Twilight expected just a normal date when Luna invited her to the Canterlot gardens for a moonlit date. But the mysterious mare of the moon has a little something extra planned...
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This is a cute story but I would like more
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But seriously, this is lovely.
Super daww, all the feels :3
You, as soon as Twilight figures out how you did it.
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best romantic gift ever, a star in a ring...beat dat every couple since ever.
Exquisite. My metaphorical literacy taste buds have tasted heaven!
THE END
im so sorry
still a very nice Story wich i greatly enjoy´d
5143039 Don't worry, I made that joke myself when I was writing it
The visuals were nice, but the dialogue felt very hammy and uncharacteristic. It's mediocre overall.
I have to say, while the writing itself could definately be improved, and I somehow found the events to be slightly predictable, I prefer to judge a story on the story, creativity and ideas themselves. Somehow I have never cone across the idea of Luna/Twilight, but this story makes me realise it is a very good pairing. I will also have to say though that the events passed a bit too fast for me. The tale could of been longer and moments of dialouge or describing could also be extended. The story itself is really good and I enjoy the ideas that were put into it.
7/10 for good overall story but writing, pacing and length that could be improved.
I've never read that prophecy in a way it's explained here, in the sentence next to the one containing the word "prophecy". Your interpretation of it is what impressed me the most )
As to your other stories, I see they're tagged "gore", so excuse me). I tried one, but
I really don't wantI'm not ready to go through that ribs and squashing stuff, no matter where to.5868213
You get used to it after reading a few hundred stories containing gore and death, I always feel empathy for the characters in the stories but it's all I can really do.