Equestrian Fans know Daring Do to be the most Adventurous Pony ever to be created by A.K. Yearling. Few know the truth about her, and only two know of her greatest secret, including herself. But what happens when that secret has found it's way back into her life?
Rate T for Safety.
Note: The first chapter will be focused on the episode "Daring Don't", so I do not claim ownership to any of the lines or characters used from the episode in this story. Basically the first chapter is "Daring Don't" from a different perspective.
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Great story, I'd like to see more (if you're planning to make another chapter).
When I first saw Daring Do, I thought she was Rainbow Dash (it was the episode when Rainbow Dash was in a hospital). So I watched the episode "Daring Don't" last night and I saw the similarities.
nice, needs a cover picture.
5739539 I know, but I I can't find a proper picture to represent the story.
5739529 I am still trying to think if I should continue this or not. Be patient. I am leaning towards making another chapter.
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Try to search devianart for pictures of Daring Do and Rainbow Dash together. Or Rainbow Dash wearing Daring Do gear.
5739761 I'll try, but I don't know if there's anything there that represents what I looking for, but still, I'll check.
Let me preface this by saying that the idea itself, is sound, and has potential for further development.
However, your execution leaves a lot to be desired.
For a start, you really didn't plan this, did you? That letter essentially gives the game away straight off the bat, and from there it's just rehashing what we've already seen. That's just boring.
Next off, your writing is, for want of a better word, clunky. You spend too much time describing and explaining the action, that it losses it
Oops.
To continue, it loses its appeal.
You refer to the fact that daring is rainbow's mother too often. It's unneeded. Show, don't tell. We understand, we don't need it spelt out to us.
Also, I would've picked daring to be her older sister, but that's just me
5739833 Well, I'll see what I can do to change up the story a bit. This is why I look for constructive criticism. I have to hit a few bumps in the road in order to better my writing. So for the time being I will unpublish the chapter till I feel it's ready, once I edit some things.
Only the 1st chapter & already I love this story big time. I eagerly await further chapters. Keep up the awesome work.
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Agreed, the letter part should be removed and posted in a later chapter, or just removed.
5741733 Okay, I'll remove it, but I have to make some changes to the beginning since that's the case.
Hmm...
DD's views on Daring Don't? Interesting...
5741742 I feel that I should point out where after Daring Do discovers that the ring is safe and begins cleaning up her home Twilight state Rainbow Dash's name to which where Daring Do may or may have over heard. So if I might make a small suggestion: if Rainbow ever does realize that Daring Do does in fact know her name dispite nobody or should I say "nopony" told her directly & Rainbow desides to ask Daring about the matter later on: you might want to have Daring tell Rainbow that she over heard Princess Twilight mention Rainbow's name while acting like she didn't.
Just a small idea you may or may not concider for later on. In any case I really do love the idea of Daring Do being Rainbow Dash's Mother. ;)
5742172 That was actually something I looked into. Now, you do make a fine point, so I will consider it when I decide to make future chapters.
5742197 Ok. No need to rush though. I'm not really good at all with writing stories: fanfictions or otherwise but I have heard somewhere that a truly good / great story takes both time and patients. ;)
Okay, I have a straight up question for you - do you have an actual plan for where you're going to take this fic? I, personally, know where I'd want to take it, but that's just me.
This fic's current biggest problem is that you are focusing too much on the "DD!Mother-RD", that it simply is too much.
So, my advice to you:
->Don't reveal first chapter. I know the temptation is great, but trust me, the reveal will be worth it if its delayed.
->Limit yourself to the number of references you make to the fact. No need to justify everything Daring does.
->Twist Daring's canon responses slightly, to make her seem more natural. You have the AU tag, nopony's gonna hold it against you.
PM me, I get bored sometimes...
Also, I think you should keep going with the story, you just can't let it rest now
5743734 Just to say, your first suggestion is a little late, since everyone who has read it knows.
My personal theory is that Daring Do is Rainbow Dash's madien aunt. This makes more sense because, if you watch the episode "Games Ponies Play", during RD's flashback you see two ponies with rainbow-colored manes that are indirectly presumed to be RD's parents. Also, this help explains why neither one seems to be aware of the relationship between them.
Great start. Keep up the great work. I also think that Daring Do is Rainbow Dash mom.
i strong do think that Daring Do is RD's Mom. i swear if you watch the episode enough, you pick up on things. When they hugged at the end, she looked like she nuzzled RD. And we only saw Rainbow Dash's dad in that Flashback for Equestria games. I really want the writers to bring her back next season. Enough with the new Characters, there a few old characters we need to see more of. We've never seen Fluttershy's family, and im one of those that likes the idea that Scootaloo might be her kid. Who else here agrees on that?
6980724 While I agree that I would like to see Fluttershy's family, I don't think Scoots is Fluttershy's kid. But the show could prove me wrong. They tend to surprise us. As for why I think Daring Do is Rainbow Dash's mother, here are reasons.
1: She has a more mature voice then Rainbow Dash.
2: Her stubbornness is on par with Rainbow's if not a little higher. (Possibly a family trait.)
3: Personalities are similar in nature (Another possible family trait.)
4. Not once did Rainbow Dash mention her name to Daring Do. And I don't think that she heard Twilight say Rainbow Dash's name when her focus was on cleaning up her house.
5. Yes, of course the nuzzle. I mean, how many times have you seen that happen among ponies, aside from close relations. Hugging is one thing, but nuzzling is more of a family thing, and pets are considered part of the family. Also, Rainbow and Scoots have that sister thing going, so that understandable if they nuzzle each other and i- *Stardust blown in the face.* going down. *Plop onto my favorite pillow.*
Luna: Tsk tsk tsk tsk tsk tsk tsk tsk. It's time for bed little one. *Picks me up and takes me to the crib.*
Me: *in my sleep* Just put da hay in de appwe and eat da candwe.
6980975 i love that last part you did. Just put the hay in napkin and eat the candle XD. i just loved that episode when Spike tried to handle stuff on Twilight's behalf and kinda botched it. Im rewatching all of Season 4 right now, since Season 6 is supposed to be coming in April, which is funny since that's also when Game of Thrones 6th season also starts. i laughed at that scene in Tanks for the Memories when Twi's like " Prepare yourselves everypony WINTER IS COMING. XD.
I really love this to be continued please!
Is this story going to continue? It's quite interesting what you're doing...