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I like how she's doing a lot of good, and still has her same personality. Yay.
Some notes:
- "Anon" would probably be more open to the whole thing then most, as long as she explains herself carefully. There are a few others I could see accepting her, like Fluttershy for example, but the news has to be broken very carefully. Twilight herself might actually be an excellent source of information if you can get her on your side. In any case, Blossomforth needs allies before all of this change drives her insane; actually, speaking of change, is Discord in this? Because he might be able to help.
- She's a biological singularity now, and she needs to start acting like it. As such I highly recommend that she stops 'eating' ponies to obtain their genetic information, just absorb them and rebuild them quick utilizing an amoeba-like form, no horrifying rows of teeth, no misshapen mouths, if you don't want to call it eating then put your money where your mouth is and stop making it look like you're eating them. After all, bacteria share genetic information all the time without either microbe being left worse for wear. *In fact, speaking of bacteria, foreign microbial DNA should be enough to calm Blossomforth's new instincts. Which is good for her, because it means that she can satisfy her instincts discreetly. And while you're at it, don't forget all the other microscopic flora and fauna that find their way practically everywhere.*
- Get rid of the brain slugs after they've fulfilled their purpose, unless you need them to specifically monitor someone in order to ensure their long-term health, and in that case you really should be making them less 'mind-rape-y.'
- She really ought to be finding a way to combat her instincts, otherwise they could wind up getting her into a lot of trouble.
- You are forcibly taking their genetic information, the very least you could do in return is give them a little tune-up. Fixing Lyra's knee was a nice touch, just be sure to keep it up.
There's probably quite a bit more that I'm just not thinking of right now, but those are my preliminary notes on Thingpony morality. All in all a very interesting premise, I'm curious to see where you go with this one.
5846830 WOW! Thanks for taking the time to write that detailed comment about my story! As you can probably tell, this is my first EVER attempt at writing fiction of any type(lots of downboats ;_;)! This abomination of a story was spawned from the /mlp/ Thingpone thread. Responding to your points in order:
-I agree that she definitely needs friends. Writing about social interactions may be my weak point mostly because I don't have many social interactions in real life (sad but true lol). I definitely need to improve there.
-To be fair the creepy teeth appear whenever she lets her baser instincts take hold. When it came to Cloud Kicker, Cerulean Skies, and Cloud Chaser they were all engulfed amoeba like although I may have done a bad job at describing that.
-It's one of those creepy NSA things. What they don't know won't hurt them lol.
-It's a thing she is battling with.
-Definitely will be explored in the future.
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Ah, that would explain why I've never seen it before, I don't really follow /mlp/.
I love et! Gooby Pls, continue writing this story! Thingpone is the shit!
Why isn't this more popular?
Going to read this soon. Seems like good writefaggotry.
>sees how it's not that popular, tries to fix that
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Because it's just posted like the other night.
And because it's kinda lacking in quality by FIMfic standards as dumb as that sounds. It's not a shitfic, but it's not really on average yet either.
5848741 Yes, I know that this is lacking in quality, but the plot makes up for it.
And even then, I was reading this just the other night, and I didn't know this was just posted. I hope it gains more positive attention.
For the lazy people:
Just remember to remove the space
derpibooru.org/ 200700
derpibooru.org/ 187629
derpibooru.org/ 397827
5849347 Fair warning, it is against Fimfic rules to link clop which is why I could not.
Last I remember the Thing's assimilation process was messy...
Hope she remember to clean up all the slime,blood,etc before she left
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With a bit better pacing, more showing and less telling, and reworked dialog, this would work well.
I'm glad the writer took my suggestion of dropping the greentext format, that in itself helped a lot.
^forgot an " at the beginning
^forgot a " at the end
5849667 Agreed, brother. *salute*
This story has room for improvement, like we have stated thrice. Not thrice only, but four times.
I'm enjoying this story, though I wonder if every created body is actually real or just a remote controlled thing creature that just thinks it's real and can easily be taken over again.
5849670 Thanks.
This is quite an interesting story, not much into, say vore or such, but still this story is captivating, kinkiness, but also the right dose of horror which reminds me partly to Project Horisont lab scene.
I like it, more! :)
I like it, nice twist. Hen? Hen? I'll go home now...
5849488 Well considering its host takeover had failed the new sentient form is probably more efficient then its feral counterpart. But who knows ya know?
I haven't read your fanfiction yet, but you should probably not put thingpone as the cover art, it seems like a bit of a spoiler, you might say it's for visuals, but that's usually what the writing is for (also I am planning on reading it, I didn't click on your fanfiction to nitpick)
oh my god, so this is your first time writing a fanfiction? I'm sorry for the first comment I left. But really about the first comment, I was just trying to help you add some more mystery to the story, but I really will read it, I love Thingpone and since this is the first fanfiction of her besides your first fanfiction I would love to see how it is, but before I read it could I ask if you added any elemnts from the movie "the thing" which is what thingpone is based off of? or did you decide to do something like decide to make her different, and more controlling of herself, like in the comics from derpibooru with Anon?
5959406 I'd say a bit of both.
Nice, it updated
Yes!
Nice!
More!
Indeed, we would need more XD
Man ponyville is officially screwed. Requesting nuking the town!
Man this story is giving me the goosebumps and the thing is my second scariest fictional creature
Kinky
Interesting stuff so far, although there are 2 points that bug me:
-Chapter 4 seems a bit wordy in places: you could probably cut down the unnecessary dialogue.
-Just a personal one, but the brain slug thing smacks a bit too much of mind control for my liking, which I usually try to avoid in stories. Hopefully it doesn't come to that.
Looking forward to seeing where this goes.
This Reminds me of a Manga by the title of 'Parasite' or something like that. It had an alien parasite that invaded the Earth, though the protagonist was infected only in his arm, and it gained sentience. The instincts were still there. It was a very... strange read. So is this, but it is interesting as well.
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-True. I attempted to incorporate more dialogue in my writing in that chapter. I suppose dialogue is not my strong point. Hopefully the quality of my writing has been improving as the chapters progress.
-Big sister just wants to make sure you don't hurt yourself
6394507 Pain builds character, dammit! Now that I think of it, I don't meet much characters nowdays...
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Nice stretches. I wish I could do that.
6475848 Thanks! I am stretching tonight after neglecting it for almost 3 weeks
I guess that is what the Destiny expansion does to me... You or anyone is welcome to join me on video Skype if they want to learn. I have also been working on another chapter lately. I am guessing its about 1/4 done.
6394073 we shan't forget the fact at one point the parasite in his arm recognized it's host was getting aroused and turned his arm into a giant penis. (this is very early in the story so all you that haven't read it know)
I just discovered this story, and I must say, I like it a lot. Please continue.
This was actually a good read, surprisingly enough. I think I remember reading something like this from a literary magazine too.
This was easily one of the best chapters of the story! Loved seeing the world from Thingpone's perspective, and understanding this extremely odd and confusing creature better!
Prediction: Thingpone's empathy develops to the point where it can't bring itself to assimilate all life, so it forms a symbiotic relationship with host planets instead. This new system has it consuming organisms and returning the consciousnesses to a new body. This paves the way for biological development in all host worlds via forced evolution, while still maintaining a constant or even advanced rate of technological improvement. By the time any others of its kind arrive, Thingpone's empire will outclass it by a laughable margin.
Love the story so far, and this chapter was especially good. I like the extra backstory, and I really like how the story is going.
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Thanks for all the compliments! This fic being my very first attempt at writing fiction of any type ever. So far it has been a bit of a roller coaster ride with all the variety things in the fic. I hope future chapters continue being interesting and of higher quality.
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Who knows, maybe she'll find your planet and before you know it a member of her hivemind will hunt you down, stick its tongue down your throat and assimilate you from the inside out! <3
From now on I will try to respond to every comment posted. Today being a day off I will definitely be working on the next chapter. Sometimes I get a real good idea and it just flows quickly. Other times I have to dig deep for the idea that blossoms into a chapter.
I am intrigued. I'd like to see this continue.
Huh, it's like "Parasyte".
I'm not a monster... well technically I am. I guess I am.
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Me too.
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Yes, except the victim is in control and the entire body is a polymorph.
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This was a great chapter. I love the way you're portraying the Hive, and the internal conflict between Bloss and the Thing is compelling.
That screaming scene was chilling.
Well, looks like I've got my work cut out for me in this universe! So many planets to blow up to stop these things!
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Thanks for the compliment! Chilling is what I was going for. However, I might delete or modify the last two paragraphs. It's not quite indicative of the direction I want to take the story.
I finally got my muse going and I have some ideas for the next chapter. This always seems to happen when I reread the story curiously enough. I will be writing furiously tonight.
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Hmm, be careful one of the inspectors might get to you. Just a tiny infection and you might be a goner unless you are the apex predator from the galaxy that collided into Thingpone's home galaxy.
6594330 I am an immortal energy being from 10,000 infinities! (I mean, if yer gonna god-mode, why hold back?)