Dr.stable gets an idea that might save ponies lives, but the problem is he needs a test subject. Somepony who is willing to do it. Lyra just so happens to be staying in the hospital because of a concussion. Lyra decides that it is best to be the one for Dr.Stable to use. Bonbon is totally against it, but Lyra thinks that it will save the world. (And who knows? Maybe it will give her hands!!! 
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This was super fun!!!! Please tell me if you like it or not!
5750637 Hello Daylight glimmer. This was a very nice story with a lot of potential. I think it could have more in it, but what it did have made me squee all the way through! great job and will be looking forward to more
I AM GOING TO LOVE THIS!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! ( I've only read the long description so far.
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5758280 Thanks again!
5759921 You are so sweet!!
5760127 Sure!
I am so glad the shout out worked!!!! wonderful chapter that seems very inspired!!! looking forward to more
Yup this is my life!
Wonderful!!! keep going. And may I say, it felt very personal, emotional, and inspired!!! really good
5774817 Thank you!
Very good
5815876 Thanks!
I like this fic. Good job :)
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That was no doubtfully the................. BEST THING EVER!!!!!!!!!
I like it short!
5822248 Oh wow!
AWESOME!
5831283 Yay!
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Get your friendship on you *bleep* of a mare.
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Very good sissy!
5955451 Thanks!
5958462 of course!!! its good to see your online, how was you breack! I really missed you!
5958468 I missed you too!
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Please finish! It is epic!
6070533 There are only 2 chapters left!
Cheese Sandwich and Pinkie Pie must help! They are...the Party/Friendship/Epicness Super Heroes!
6078103 So true! I think you will like the ch 7 twist though!
im sorry, but setting aside the spelling and grammar errors...this story really isnt much of a story. theres no real plot, no conflict, nothing to really make the reader care about whats happening. id put about 75% of this as needless filler fluff at least, not serious writing. Lyra and Bonbon go through no character development, they come out the same at the other end as they started, there r elements of what might have become a good plot but were never used, u pulled in the Doctor seemingly for nothing more than shits and giggles without actually having him contribute to the story...honestly, theres so much wrong with this it would be easier to list what u got right rather than point out errors...and thats if im being kind!
i would take another look at this and other long running stories on this site, such as Past Sins or Fallout: Equestria, look at what makes a good story like that last, look at y they have the kind of following they do...learn and improve from what u learn. writing, is a craft, and as writers we r charged with giving our readers an interesting world to look at. we r artists who paint without colours, weave without cloth, sculpt without stone...words r our ink, our thread, our marble. the mind is our canvas, and where our art is displayed. this story...it is a childs scribble, hung on the fridge with ducky magnets by doting parents and called art, yet hidden away after the child is grown, replaced by greater accomplishments.
6321478 Yes I know this story isn't one of my best, and I'm going to be honest with you. I got bored. I really started to hate where I was going with this, I wanted to do something to make it better... and I was really close too, then writer's block struck. You can kind guess from there why this story died. I am sorry for the horribleness of my shitty writing.
6321621 hmmmn, a sadly common occurrence...stories lose focus, or simply arnt interesting for the writer anymore...and writers block can be the worst, i know...yet, there is hope in the passage of time, new ideas come to light, the Muse, fickle in her moods, speaks again after a long silence. it happens, much more often than one might think. i do not look down on u for this, but...perhaps in time...this can be reworked and made better? who is to say what lies in the passing of Time?
6321656 True enough