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Gwen Tennyson had insisted to her cousin and her friends that they go to this strange planet on their road trip through the galaxy; a planet full of ponies with odd abilities, filled with magic. It sounded fascinating! What they don't know is a strange new outsider is threatening the world...and worse still, that the pastel-coated paradise they think they've landed on isn't quite as shiny and clean as they think!
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THIS HAS POTENTIAL!
5580672
I'll definitely try. Don't be afraid to leave feedback on ways I can improve it. I shall never improve my writing without good advice from readers like yourself. :D
pretty random here but what? how can elements of harmony be soo evil?
5581246
I've put in a clue or two in Chapter 2 as to what's going on...does that help explain things? Or at least give you an idea?
What is happening?
Evil is happening.
And it's happening all around the globe.
"They told me a storm was coming... but that was a lie. The storm was already here."
5701704
My lips...are sealed.
...This is creepy. What's happened to Celestia? What is she doing to everypony?
5722835
Oh, she's there...but whatever happened to the others had happened to her as well. But believe me...there is a very good reason why they're acting this way, I just can't say why, or give much clues or it would be too obvious.
5722903 The Elements have gone crazy and are forcing everyone to be super-harmonious? Wouldn't be the first time. Seen it like, two times before I think?
Oh my god, this is actually starting to get creepy.
5723492
Thank you! I want it to be clearly unsettling but not outright in your face with the disturbing elements.
They overdo it...
They overdo it and corrupt it...
Awful. Having to be kind even if it means death, having to stay loyal even if it means, and all other Elements too, and being punished horribly if you do not follow it.
The Elements are evil?
...I think I understand now...
OH MY GOD, THAT PASSPHRASE IS GENIUS!
5724857
I'm glad it's sucked you in! This is the problem with making virtues mandatory: it gets very easy to go down a slippery slope.
5725100 I think I know what is wrong, but the problem is... if it's right, I don't want to ruin it for others!
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I can't very well give it away. But if you think you know the answer, then note me, and I'll let you know if you're on the right track! :)
5724857 if a kindness stops being a choice it is no longer a positive gesture and becomes a forced gesture it no longer is a kindness only a required action with conquences for those that don't follow.
even before this it was to far, destiny is marked, animals and plants dependent to essentially total collapse and little to absolutely no natural instincts. A world so corrupted that you need to managed the very seasons. a running world has a system that shifts finely based on what's happening to it when it utterly collapses it should be common sense something's wrong but these are beings that think a world would naturally form with a sun rotating it ( or really having to be rotated around it)
5731431 Yeah, makes sense. The Everfree is the only natural place left. Ponies are not supporting nature, they are enslaving it, corrupting. They have started as parasites and what have they become?
The Overlords.
5732551 yep and there unable to even see that its not natural for things to not function on there own, that things worked before them
5732577 That's the masterplan of the Great Corrupters, who call themselves the Unificationers...
They started to corrupt the nature, and made sure even the most good people wouldn't ruin their work by making people think that's natural.
They are EEEEEEEEEVIL, I am pretty sure Starswirl researched a way to un-do that but failed.
Wow.
this... is getting rather creepy
5978639
Yeah. It's like, "Wow".
5979444
I should HOPE so! I wanted to really establish something clearly wasn't right and build up to just how wrong everything truly is. To show things...and people...are not whom they're meant to be...
5980583 I like creepy..... its fun to be creepy
I am thoroughly confused.
6503683
Don't worry. Soon all will be made clear. :)
HOLY HECK ARE THE ELEMENTS SENTIENT BEINGS?!?!
Holy heck that sounds like Vegeta
"THAT'S MY BULMA!!!"
6574338
Oh reaaaaally? ;)
THIS GO REALY CRAZY REALY FAST
Epic rap battles of history: Adam vs. eve I think was used here, if I'm right sweat I love that one
Ironically coming from the guy who does actually have a Kill count and has killed on screen before and wanted to put Kevin in the dirt during his Ultimate Arc
He literally wiped out the rest of the Lymaxx who are infact sentient and was capable of speech and independent thought and he Merced them without a second though hell 10 yr old Ben was really about thay life bro was mercing people left and right then they did directly kill sone DNA aliens in AF as well soooo yeah Ben is willing to kill