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Pinkie Pie throws Twilight a party before her birthday, inviting many of Twilight's friends to attend. As the spiked punch get passed around, the antics of the group become looser. The morning after the party however, holds a shocking surprise for the assistant of Twilight Sparkle.
This story is based of the pic by Lisboa, found here on deviant art http://bylisboa.deviantart.com/#/art/A-Twispike-4koma-attempt-403764196?hf=1
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Ohhh.... What a night!
Read this on deviantart. Really great read!
great read Pacing was good
characters were good
spelling and grammar great
rating 9/10
Prize
Tiger 2 tank
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feel the power!
4503607 cool, a King Tiger tank, I've always wanted one!
Glad you enjoyed it 
4503730 no, I must thank you for the great story, mate. enjoy the tank. just don't start a war with it mate.
Good story, enjoyed reading it and all the drunken shenanigans the mane six plus Maude got up to were hilarious
Two problems I had were 1: spacing or walls of text. If you double tap enter when you start a new paragraph then there's that bit of white between the blocks of black lines. Just makes reading it easier to follow, at least for me it does. After re reading the later bits I realized that you started to correct it before you even finished the stoey
2: the jumps at the end. You were doing so well Twi the pacing and then it's Twi with "I'm gonna sleep with him" straight into " You bucked me in your sleep" then jumping to " I might be pregnant now" You can't just drop a bomb like that on your readers.
Two little nit picks in an overall excellent story just keep them in mind for the future.
4503811 Hey, I appreciate Nitpicks, thanks for those
I'm glad you liked it.
4503760 I won't, I'll just go on a joyride with it
4503837 well here you go then! [ tosses a set of keys]
those are to the tank and for the gunnery range have fun!
4503828 Happy to help.
Really good story. Spilight
is > Sparity 
Also, love that bit at the end, made me laugh a little.
Why do you writers keep making one-shots like this that just screams, "SEQUEL".
"The Month After"
4504113 Who says I won't make a sequel?
There's nothing saying I can't hehehehe 
Not a fan of shipping, but the lack of a mature rating give me hope.
4504310 I know all to well that you don't need mature or erotic material to write a good story, this was aimed to be crude humor only.
I hope you liked it, though judging by the smiley, I think you did.
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Not yet finished, but the concept, plus the fact it's not mature rated and the lack of an anthro tag means I shall aid you.
4504189 Oh, really
! In that case, I hope you do. 
4504113
Momlestia will now have 3 sons....
Perfect as always, loved the humor of this one!
any chance of a sequel?
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Where in the hell did Celestia have three sons???
I can see Spike as her son, and in some strange way, I would not be surprised that at some point Blueblood is actually Celestia's biological son rather than her nephew (to keep it a secret), but I have to see how in the hell would Celly have a third??
...hell, while you're at it, you could say say that Cadence is her biological daughter....
4505548 That is the joke man... Spike is the adapted son, a sun and now a grandson, or maybe...
Do I see a sequel in the future?
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I'm ashamed....I've seen that one before, I just thought it would be coming from a different direction. My bad.
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4505473 Its always a possibility
Good story
in heat? uh oh, that automatically calls for a sequel where she breaks the news to spike!
SEQUEL NOW....................please
Wow... lots of effort was put towards this. Good Read!!!
Oh.
4507378 Hehehehehe I am glad to see everyone enjoying themselves with this. Sure, I'll make a sequel to this.
yes good man
and a of rock poems from Maud, which Twilight cringe slightly
The nights still young
Spike sighed in relieve
snuffling every so often
1. And a book if rock poems from Maud, which Twilight cringed at slightly.
2. Night's.
3. Relief.
4. Shuffling.
Whelp, that ended on a bomb. A very pleasant bomb. Least Spike can now properly fulfill the role of the care taking mother right? Assuming this Twilight also doesn't know how to cook that is
4508177 thanks for the corrections, I'll implement them as soon as I am able. Glad you liked it.
Twilight passes out while trying to jump Spike HA HA HA! Thank you for the laughs. Good short.
Twilight, you sly minx.
Oh, I cant wait to read this later.
This needed a prereader. The formatting and syntax are wayyy off.
4510513 I had two people preread this...
my major problems with this is that twilight seems too impulsive, and while she may be in heat that doesn't mean "herp derp irresponsibility and super horny powers activate" and i found that twilight not having a hangover (which isnt really explained) to be a very convinient excuse to give the dialouge some level of normalcy for the sake of the plot, i for one would love to see twilight stumble through the motions of seducing spike/ banging him in a painful hangover. also I find it weird that spike is perfectly fine with being in a sexual relation with someone who has been the non biological equivalent of his big sister his whole life, not very believeable, but i guess for the sake of the ship... also one more little nitpick that really is more of an observation
gross
4510710 the shinning armor reference was not intended to reference her brother, though in hindsight I can see how that would be a problem. As for the sibling like relation, I do not believe such a relationship actually exists, which is one of the reason he adapted so quickly, In my mind, their relationship has always been closer to that of best friends/co-workers, my main points to this effect is that Twilight does not treat him like a sibling in many regards and I call her interactions with cadence and Shining Armor as prime examples of this. Spike tends to treat Twilight more like a mentor and best friend over anything else in my opinion.
As for Twilight's impulsiveness, she's hammered, how many drunks do you know who can remain in perfect control of themselves, also, as I pointed out, she sobered up a little bit while she was sleeping and panicked when she realized what was happening to her.
I won't deny however, that her like of hangover was for narrative reasons.
this was posted two days ago and already has 1.5k views???? da fuq?
Good read. The ending screams sequel though
and a collection of rock poems from Maud, which made Twilight cringe slightly, but she thanked her regardless.
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and how did she refresh their drinks? Rarity is good at manipulation magics, but not so good at teleporting [that's Twilight's signature spell]. Confused at that bit.
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[seriously it was her turn.]
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Bucking hell.
1) It was Rarity's spin when it landed on Apple Jack.
2) It would've been AJ who asked Rarity not Fluttershy. Since Fluttershy was nowhere in this game yet.
This entire game sequence is messed up. Good, nice little stuff. But please for the love of all things holy and unholy fix it. I want to read this fic I do, but when you switch characters, alter in the drop of a dime who's doing what, and have dialog [after the Pinkie Pie one] that makes no sense it makes it hard to actually care about the fic.
If you fix it, please PM me. I'd like to read this fic someday when it's not so filled with errors, and please keep track of who is doing what one sentence to the next. And I'm sorry if this comes across as a bit dkish, but after it became Rarity's turn to spin [after Pinkie Pie's turn] things went down hill and I don't want to spend the next hour obsessively combing through a potentially good oneshot. I want to be able to enjoy reading it instead.
4511411 I have never played truth or dare so I had the girls ask at random regardless of who spun, so basically there was no turn order, the drinks are on the table across the room, rarity just floated the cups to the punch bowl and refilled them. I will make the corrections, but that was my reasoning for it.
There are a few in this otherwise very readable fic, but your biggest error is not making a new paragraph each time some pony different speaks.
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Well here's how the turn order of Truth or Dare goes.
1) A person/pony is asked Truth or Dare.
2) That person/pony does said thing. Then its there turn to either Spin the Bottle as they were doing to pick who gets picked next [not the askee, or the person who went last], or is picked at random.
3) That one gets asked Truth or Dare.
4) Wash, rinse, repeat.
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Truth or Dare Rules.
Please fix. Because peeps who know the rules, you have a person / pony whose implicitly told it's there turn. Then you switch who does what. Then you start randomly throwing ponies into who says / does what. Its just jarring and confusing.
I mean "Rainbow Dash's" dare would've been perfect for AJ. And a few quick edits you could make it not only right, but IC.
WhooHoo! Fixed Truth or Dare game.
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That ending almost screams sequel. When he finds out he sleep rutted her while she was in heat. Now he's going to have adorable dracony babies. That'd be something that'd freak out her friends / family. But'd make a good fic. I have to say after the re-write of the Truth or Dare game, it was an adorable fic. Nicely done, and I seriously hope this gets a sequel someday. If not, it was still a nice little fic.
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yay! I'm glad you like it. Thanks for pointing out the issues, thanks to everyone for that I am already coming up with a sequel for this story. I have a general idea in mind for it 