Notice:
The performance for tonight has been canceled due to hazardous storm conditions.
Also, seven young girls have gone missing.
If you have any information as to their whereabouts, please forward it to the Canterlot police department at once.
The battle of the bands can't happen during a rainstorm, it isn't Woodstock. Besides, everyone is too busy to attend a concert. Families are searching diligently for their lost daughters, sisters, and friends. They all know the clock is ticking. If they don't find them soon, they will never get them back at all. After all, the human body can only survive three days without water.
There won't be any Dazzlings in the story, it messed up the whole tone when I tried to add them. Still working on my writing, please leave a critique if you liked it, or not.
Nice work here. Suspenseful and the end had me breathing a sigh of relief. have a fave and a like!
5795300 Thanks!
...Uh, well that was Dark. Granted I get that's the point and I honestly was worried one of them would die in the end, which I'm glad you didn't go that far.
Though how exactly did they get hurt. Was it the fall or just the being trapped part. Still pretty good.
5795607 Dehydration. Humans use water in their organs, blood vessels, etc. As they run out, the body starts malfunctioning and shutting down. You generally have three days, depending on many conditions.
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Okay, what about the blood, I remember there being mention of blood leaking from them or something along those lines.
There's a slight typo that might've been over looked, just pointing out.
It should say everybody, I didn't think anything of it until I remembered this was a human story
P.S. I loved that you found a way to put LPS in a story
5796653 Good catch. Three times over and you still miss stuff. :P
Was wondering if anyone would get that reference. There's a much smaller reference in the same scene, see if you can't find it. ;)
I was breathing as hard as Maud was, on the verge of tears.
5795660 after so many attempts of breaking down the door, it wouldn't come as a surprise if at least one of the girls, if not all of them at some point, tried to claw their way out of the room. The result of that would have been damaged, bloody fingers.
So what happens to Trixie when the finnaly wake up and tell them who locked them down there?
wow, don't even know what to write here. Have been on edge during the whole read, hoping that they would survive.
Now, take my like and fave, you earned it
FIMFic is broken, because I could only fave and like this story once.
nice little story
Trixie belongs in prison for that
This needs a follow-up showing the recovery, preferably with Trixie and the illusions facing charges.