Ronin , Nicholas, and Raiden Blazeheart lived together in an apartment complex in Florida. But, when the youngest of the three brothers wishes for a place to belong, the trio find themselves thrown into a world of multicolored ponies and magic. How will the three adapt to the change of scenery, and how will the new world change who they are as people?
Hilarity, Romance, and a whole lot of soul searching is to be expected as the trio live out their new lives in equestria.
This story will contain mild descriptions of blood and violence (where needed) and slight profanity from the older siblings, although both of these won't be a part of every chapter anyway.
Takes place near the end of season 2, about a month before the wedding episode.
(Edit: 3k views? That's insane!)
Way better than my first chapter.
I just got back in the pony game so I'm in a similar position.
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I've been a fan of the series for 4 months now, so I'm not that better off tbh. glad to see you like it so far.
Oh, I'm a huge fan of comments, btw. So if any readers want to say anything, please do.
One thing I didn't cover in the note though: I have a few more pre-planned chapters already in set up for writing, but after that it migjt take a week or two to make more chapters. But hey! quality isn't cheap, and neither are any of y'all. So I refuse to give y'all that level of work.
ENJOY!!!!
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Hmmm I like this fic. it has great potential some words don't fit some sentences and maybe a few errors I couldn't put my hoof (yes) on, but other than that looking forward to more of this.
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Fixed it, and thanks for the positive comment. Mistakes will be made when your typing on a phone, but I will try to keep an extra eye out for said errors.
A little advise before you add the chapter select all the text, throw it in a Google doc to check for spelling and grammar errors then pop it back in when you've got everything. That's what I do.
Also I can't wait for next chapter.
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thanks for the tip! I'm probably going to do that next time.
Ok, that’s awesome.
What would happen?
Her? Is he western or something?
The Irony
Is the grandpa western, too?
Well, that’s not fair.
Damn, throwing your brother under the bus.
Yup, sounds like school.
That might be good or bad.
A soft him? Like a clone?
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the grandfather is scottish, the her is a mispell i am currently fixing. and the soft him is supposed to be a hum. thanks for catching these mispells for me!
That’s supposed to be Nicholas, isn’t it?
Ok, that’s amazing.
Soellweaver?
Wow, that kinda sounds like fluttershy a little bit.
I would have lied my a** off.
That counts as meat, right?
Damnit
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No worries
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wow. kinda underwhelming comment there, considering your last two, lol. but reading your comments definitely reminded me of why writers write stories. The Readers! im glad to see your enjoying the fic.
Is she referring to that guy in the last chapter?
That’s not really something to scold yourself over.
Why?
I would have assumed ronin was with Luna.
Is that really what her hair looks like? Also, where did you get the peace sign part from?
Is that meant to be a reference to “Descendants”?
You didn’t. If you did what I think you did, then that is funny, cruel, and bad all at the same time.
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Trust me, you won’t have to worry much about my comments being underwhelming. And of course I’m enjoying it, I’m already coming up with theories.
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celestia cringed because she prefers people to NOT treat her like that in private, the "peace sign" with cadence was an oof due to an fanart instead of what her marks supposed to look like (fixing it as well) as for the ronin thing, i probably did.
P.S: nailed the reference on the head, buddy.
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Welp, when are we scheduling ronin’s funeral?
P.S: I knew it was descendants, that song pooped in my head right away when I read it.
I definitely think you are rushing through the story a little, like how he just lands in a tub and is immediately escorted to breakfast.
Like I get it how Celestia might be used to humans but he came to terms with it real quick.
But overall I like the concept you are presenting, Keep it up.
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I realize I am rushing a tad, and I do plan to slow down a bit. As for raiden getting used to it... lets just say it hasn't sank in yet that he probably is stuck there. his freak-out is coming, just not right of the bat. thanks for noticing though, it means your putting in the effort to properly read the story.
Well I feel honored for you to use the name I suggested
Good chapter as always
(P.s there is some typos)
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no problem! and I went through and fixed the ones I could find. Thanks!
Damn, you did my man dirty.
That it still awesome.
Damn, he must have been a veteran or something.
Wait, what?
No way
Really? How?
Oh boy. If he thinks that’s bad, he should have seen Slavery and The Holocaust. Now when I think about it, I wonder how the changelings and ponies would react?
Oh god. He should’ve never made that promise.
Ohh. Wait, is that true?
Wait, i don’t think it does. Doesn’t it just make them tired or something? If so, does that count as injuring them?
Oh no. I think I can see where this is going.
Well, at least chrysalis didn’t find him, first.
Don’t call him your buddy, yet.
I mean, I guess that’s a good way of putting it.
Im starting to like ronin, now.
Oh no
She’s also cruel, manipulative, power-hungry, egotistical, deranged, unstable, arrogant, etc.
Oh boy, he’s in for it.
Interesting
Confession? Who’s?
Wow. It be your own people, sometimes.
Smallest parts? Is that meant to be a sex joke?
Is this man about to fall in love with her?
I feel like someone could make a conversation about this quote, alone.
Oh trust me, they definitely “disappeared”.
Damn, I did not expect that to be her reaction.
Wait, what? Why can’t all laws be like this?
He protected and saved your son. Better than your guards.
Sh*t, I can.
P.S: sorry about the long comment.
Interesting, I dig where this is heading, but damn security is on a budget at the hive these days.
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hehehe, no problem, Its both hilarious and awesome to see your reaction to each scene. now to answer some questions.
In most lore, changelings usually cant get nutrients from basic food. So I've decided to follow up on that.
Tak confessed to being a endangered species indirectly through his rattling on. boy cant keep his mouth shut!
the 'smallest parts' line was meant for things like her ears and stuff, but it works that way too.
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Yeah, its hard to find a good swarm these days.
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Yea, it’s really making me think and have predictions.
Wait, he’s taller than twilight?
But, he’s not a colt.
That would be amazing.
Ohh. I thought she was talking about the mayor.
I guess she doesn’t care if he’s a different creature.
She must’ve taken notes from pinkie pie.
So applejack already knew about him?
I’m surprised he was able to guess that.
I can see it.
I swear to god/celestia, she better not be upset about no four minutes. Or she better have another reason to be upset.
Ok, based on this I can say that twilight is at most 19.
Aww
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to answer the main questions:
he kneeled because twilights head was down. ponies arent that tall normally, so hes on height with most of them, if not taller.
Nicholas is a kid, so most poeple wont be afraid of him.
and yes, twilight was upset about 4 minutes.
and yeah, the CMC's aren't the best with secrets, so their respective sisters/idol already heard about Nick.
Hmmm improvements.
I approve of this.
Great work.
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Thanks! glad ya noticed.
Hmm cadance.
Most intriguing.
Ah so this takes place near the end of season 2 it finally makes more sense and interesting.
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yeah, sorry if that wasnt so clear in the description. I'm fixing that right after this comment posts
This may be a guess, but maybe it’s a food trolley?
Who?
Ok, now I’m starting to put some pieces together.
Come on, Luna. Just because you been on the moon for a thousand years that doesn’t mean you don’t know what personal space is.
I would have honestly shook my head no, just to tick her off.
Nevermind, that is way better.
Worth it.
Hey, if he’s dancing with the devil, equestria might as well be tartarus.
She better not, unless she wants to make them herself.
Naw, a month.
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Yeah, trolling luna will be a multiple occurance from Raiden. As for the question, who is the only other human that the changelings have met recently?
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I was thinking ronin, but I thought it was too easy.
well, although it is Ronin, if you want to put a theory on it, focus more on what he was stealing. why would the changeling want Celestia's late husbands necklace? but thats all Im saying!
It's the same necklace that brought them there
Do you wanna try him?
Well that explains the name and and title.
Do changelings have hair?
Interesting
Well that was quick.
Damn
Ada-what?
So the sword was the reason he won?
Wait a minute, no way.
So it’s equestria’s version of vibranium.
Technically, the sword is tuff as nails.
What’s she so upset about?
That doesn’t make no sense.
Oh no
Or else what?
Oh god
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question answering time:
1- although most changelings do not have hair, chrysalis does. so, i decided to put a twist around that by having any changeling that is either very powerful or a royal blood have hair. makes 'em unique.
2-Adamantine: first used in dnd games, i decided it would be perfect for this.
3- there is a LOT of sexual tension between Tremor and Tundra.
4-Im glad you didnt question Volt. that's a dark can of worms that won't be opened for a while, so you'll have to put up with the insane changeling/spiders antics till then.
5- anyone who fails the glorious queen if the changelings shall DIE! or at least become Volts next plaything
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Volt isn’t really hard to analyze.
I doubt chrysalis or volt would be able to do anything to ronin.
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yeah, true enough on his analysis. As for Ronin... only 1 quote comes to mind: "this isnt even my final form!!!"
same could be said for the other brothers, though.
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If you’re trying to say what I think you’re trying to say, then you may have confirmed one of my theories.
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I don’t think you pushed the reply button so I didn’t see this until now, but I’ll keep that in mind.
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late response, oops.
anyway, can't wait to see if what you think will happen is what I got planned.
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I can’t wait, either. btw, how many chapters are there, anyways?
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as of right now, there may be as much as 28 to 40 per book. honestly, there might be more, though.
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Ok, that’s good. Gives me enough time to analyze the chapters.
Every student known to man.
Ok, this only applies to elementary and middle school.
HA!!! Wanna bet?
Ahh, the nostalgia. Almost enough to bring a tear to your eye.
Trust me, he’s not that kind of angel.
I swear to god/celestia if he did that to me, he would be a real angel when I’m done with him.
Aww
Running away is a good strategy. Highly recommended
All teachers say that. It’s cap.
Interesting
Is that really the reason they glow?
Not 100% wrong.
Knew that was coming.
Aww
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Aight, I didn't think this chapter would bring many questions, and the one you did ask I won't answer for the sake of story. However, the next chapter should give you PLENTY to quote, trust me on that