Ditzy Doo tries to make Hearth's Warming Day perfect for her daughter but in secret she hopes her wish comes true. Will those she holds dear show up?
Update: Found out the ending got cut some how. Plus made minor changes. Any pony wants to be a pre-reader for my other fics, drop me a line. I'd be very greatful!
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D'aaaaaaw. Sweet story!
Ditsy is a gentle mare, isn't she?
Oh dear imagine having a snow ball fight with the princesses
soo, pinkie was clopping on big mac's head?
okay then. 
anyway, loved this story, would love to see more!
so cute
Oh my word.... Where to start.
First, with the good. Excellent Story. Beautiful ideas. Interesting actions. Snowball fights and Muffins.
Then, the bad. THIS NEEDS A PRE-READER. So many sentences were run-on or seemed clunky. If someone had edited this for content as well as spelling/grammar, this could have very well been one of my favorites.
Alas, nay. Good work, however, and I look forward to more work. Hopefully with a Pre-reader.
"Pinkie clops excitedly on his head" mmhmm, im guessing she was a bit too excited?
HNNNGGGG!!!!1!!!111!!!
I NEED INSULIN!! NOA!!!!!
I couldn't read the story... I can't stand how it's in present-tense.
"With a sigh she enters her house and unclips the bag to it lays next to the door before continuing deeper into her house" should be "With a sigh, she entered the house and deposited her bag next to the door before continuing deeper into her house." Otherwise, it seemed good - I just couldn't pay attention to the story because of how it was written. The run-on sentences and present-tense writing style were incredibly distracting. If you re-write it in past-tense, as it should be, I'll consider reading the rest of it. 