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GrizzlytheMedic


I put out fires, write stories, other fun stuff in between too~

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I call Firsties! I know it's immature, but it is fun being first.

Well this was interesting. I hope all these stories don't burn you out (no shitty pun intended) on the Lament stories. You are churning them out so quickly, yet they're all pretty much faultless. Congratulations Sir, have a moustache or something :moustache::twistnerd:

Excellent start! Bravo! A little rushed, but that's okay. I would have liked more details about the firefight, still, good chapter!

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I never get tired of Lament Stories. It gives me options on what I want to write and I have the attitude that I update when I update.

I couldn't help but notice that Applejack doesn't have her usual Southern accent. Other than that, your as good as gold, fella.

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Personally, I don't like writing it. It feels sorta off for me, that's all.

Nah man, its cool. It's still a great story so far.

listened to his now elevated heart rate slow to a clam tempo

I believe you mean "calm.

Apple Bloom cheered,mping circles around a quite disgruntled Kate.

I believe you forgot the first two letters of "jumping".


Anyway, good chapter. I thoroughly enjoy any story with a good amount of cuddles.
Also, i call Firsties on this chapter's comments!

Took me a little bit to formulate a plot but I did it!

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Yeah, about two seconds on Google. Now that wasn't so hard, was it? :ajsmug:

Applejack was the type of mare most stallions would kill for. Light orange fur, sandy blonde mane, a taut body and the mother of all flanks. So why in the hay was she not in a relationship? The answer was simple, she wasn’t interested in any of the stallions around. They were just not her type to be honest. She worked to hard to have a stallion crush on her and dump her after a one night stand. Applejack wanted a long term relationship, somepony to cuddle up with and that would be content with things other than sex. She would sometimes sit in the orchard and pray that somepony would come into her life that would love and care for her all the time, no matter what she looked like. This is where Jacob came in. Another human dropped into Equestria after he nearly perished while fighting a forest fire. After he had recovered and made himself comfortable with Equestrian customs and traditions, he decided to put his already muscular body to work as a Ponyville firefighter and medic. He was really good at his job and made a decent living on his wages, yet he still could feel that something or rather someone was missing from the equation.

Not only is this a wall of text, it's a plot dump for the ages. Show, don't tell. There are at least six elements there that you could include into the narrative as, say, casual talk between AJ and her friends.

lol @ end note.

I don't read your stories for the clop...the stories themselves are nice and make me feel happy...and also remind me i don't have a girlfriend...o well you can't have everything

She worked to hard to have a stallion crush on her and dump her after a one night stand. Applejack wanted a long term relationship, somepony to cuddle up with and that would be content with things other than sex

Really? i mean she can sense the truth and lie. but why someone dump her?

“I love you Jake. More than I love apples.”

I love you

5704676 aaaaaaaaaaaaaaah! So cuuuute:pinkiehappy:

I think this was supposed to be kissed but I could be wrong.

Jake smiled as he hissed her nose

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Naw bro, don't you know it's a thing when you're getting intimate with someone to look them deeply in the eyes, slowly get real close... And then pretend your a snake lol reeeally sets the mood

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:rainbowlaugh:I laughed really hard at this, having done it by accident before. :rainbowlaugh:

And the wait begins...

enjoying it a lot but will leave the clop chapter for later.

*gagging*

where the fuck am i

This is a very nice story, very romantic

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