This story is a sequel to Love Thy Night
It has been one year since the events of "Love Thy Night" and the annual Starfall is among Twilight Sparkle and Luna. Celebrated only every twenty two years, the event is rare and takes much energy to conjure and do. Luna is determined to make this night one week before their initial anniversary both special and memorable.
This takes place after the events of Starfall! Unaware of whom the original author is over the cover art, but personal cover-art coming soon. Thank you to my beloved editor King of Kings.
Chapters (1)
This should be The earth pony with a beige coat and a short curled mane with dark blue hair and a pink streak through it.
This should be "You shouldn't have left it unattended then, or you should have at least written a note or something!
This should be Lyra gently reached a hoof over to place over her wife’s
This should be The earth pony mare answered with silence.
This should be I'll order an extra-large batch of those strawberry tarts you like so much from Pinkie Pie.
This should be There were pages of text left neglected by the librarian of Ponyville! (as it stands, you have the word
which is a word used when you are referring to a single item, while the word were is used when referring to more than one item.)
This should be Twilight hesitated further while the realization came over her.
This should be The faint remnants of butterscotch were hinted at upon Luna’s lips. (as it stands, you have the word
which is a word used when you are referring to a single item, while the word were is used when referring to more than one item.)
This should be An eyebrow rose at once and Twilight snapped once more into reality, rushing over and half-galloping half-soaring towards the black agenda she kept stashed in her desk.
This should be Luna smiled and allowed her hoof to be moved from Twilight’s muzzle, only to meet with a hesitant nod. Or it could be Luna smiled and allowed her hoof to be moved from Twilight’s muzzle, only to be met with a hesitant nod.
This should be Far below a few lights flickered in windows, sometimes a brief glimpse of a shop owner could be seen closing down or taking the last stock of the day.
This should be The two hovered over land masses and structures of buildings all the way until they descended upon a rather steep incline.
At this point, I’m not sure if you meant to have that be a stand alone sentence, or if you meant for it to be combined with the next paragraph. So…you should probably look at this some more when you get the chance.
There should not be a space in between the first quotation mark and the word that. So, to clarify, this sentence should read: “that is not to say that dear Applejack’s pies are not always quality. This one is just more special.”
This should be Twilight only smiled briefly and sat down upon the blanket. The soft material beneath her was a relief from the cold grass they’d just walked through to get all the way here. Luna joined her within a moment and flashed a toothy grin, clearing her throat.
This should be ‘Tis in honor of all the great souls that I have known in my lifetime, both after and before my banishment as Nightmare Moon.”
This should be Everypony that has influenced me has a special history among my night sky.
This should be Twilight couldn’t help but laugh ever so softly at the randomness of her pink pony friend.
This should be “I can admit that I am rather nervous about the events of tonight,” Luna replied softly, “this only happens once every twenty-two years where the moon is perfectly aligned in the sky.”
This should be As if on a silent cue, Luna rose slowly from her spot.
The beginning of this story (where Twilight is being marriage counselor) is good, and I feel that the picnic scene is also good.
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Thank you very much for the grammar correction King! It means a lot, I will make sure to list you as one of the editors (currently have Starlitomega underneath the belt of the job as well). I feel that Starfall has made a much better name for itself already over Love Thy Night. It hopefully wraps up a few loose ends.
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It was my pleasure!
Should be mane.
All in all, I love it. Very adorable!
I was very disappointed when I found out that this wasn't a crossover with the newest James Bond movie.
JK of course.
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;; B-but I love my story.
5442476 It was a joke. I was just commenting how similar the title is to "Skyfall," the newest Bond movie.
This is great. It warms my heart to read such beautiful story
This was quite enjoyable, if you ever do plan to make another sequel, I'll surely want to read it.
I know this is an old story, but I just came across it. I just love these two together and both of your TwiLuna stories were just beautiful. Th!nk you so much for writing them. I'm sure, like many, sequels would be greatly received, but we still thank you for what you have posted.