Big Mac is injured while bucking apples and seeks the help of the wise zebra Zecora, but then comes down with a sickness for which there is only one cure.
A poem writtten in the traditional English ballad form, with an ABAB writing scheme.
Illustration by the immensely-talented RusselH (aka The Last Gherkin) .
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....WUT.
I literally just posted a story entitled 'The Ballad of Tom' and now there's another ballad out???
CRAZINESS
That was incredibly clever . . . having Big Macintosh rhyme in a rhyming poem so it doesn't hit you until Zecora points it out!
Also great job with the rhythm and the rhymes! I know it's not easy!
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I know of no less than 5 stories on this site that follow the "The Ballad of X" naming scheme.
Another good story by Butterscotch Sundae! Keep up the good work.
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I know, just lol'd at the coincidence...
Nice. Very well done. Enjoyed it.
I enjoyed this, and I hate poems. That's saying something.
Silver out!
"Illustration by the immensely-talented RusselH (aka The Last Gherkin)."
Illustration? What Illustration?
tthis made me smile. im sure it did the same for anyone else who read it
English… major… pedantry… ACTIVATED!
The Ballad is, specifically, made up of segments of quatrains of alternating quadrameter and trimeter, rhyming ABCB.
Sorry about that.
Anyhow, Zecoramac… eh… do not want but I applaud the creativity and the willingness for someone to create something like this.
AWESOME!
A short but beautifully written story!
Good job!
Aw, that was a good read! I could never stand to write poetry again, no less something that was as enjoyable as that.
A rhyming pony in a rhyming poem...
RHYM-CEPTION!
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Off the top of my head, I'd say the illustration that graces the story on DeviantArt at http://buttersc0tchsundae.deviantart.com/art/The-Ballad-of-Big-Mac-299010453
It doesn't seem to have made it here yet.
God-tier rhyming for the most part, but
Was he still sick? He didn't know,
but buck he could no more.
What was this thing that pained him so?
Why did his heart feel raw?
Have I been mispronouncing the word more or raw this whole time?
I don't quite get how his injury would have impaired him, but then again it's a poem so it's not supposed to make much sense
Thanks Butters!
Heroic stanza, heroic stanza everywhere.
I like Big Mac x Zecora :)
YES! Finally someone has written an Epic Pony Poem! Brings back memories of reading the Aeneid and the Odyssey. You've earned a watch good sir.
This was actually quite impressive. However, if you will excuse my nitpicking, there are some lines that simply do not rhyme. They are quite jarring, when everything else is in perfect rhyme scheme. I did like the way you incorporated prose into Big Mac's speaking lines, and his ignorance as well. It was a clever trick on your part.
Nice story.
Nice poem.
BRAVO!
A "Ballad" story that's an actual ballad? You never fail to impress me. Hell, I'm not even miffed someone yanked my title again! (Third time in a month . . . >_<)
Well done!
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The ballad is actually a very fluid genre of poetry. My poem here is an extremely orthodox version of the ballad compared to many famous poems that are called ballads.
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Raw ryhmes with more, saw, law, door, poor, core, humidor, etc.
A friend on DA mentioned this as well. What whacky dialect of English are you guys speaking?
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See above. Not everyone speaks the same type of English as you do! I am unashamedly and proudly a speaker and writer of Australian English. Accept no Atlantic substitutes!
(Pssst! The only pseudo-rhyme is Macintosh and lost, in the first and final stanzas...
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Ahhh, the good ol' Border Ballad. I wrote a nice, long poem in that. Good time.
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Well, that's certainly one justification for it, haha. I will admit though, I have never seen saw ryhme with more. I'll take your word for it, and simply say that I enjoyed it overall.
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Ha! You wouldn't think nationality would affect how words in the English language rhyme with each other considering that there's usually only one single pronunciation associated with each word. Oh well, potato tomato cheeseburger kangaroo.
read it in devianart love it
Great Ballad. But sonovabitch I keep reading it to the tune of Gilligan's Island!
*Slow Clap* Bravo. :3
this was really sweet
"...'gettin' 'er done'."
"GIT' 'ER DUN!!!!"
Pardon me Ms. Sundae, but I believe you mistyped the phrase, its:
Can you make a video of you saying "GIT' 'ER DUN!!" so that the world can know how the phrase sounds when said with the awesome Australian accent?
Please?
I'll give you $10(USD) (At the moment that converts to $9.88126 AUD)
"Aww," Sweetie Belle sighed heartily,
"that was such a sweet story."
It truly shows
all of Big Mac's
deeply concealed glory.
Heh, I can't rhyme for my life.
Zecora would never understand me. 
The epicosity of this poem was LEGENDARY! So much fun to read out load :D
Short but beautiful. Well crafted and creative.
Short but beautiful. Well crafted and creative.
This is entirely too clever and cute.
So did grow the love of mac and zecora,
their passion strong,
deep in the everfree surrounded by endless fauna and flora,
their relationship shall be forever long.
Sorry, i'm not very good with ABAB poems, but i love your writing!
is it just me here or does enyone out there hear zecoras voice when the read this???
ponies need more poetry. this was absolutely beautiful.
Whe in doubt do not cry...
This is gorgeous! The rhyme and meter flow so very well, and the romance is just sweet. The way the rhyme of the poem mixed with the rhyming of the dialogue was very clever too.
That was awesome! It is so very difficult to fit a rhyme together without making it sound forced, or without losing the flow of the poem, and you've managed it very well here!
Also, woot for (anypony)xZecora shipping!
rain and again don't rhyme mister
Like it though
To be honest, i dislike poetry. But this, simple as it may be, is very good and heartwarming.
See, this is why I ship them!
They fit so perfectly, it's just asdfghjkl
Soul Of Songs, that was great!
I love this! Great job!
528181 Even if they work in your own, legitimate pronunciation, you might want to consider some alternatives for those us for which that is DISTINCTLY NOT a rhyme.
could be changed to:
but that doesn't necessarily capture the same emotional impact, it makes him sound like he's upset and in pain rather than being emotionally sensitive. so if the mood of that line is more important, you could go with this:
Very cute, and you got the feeling of the love worked nicely in. The story is mildly silly, but the chemistry between Mac and Zecora oozes in your words, nicely done!