A few days after what happened at the Royal Wedding, Chrysalis, now banished to the Badlands, thinks about what her life would be like if she were a "real" pony.
One day, Chrysalis gets her wish as she wakes up as a regular Earth Pony in Ponyville. Not only that, but it seems that the Canterlot Invasion never happened and that the Royal Wedding went off as planned. Add that to that fact that she is suddenly friends with the Element Bearers.
Maybe this is a second chance for her, or maybe it's just a dream that will shortly fade away, we'll see.
Note: This is my first Fanfic I ever wrote, so cut me some slack on the criticism. You're welcome to tell me what I did wrong so I can improve.
Cover Art by Vavacung on DeviantArt
Chapters (1)
Dude. There's a story with the same title and cover art. This story to be exact.
yeah, you gonna have to change the art and title.
You will continue to recieve downvotes unless you change the title and cover art. Just a tip.
Firstly, this isn't your story at all now is it?
Rule number one: Give credit where credit is due, otherwise you're just plagiarizing someone else's work. And even if you had referenced this other story, I find rewrites to be incredibly uninspired and unimaginative.
Write your own story.
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Actually this is third story of same name ;p
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I wish to bring to light this story. Originally titled "If I Were a Pony," using the same cover art, and published before Pen Mightier published his. Exactly what inspired Arreis to change their title and cover art while Pen kept his, I don't know, and really, it doesn't matter.
All the stories related to this were inspired, on some level, by the PMV If I Were a Pony, which was published before any of the stories were.
Having read this story, I find I don't particularly care for it — I don't like present-tense outside of first-person narratives and the pacing is too quick for me — but I likewise find that it is, indeed, not a rehash of Pen Mightier's; this fact suggests that none of you actually read it before blasting it.
Taking into account that it is not the only story on this site that shares a title and/or cover art with another, no, Ragegamer does not need to change either in order to stop receiving downvotes. He just needs for other people to actually read what he writes before they claim he's a copycat when he obviously isn't.
5486622 it's mainly how quickly these stories popped up at once.
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We both know that's not an excuse for the response this story has received thus far.
Really? People are bashing the story simply due to the fact that it matches the title(and coverart) of two other stories? REALLY? That's...disappointing. Now, mind you that it is similar to its two predecessors but still, c'mon. I read the story. Not bad. Not my story. Doesn't mean I'm going to down vote just because of its title and coverart.
I'm disappointed fimfiction.
5486638 All i've said that he should rename it and change he coverart. note I have not downvoted it at all. haven't read it.
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I'll retract my statement of plagiarism now knowing this. However, I must confess to my dislike of said "Inspired works". There's a difference between writing a story set with the same premise as another, even as a spin-off, eg; the FoE universe, as apposed to rewriting a story with the same title and cover art with the same character. Even with a few tweaks here and there, I still feel as though you're simply being unimaginative.
I would defend his work to the T if it was entirely original. But it isn't, its just lazy.
Same art and same name just days from the story posted by Pen Mightier is just... rubbing salt in the wound...
In fact, I'd like to add further.
I still defend why I down-voted this. In no way or form had the author sought to credit his work as inspired. It matters little whether it was based off Pen Mightier's work or a PMV. You still give credit for work that isn't original. His Title and Cover Art is no excuse for a supposed "give away". Not everyone is aware of all original works, so you make them aware. For all intents and purposes, had I opened up this Fic with no prior knowledge of the PMV or any other fan related work, I would have thought this story to be original.
There was no effort to reference any works on the Author's side other than the cover art (Which by any estimation could have been his own commission to the ignorant). I call that deceptive. Willful or otherwise.
Okay, I've been reading the comments that have been posted here and, I just want to say sorry. Truthfully I wasn't really intending on "Plagiarizing" or anything like that, I'll admit that I was kind of running blind with writing stories but, this was mostly from watching the PMV. I also saw that you guys are saying that I wasn't really giving credit to the author OR artist. I already GAVE credit to the artist, as for the "original author", I don't know what you're talking about, Like I said, it's mostly based on Vavacung's PMV.
As for the comments that are going on the quality of this apparently forsaken fanfic, I just don't know much about writing a good fanfic. Sure I get the gist of it but thats all. I get that the pace is kind of quick but again, this is my first time. I can't get good storylines, my stories don't make sense,
In addition, this was pretty much my headcanon on this thing. Other than what I've already mentioned, I don't know what else to say other than I'm canceling this god forsaken story. It's gotten way too much negativity for my comfort. Hopefully my second attempt won't be piece of shit.
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I just read your first chapter. It's not bad. it's also NOT the same as the other story by the same name. what I recommend is that you rename this fic and possibly find a new cover art. It's an enjoyable first chapter and I think along of your down votes were... undeserved. Even though you've canceled it heres an upvote for you. I hope you reconsider.
Have a nice night
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I like the idea of this story, like for that.
But I think especially the first part of the chapter was a bit too short. It felt like you tried to rush trough the happenings.
5486622 When did I "blast it"? I was simply pointing out that most people who read the title and saw the cover art would downvote. Also, I did read the story before commenting.
Why is it that the majority of the Internet mistakes friendly advice for hate?
How did this get past moderation?
Reported.
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Just because a story has the same title and cover art is not grounds to report it for plagiarism. 5486812, you're fine.
Everyone else, knock it off. Thanks.
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You know, you're right. My comment, on a second read, is actually pretty hostile, and none of us have been very friendly to each other (at least a little embarrassing, considering our fandom).
Friendship Mulligan?
I'm sorry to see this story cancelled because people are assholes who won't shut up about something that they feel they have realized before anyone else.
That being said I think the idea for this story is good in concept but you need to work on your technical writing skills.
Frist pick a tense, past or present, and stick with it, switching between the two makes things confusing.
Second, watch your pacing and maybe describe some of the events in more detail. As long as you don't take too long giving the description will help readers relate more to the story.
Third, watch your grammar. I can't think of specific instances but you need to be careful how you word things in order to prevent throwing your readers out of the story.
This story had tons of potential, perhaps you may consider returning to the concept in the future?
Nice