that they're a turn off. Androphobia would be like, if you see a man walking down the street, you start fearing for your life.

I want strong charger to kinda be her new special somepony...

To every lurker out there, don't scoff at stories that don't have a hundred likes because getting to a hundred likes is apparently very hard.

Hoping still for Maud Pie and Shining Ship here. :pinkiecrazy:
Because why not, she did practically came harder than ever before from such a day dream with him in it.

Interesting concepts. My only complaint would be the lack of sex in this chapter. :rainbowlaugh:

5947627 wow, youve got some crazy dreams :pinkiehappy:

just an idea,what if Maud didn"t know where pinkie pie lives and goes library ask directions. spike is there all alone . :pinkiehappy:
spike helps her out.

Dead or is there an update planned?

6541150
Update planned in November.

Still waiting for update, hoping this is not already dead. I really want more of this story, there are so few futa maud stories out there, but this is my favorite.

6791152

Not dead. I did however hit a writers block. Also doesn't help that I gotta be *cough* excited *cough* to be really motivated to write this. Unmotivated writing is not worth looking at.

Gotcha, gotta get that mojo running. I love this story

anyone know the artist of the stories thumbnail?

Strong Charger pointedly stared at her very big, and still very backed up sac despite flooding half a train as it swayed side to side. "Celestia help us all."

if celest was a herm, im pretty sure Maud would be bigger :trixieshiftright: I WANT SOME O' THAT FUN

"Why is Sweet Ember tied up?!" Strong Charger immediately sprinted to the train yelling "Don't untie her!!" the entire way.

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