A Pole by birth, a Lawgiver by trade and a Trickster by choice. Altogether a most friendly, sociopathic madman. At your service...
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Oh, it's so good I've managed to catch you! Surely you will be able to help me out.
No, I haven't done anything wrong! I swear, what's with the lack of faith?
Anyway, I need you to sit down and listen carefully. I am not good enough at Friendship yet, so I need a specialist and I need one now!
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Granted the Community Choice award in the Everfree Northwest 2015 Pre-Con Writing Contest.
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This... is actually really nice.
You have earned a favorite, my good sire!
discord sounds so worried.
awesome fic
This was absolutely refreshing. I am loving your style, so far.
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Thank you ever so kindly.
5754608
Thank you very much.
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I have decided to experiment a bit with the narration. Glad that you found it appealing.
LOL
Anyway, cute little story. I love it.
5755882
Thank you very much, my friend.
A fuzzy Discord story. That's a new one for me. I did enjoy it though.
Nice job
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Thank you, sir.
Discord is just flawless.
5758706
Flawed, but flawless - I think here lies the mystery of Chaos.
Ha! John de Lancie never could say that word.
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I congratulate you, madam, for pointing that out!
This was so adorable and so perfectly in character. Wonderful work.
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Thank you, it's a pleasure.
This is... Wow, this is really good. Excellent tone. Lovely narration. Interesting plot. Dangerously heartwarming. I'd like to see what else you've written, but I'm going to tape an ice pack to my sternum first, as a precautionary measure. Thanks so much for writing!
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Thank you ever so kindly. And do not worry, "heartwarming overload" is a good thing so spare the ice, put it in your drink and enjoy the show...
Hi there! I'm reviewing this as a candidate for the Everfree Northwest competition's Community Choice Award.
At first I thought the wordiness of Discord's narration was going to be distracting, but it helps take a relatively simple story and make it a lot more entertaining as we follow his thought processes. Some might call it overly sweet, but I thought it was adorable. I will be adding it to my list of nominees for the Community Choice award! Nice job!
Good luck in the competition!
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Thank you very much, I appreciate the support. And I hope to provide everyone with more adorableness in the future.
This entry is quite charming, and aside from a "not" that should be a "now," mechanically flawless.
Discord's characterisation I have some issues with. This is a wholly neutered god of chaos, lacking any of the edge he has always carried in the show. Even when it's just him hanging out with Fluttershy, he is mischievous and is rare to give a straight answer to any question, no matter how simple or direct his actual answer is. Him being struck dumb by Dinky feels wrong, even if his recourse of questioning Twilight and searching his feelings is quite plausible. In addition, his actions felt to simple to be Discord. Every move he makes in the show is accompanied by some sort of impossible flourish, and no such acts were on display here.
Still, I enjoyed it. Its currently number two, but the bar so far has been quite low.
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An honest, critical review, austere even, I can appreciate those. Your findings are logical and your opinion based on thorough observations, even if I could contest it as a creator.
Thank you for taking your time to evaluate the story and I am glad that you have enjoyed it... even with you pointing out "the bar so far being low".
Those poor apple trees...
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Come now, being emancipated by Discord can't be that bad, right?
... right?
Yay, Dinky made a new friend. Oh and Discord of course... I liked this story, simple but still got the message across. Until next time,
-Sphinx
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Glad you have enjoyed it.
I like the story very much
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It's a pleasure to hear...
Congrats on winning the Community Choice Award! I'd say you earned it.
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Thank you kindly, but it was the effort of all the people wishing to support me that earned me this reward, not mine per se.
Just so people can't say I don't put my money where my mouth is: you asked, now I answer.
As far as the premise goes, it is simple and (potentially) effective: as a result of a tiny accident, Discord befriends Dinky. Not much more to say about that. The story pretty much writes itself beyond that point. We find that "big guy who is totally not into friendship has a heart after all", we get some nauseatingly "cute" scenes, and the new friendship is born. The end. Like I said: standard stuff.
What annoyed me terribly was the style of narration. This is not what Discord sounds like. He may cause chaos, but his mind isn't a -- pardon the term -- "clusterfuck of chaos". I know it's done to make the story more lighthearted, but after a while it really starts to bug me when every other sentence is Discord hammering in "OOH LOOK, I'M THE GOD OF CHAOS! SEE? SEE? SEE?"
Also, the story is terribly cliche. It may not be clickbait (Discord is a popular character, but the "Discord + Dinky" combo isn't, at least as far as I know), but the plot itself is about as basic as you can get. Combine that with the rather forced cuteness, and it just doesn't do it for me at all. Then again, I still prefer it to stories that try to be as "epic" as possible, so there's that.
Grammar is fine, premise is okay, but the execution falls short. That's all I have to say.
But just to be a good sport, I left you an upvote.
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Fair enough, I accept this critique and I do see your logic and where you are coming from. I would be entitled to defend my choices of narration and writing style, naturally, but I do not wish to overtake the comment section.
What bothered me in the style you were presenting your point in the main thread was your overly negative approach, simply. I am uncertain from where it comes, perhaps from just a way of being, perhaps from the fact that you had entered the competition too, but was not spotted and received one vote in the Community Choice. Frankly, it is not my business, but yours.
Still, thank you for your opinion. Just maybe try presenting it in the general discussion in a more amiable way and that shall do it.
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It's just my style. Certain factors amplify things from time to time, but in general if something bugs me, I don't hold back.
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Other people won't hold back either and that does create some tension. But, let's put that aside – I wish to thank you for participating in the contest and taking your time...
Discord: Inventor of Facebook. orig10.deviantart.net/d992/f/2015/153/1/0/clapping_pony_icon___discord_by_comeha-d8vpbw9.gif
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Considering the usual level of chaos on that site... yup, most likely.
*you see a small tombstone in the comment section, getting closer you read the inscription
"Here lies an avid reader, he thought he could read stories till 3:30 in the morning, he died of dinkie overdose and slight hemorrhaging of his cute containment organ, his last words were '6 out of 6 looks like you did it' he will be missed"
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:opens the Book of Arkhan over the fresh grave: Oh, you are not done quite yet, friend... Arise!
Normally I don't like to read 1st person narrative stories, but this is adorable! It's part of my headcanon that Discord gets along better with kids than most adults.
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I think that's a reasonable assumption. Kids have that... unique logic and reasoning that I believe resonates with him quite well.
Awww. I loved this.
It was such a sweet and whimsical little tale. Wonderfully written and the monologues were especially like Discord, though you did quite well on his physical use of chaos as well. 
Quite possibly my favorite short story about the quirky draconequus I've ever read. 
Excellent piece, and quite smile invoking too! Well done! 
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Hah, I am pleased somebody still gains joy from this little piece. Thank you for your words.
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And thank you for yours!