Tomorrow
“I did the right thing, didn’t I, Gummy?” Pinkie Pie said between munches of a vanilla cupcake.
The baby alligator looked at his master from deep inside of the large crystal cage he lived in during winter. His large open eyes reflected the orange light of the incandescent light-bulbs
“I mean, Twilight is going to be happy now, and so will AJ…”
Despite what she had said, Pinkie Pie did know why AJ had been so nervous when she came to Sugarcube Corner. She also knew why Twilight had been acting so awkwardly this evening
“She’s gonna be happier than she was with me.”
Gummy blinked, with a speed that would rival Tank.
“Ugh… We’ve been through this already, Gummy,” Pinkie Pie said, looking at her pet alligator with an annoyed look. “Twilight and I broke up because things between us didn’t work, and I accepted that. I cried and cried and cried, but I accepted it.”
Gummy’s left eye opened, slowly.
“But it didn’t, Gummy! It was nice while it lasted, but it’s over now,” Pinkie Pie said, burying her face in her pillows.
Gummy opened his right eye, just as slowly.
“We agreed that it was over, and we agreed to move on,” Pinkie Pie said.
Gummy closed his eyes.
“No, Gummy, I don’t think Twilight came here tonight because she wanted us to get back together, I don’t think she’d do something like that,” Pinkie Pie said as she turned around to face the little alligator.
Pinkie’s eyes moistened, but she didn’t cry.
“I don’t know… Maybe she just wanted to be sure everything was done between us before she moved on,” Pinkie Pie said as she looked through the window at the falling snowflakes.
“That’s a part of my life that has already passed, Gummy, and now,” Pinkie Pie paused as she took a deep breath, “now it’s time I close that chapter and move on.”
She then took another bite off the cupcake she was eating, and she licked the pink and purple frosting from her lips.
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5667033
Make a happy thing, you faggot
I like how this went though I actually think I would have liked it better without the third chapter. The second chapter gave you all the hints you really needed to know what was going on and with just a few tweaks would have been enough to carry your intentions. I think the explanation at the end just isn't as good as making us think for it.
As for more somebody needs to come and cheer Pinkie up. Maybe Dash should come over...
5667261
I may just do that, friend__
5667425
I have to agree with you on that one...
In hindsight , I shouldn't have tried spelling everything out at the end.
I'll see if I can fix it.
Still, I'm glad you enjoyed it.
5667475
If you did not do a good job earlier in the story then I think the third chapter as is would have been required but I think you did a good job of giving us all the info we needed to come to the correct conclusion by the end of the second chapter. At least I could for sure. I do think that if the third chapter was eliminated then you would need to add some bits to the 2nd chapter to bring out all that you want to. I think it is fully possible.
Don't give up on a third chapter though as a lot can be done with one I just think that an explanation chapter is not required.
also, this made me think of a song called "Just to See You Smile"
Ohhhh... gotcha. Kinda sad though. Poor pinkie.
Goddamn it Zaid. You are far too good at making me sad.
5667046 So sad, but yet so adorable...
...
5675780
It... it was for the best...
5677216
Oh, you should see what I have in store, then.
Here's a preview:
5681587
I serve to please.
5681963
I don't know whether to be nervous or excited....
5811045
That's actually because I'm a massive pleb and cannot write things for people
5811979
I always suspected...
Either way, thanks for giving my story a shot, (would it improve your opinion of this fic if I told you the 2nd and 3rd chapter were based on personal experience?) and hopefully I can write more non-sad, better romance fics in the future.
5816945 i have not read the other chapters yet
so no spoilers
I-I don't know how to feel
confused, I guess, is the best word
5853376
It's curious, I initiallly thought that I was being too obvious here.
5853386
So is life. Confusing.
It's just that sometimes, it's better to let go, in spite of your own happiness.
5853543 If you love me let me go
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Even if I do, you'd still owe me a Twinkie fic.
5858928 fug
This broke my heart. It makes me angry that Twilight cheated when she was happy with Pinkie. Good story. It made me cry.
7263930 she didn't cheat. Pinkie even said that they broke up because things weren't working. Twilight's just trying out a relationship with AJ.
7972038 But Pinkie Pie and Twilight don't get back together!
7974225
That's how life works. Regardless of all the could have been under the sun, the truth sometimes difers from what we wished that was.
But life goes on, and we go on with it.
7972038
You got that right. It was only her past with Pinkie that prompted Twilight's visit. A way of resolving all the loose ends between them, and see if there was anything she was leaving behind were she to move on.
NOOOO.
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Y I S
I'm just wondering, shouldn't you add a "sad" tag to this story? It's really heartbreaking :(