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With a overdue storm on its way, Princess Celestia prepares to finish the day's business when an exhausted Rainbow Dash rushes in with an 'important message' from Twilight. When the contents of the message cause Rainbow to lose her temper, Celestia decides to teach her a special lesson in friendship.
8/20/13: Edited and updated version posted. Hopefully a long overdue improvement.
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Like.a mother
heart-warming
that was sweet
So much d'aaawww and sweetness.
The only tiny issue I have is that I think Rainbow would have protested just a bit before she started unloading about her day, but as I said it's a minor thing. Good story, overall.
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Stress can do strange things to a person, and most know that times all you need is a good rant
Pretty damn good one-shot you have here. And a good lesson for anyone and everyone.
It's a neat little oneshot, but some of the spelling bugs me a little. Excellent idea and setting of the mood, though.
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Trust me, I know 'bout ranting to let off steam, and certainly I liked that Rainbow did do that here. Just sayin', a brief "Oh, I couldn't," kind of protest, then Celestia going "Really, it's alright, and I want to hear about it" and then the rant would have been good. But again, it wasn't a dealbreaker for me, it just jostled the mimesis a bit. So, it's just, like, my opinion, man.
how adorable
This almost gave me diabetes. I'm pretty sure my blood sugar just rose about 20%.
This isn't Molestia, right?? The bed thing kinda gave off that vibe.
I am glad that there isn't any sexual vibes in this story. Excellent work.
D'aaawww.
This is the Celestia I like to think of.
Bra-vo!
This was so cute, loved how motherly Celestia was in this.
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I see what you mean but I'd like to think that Celestia's words were enough to get Rainbow to put down her defenses. Though that's definitely something I'll keep in mind for future stories.
Also I want to thank everyone for your kind words, I'm honestly surprised at how well recieved this was. I've fixed a few of the more obvious errors but if I missed any feel free to point them out.
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I've seen the toughest bastard I'd ever known, burst into tears one day because everything was just WRONG. Wrong wrong wrong. Nothing went right, and it just made him feel like trash.
Emotions can be a powerful thing, that can hit you out of nowhere.
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They can be dreadful things, right? It's a pity we can't turn them off when we don't need them, like when dealing with such days.
Really well done.
D'aaaaw! That was so cuuute! I really love seeing Celestia and Rainbow Dash bond, they seem so different it really is great when they get scenes like this. And yes, those days where a million little almost insignificant things add up? They're almost worse than the days when one or two big things go wrong.
Really well written and loved reading!
I just love this kind of fics, showing Celestia's motherly side.
Thank you for it!
I like the basic Idea, it is sweet, it has some dawwwww...But it seems abit...out of character for Celestia to invite a pony to her bed just cause a bad day (Bow chica bow bow). offering her a room at the palace for part of the day I could see. but other then that it has...so much dawwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwww
Sweet
Cue obnoxious snoring.
i just love these type of fic's.celestia being a mother to rainbow dash or any pony.(but mostly rainbow dash because i'll always think that celestia is the mother to rainbow dash)
So I know others have asked you this, but please consider giving this a couple of editing passes.* There are still a decent amount of obvious spelling errors running around like they own the place.
I mainly ask this because this is one of those stories I already know I'm going to keep coming back to. This is just the best idea for a scene and the best brain candy ever, and I can't get enough of the finale.
*(If you really don't have the time or anyone who can look at it, I can take a crack at it.)
2897990 All done. Sorry for taking so long to reply, I have no excuse. I had a friend of mine give it a good look. He fixed up most of the spelling and grammar mistakes and then i went back and re-did a few parts that I thought needed some work. I hope it came out okay.
Also, thank you so much for the compliment. It really meant a lot to me
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Remove the comma here so readers won't slam on the brakes as they're reading about Celestia's greatness.
"dozens of clouds"
Should be "was" to maintain past tense.
Suggested: "Come with me. We will discuss this further in my chambers."
Giving Celestia a more formal tone here will drive home her mood -- or at least the mood Rainbow perceives her to be in at that moment.
And that's all that jumps out at me.
EDIT:
"It's." That's in the description. Speaking of which, you might not want to give away the entire story in it.
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SUBARASHII, good sir! I certainly wasn't expecting you to go back over this (simply due to the story's age) but I really appreciate it. From where I'm sitting, this is an effortless read now, and you should be proud. This has cemented its place in my Favorites now.
I guess the only other thing I'd advise is to screencap a cover for this, just because it really deserves one! In the meantime, if you don't mind, I'm going to toss this over to some groups. This deserves far more viewers than it has.
3090016 *Goes through the checklist* Okay, that should do it. Thank you so much for pointing those out to me. I also re-wrote the description a little so it didn't give the entire plot away. I'm worried it might be a little too vague but hopefully it won't drive anyone away either.
Once again, thank you for your kind words and also for passing my story along. I don't think any words can express my gratitude.
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You're welcome -- and the description's perfect.
Now go write more things!
Equestria has the best royal family.
Very nice!! Glad to see you still got the gift Toma!
Awwww, this story is just too cute!
I wonder if Rainbow Dash is Celestia's daughter though........
This story was adorable. Probably one of my favorite portrayals of Celestia so far.
Fun, cute, short. Not ground breaking but it didn't need to be. I definitely enjoyed.
This was a sweet, fun little read. I think we've all had days like Rainbow Dash's, so it was easy to sympathize. Loved the kind, nurturing Princess Celestia you gave us. My favorite Celestia.
That was an adorable interaction between those characters, not often to be seen in non-shipping fics. I really liked it
This is a beautiful story between Rainbow Dash and Celestia.
This story was definitely adorable, and it ended up being different than what I thought it would be.
But why does it have the comedy tag? Nothing really stood out as being funny to me.
6596896 Call it an amature mistake on my part. When I first posted it I thought slice-of-life was a little too vague and the comedy tag would show that it was a light hearted story. But I think you're right, it probably should go.
Thank you for the comment. I'm glad that you enjoyed it so much.
6597529 You're welcome.
Wholesome and sweet! Wow! :D