Fuzzy, furry, friendly puppy person from Scotland.
Once in a great while Leapling day affects all the ponies of Equestria, Earth ponies become unicorns, Unicorns become pegasus and Pegasus become Earth ponies until the sunsets!
How will this effect the mane six and worse, how will leapling day ever end if nopony knows where Princess Celestia is!
Contains some mild adult themes in one scene describing the connection Earth ponies feel to every other pony.
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Will this work?
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Yeah it will.
Heehee, Dinky-Derp day, I get it! That is so adorable... especially if you've ever seen the pic where Derpy has a plunger on her head, and Dinky has little leaf wings strapped on her sides.
Though...pinkie with magic >.>
Hmm...
I now im adding to many pony faces but these are the most comments i put on!
So luna's glowing...
awesome
Celestia is playing hooky from her princessy duties should be like
But im like 
And i can't wait to see what's happened to Celestia cause she's going to be all like
Woo!
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Oh gosh man see this is why I have awesome editors like LoganBerry and Husketeer, yes she is (and always has been) grey, but i'm pretty badly colour blind so she's always a little pinkish to me
o.O
++ Edit
There we go sssssh don't tell anypony.
I can't wait for next leapling day!! Go magical Rainbow Dash!
And conffetti Clouds and sky partys!
And a mustache!
This story was really cute, just the fact that you included Derpy and Dinky makes me smile. Definatly worth a thumbs up and fav.
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Glee!
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Oh alright cause when you were saying pink i was thinking of Pinkie the whole time...but this is an awesome Story! And sorry about all the comments but i had to commet each chapter... But thank you for writing this! and i am adding you as a friend!
571813 I appreciate that you didn't make Derpy sound stupid, though I thought it was amusing how she kept refering to whoever opened the door as who she expected (Spike as Twilight and all that) Dinky may replace Luna as best princess... maybe, she is really adorable.
twilight use telescope to look at princess luna and princess luna use the telescope to look back at twilight...
Fun little read. I liked the story, it had some funny moments and the concept of a day for everyone to see the world a little bit differently for a day is very interesting. Also found little to no errors (there were one or two letters that were supposed to be capitalized) but in all very nice to see a story with good grammar. In all, loved the story
Granny Pie?
Don't you mean Granny Smith?
This is a good story. The personalities are consistent, the pacing is great...
But there's just one thing wrong.
The wording.
It's rushed, jumbled, nonsensical, and just plain dosn't read well.
Find someone to help you out with that, and this story would've been a header.
571981Thanks I am working on that and have some excellent people assisting me with this.
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I was realllllly hungry when I wrote that bit...
571848
Telescopeception!
hold on, if Derpy is a Pegasus normally, and this leapling day all Pegasi are Earth ponies, then how come she is a unicorn?!
572191 She's very special
“Oh well of course we still need someone to lower the sun, end Leapling day so we can all wake up normally tomorrow, the night before a Leapling day I cast a spell to find someone pure of heart and strong of will this time it found Dinky and to ensure she stays safe Derpy becomes a unicorn, it’s that simple.” Celestia explained.
why is this not a real holiday.
it so should be.
and yeah, the only thing wrong with this story is the wording; if you got it proof read, it would be epic.
Critic in me it telling me things.
I enjoyed the story and concept of everyone swapping race. But.... Your punctuation really needs work. Taking a completely random passage -
An example of what could help -
May look like a small thing, but really helps with the readability of a story.
The writing isn't bad, just watch sentence length, and remember to put in pauses. The , and . key are your friends, use them. Other than that a decent story.
572236 I promise I reallllllllllllllly am working on those.
Next story will be better.
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Haha, don't worry about it. As long as you know where the problems are, and acknowledge them, you can fix them!
Great concept, language usage was good, fix that one thing and you'll be golden.
Dat ending.
Nice little story. Had some word usage issues, but that can be cleared up with some editing. A fun read.
Next leapling day: Where unicorns become unicorns and Pegasi become Pegasi, and earth ponies turn into earth ponies.
how come Derpy is a Unicorn.... she should be an Earth Pony seeing as she is a PEGASUS normally
572634 She is uh ... still very special?
“Oh well of course we still need someone to lower the sun, end Leapling day so we can all wake up normally tomorrow, the night before a Leapling day I cast a spell to find someone pure of heart and strong of will this time it found Dinky and to ensure she stays safe Derpy becomes a unicorn, it’s that simple.” Celestia explained.
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yeah yeah...I hadn't finished reading when I posted that
"...Earth ponies become unicorns, Unicorns become pegasus and Pegasus become Earth ponies until the sunsets!"
"Derpy beamed happily as a soft grey glow flowed from her horn..."
Um...
"It looked like the royal canterlot seal but it was not there was something strange about the design not the seal of princess Celestia that was for sure he had seen enough of those to be able to tell it right away!"
That's one hell of a run-on.
And I don't think quoting the full theme was really necessary.
Various grammar and punctuation errors made it too much of a pain to get into this.
572896 Sorry to hear that, i'll work harder for you next time. It will be better.
'Dinky-Derpy Day" Oh I see what you did there.
Um this seems kind of rushed, still good though.
This is good but it seemed to have a rushed feel to it.
Quick note: I'm the "Loganberrybunny" mentioned in the "Thanks" section. I, um, haven't done any actual proofing on this story. I was asked to, and agreed, but I only got as far as giving some general hints, such as on punctuation. From a quick scan, it doesn't look as though my suggestions have been acted on...
573656 I am typing as fast as I can
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As I've said elsewhere, that's not really the point. Proof-reading is not something that can be done after publication, or even during it. It needs to be done before publication. You didn't say a word to me about the story having to be ready by a specific time. To be honest, I might well have declined the offer to help if you had, since I dislike that type of pressure.
Why am I upset? Look at the comments above ours. Most people say that they like the story itself, but feel it needs proof-reading. In the "Thanks" chapter, my name is listed under proofing. People will look at that and assume I'm not very good at it. It's unfairly hurting my reputation for good spelling and punctuation, a reputation that means a lot to me.
I'm happy to say here that I enjoy the story too, and that I love the concept of Leapling Day. It really is only the proofing stuff I have a problem with.
So that's how alicorns are made!
574120 No they are made via MAGIC SEX
Dinky's still an alicorn................................
With how everyone is unpracticed, and Pinkie being Pinkie, I'm not sure I'd trust her teleporting me around...
12 injured, as a light drizzle of ponies rained down from the sky - 48% less than previous record low.
A patient comments from her hospital bed, "Sweet Celestia, I can't believe I forgot about Leapling day! And after all the warnings too!"
The terrifying thing is that by this idea, if I were a pony I would probably be earth pony. I think I'm going to be sick.
(Also, I agree with the above, good job overall, but some troubled wording.)
Something tells me someone's favorite character is Dinky. :D
I reviewed your story tonight you can find the review here