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  • 28w, 3h
    Official Deactivation

    To everyone who has shown their support and followed my work, I thank you but the truth is, is that I can not continue with these stories.

    I know this will upset most of you but from the lack of updates you can guess that I've been losing motivation for these stories for a long time... I've tried to come back and motivate myself to finish what I started but I simply can't. College work, art commissions and my other day to day life stuff already drains the life out of me. But that still doesn't mean I could write these stories again as I no longer affiliate myself with this fandom.

    I've stopped being a "Brony" for a long time and frankly, I have no desire to return. (As much as I don't want to leave something unfinished)

    From today, all my current stories are cancelled, if anyone wishes to continue them, that's fine by me, if they wish to steal the stories and claim them as their own, they're a piece of shit but at the same time I also don't really care enough to go out of my way to pursue them. I have no desire to continue with this as I have a larger passion for art and comic books.

    I'm not dead folks, if you wish to contact me. Do NOT PM on this website. If you wish to talk to me (http://dontwaketheneighbour.deviantart.com/) Go here. If you message me on this website I WONT see it as this is the last time I'll be on this website.

    I'm not ungrateful for the support you've shown me, I only wish that I can bring myself to continue but I simply can't.

    I'm sorry again and this is my final goodbye to this site.

    -Ryan

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  • 97w, 1d
    Any bros in london?

    Im taking a mini vacation to london next week and I thought it'd be cool to meet some of you guys. Sorry for the lack of updates. But from this friday I'll be having a few weeks off college and I'll need something to keep myself busy.

    Which is why I'm definetly returning to this site. And with possibly a new story.

    9 comments · 233 views
  • 98w, 5d
    Video :D

    I've just uploaded my first youtube video. Im basically making a series where the audiance chooses what characters they'd like to see me draw.

    http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=2k8wk2AyTEg

    Hope you like it. :D

    1 comments · 153 views
  • 103w, 6d
    Comission notice

    Hey guys! It's me again!

    Just wanted to post a blog to you guys about my deviantart. After reaching 100 watchers I decided to open up comissions as a way of saying thank you to my followers.

    Details can be found on my deviantart concerning prices and what I'm willing to draw for you bros.http://dontwaketheneighbour.deviantart.com/

    Yes ponies are included as well as OC's monsters, etc :D

    Any small donations or even watches are REALLY appretiated.

    The whole reason I joined FIMFiction was to try and improve on my story telling skills for my comic series.

    But thanks to you guys this has become a media in which I truly grew fond of and it's because of you that I'm contemplating coming back.

    Anyways see you guys soon.

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The element of loyalty is put to the ultimate test as she finds herself stranded in a foreign world with no idea where she is, how she got there or how she can even get back. When she is rescued by a small group of battle hardened soldiers on a secret search and rescue mission, she has no choice but to go with them if she wants to stay alive.

Soon she realises the seriousness of her situation as she finds herself on the front line on one of the worlds most fearsome battles.

WARNING: Contains strong language and graphic injury detiail.

First Published
28th Apr 2012
Last Modified
30th Oct 2012
#1 · 129w, 5d ago · · · Captive ·

I like these stories. Keep it up! :twilightsmile:

#2 · 129w, 5d ago · · · Captive ·

this sounds really interesting i'll favorite it cause i cant read it now

#3 · 129w, 5d ago · · · Captive ·

Very nice idea. :twilightsmile:

You have spelling errors here and there, and some word confusion, but aside from that small issue, it read rather well.

Nothing like introducing Rainbow Dash to the horrors of our world first hand, right?

I like this so far, so keep it up if you can. :rainbowkiss:

#4 · 129w, 5d ago · · · Captive ·

Like others have mentioned, the format/spelling could use some work.  Using a word processor on this before posting could help.  Also, putting an indent at the beginning of each paragraph makes it easier on the eyes.

Still, I love it.  Favorite.

#5 · 129w, 5d ago · · · Captive ·

DUDE WHAT? CX

EPIC IDEA I'MA GOING TO READ ALL THE WAY THROUGH MAN XD

PLEASE MAKE SO MUCH MORE!!!!!!

But seriously the lack of events is just....eugh...

longer please

#6 · 129w, 5d ago · · · Captive ·

i like it and like the others said some formating and spelling issues but those are just a little thing, i think you may have a really great story on your hands:rainbowwild:

#7 · 129w, 5d ago · · · Captive ·

indent and seperate your paragraphs.

other than that, the only complaint I have is that there's not more.

#8 · 129w, 5d ago · · · Captive ·

My only complaint is the "tThe" at the begining of the story. I thought being a grammar nazi was fitting with the story. :rainbowlaugh:   :trollestia:

#9 · 129w, 5d ago · · · Captive ·

English isn't your first language, is it? :(

#10 · 129w, 5d ago · · · Captive ·

Needs some editing but it still is a great concept. I have a soft spot for WWII / MLP crossovers.

#11 · 129w, 5d ago · · · Captive ·

YEAH 'MERICA!

#12 · 129w, 5d ago · · · Captive ·

need a proofreader.

#13 · 129w, 5d ago · · · Captive ·

>>515084 Yeah. I need and editor. BAD.

#14 · 129w, 5d ago · · · Captive ·

A WW2 story this showes germans as cruel, monsters? No, thanks.

#15 · 129w, 5d ago · · · Captive ·

>>516289

Eh, dude? These were SS officers. They basically were cruel monsters. Normal soldiers or officers didn't have nazi armbands.

#16 · 129w, 5d ago · · · Captive ·

That was interesting very good so far.

The only complaint I have is that there's not more.

also more explosions:derpytongue2:

#17 · 129w, 4d ago · · · Captive ·

>>516789 Yes, more is definitely required. As for the explosions... You can never have enough, but it helps when used at the proper time. Like... All the time. :pinkiecrazy:

#18 · 129w, 4d ago · · · Captive ·

Nazi BASTARDS. IM A JEW.:twilightangry2:

#19 · 129w, 4d ago · · · Captive ·

>>516777

Guess it just came over me as I read German in such a story again. I know, the story about my home in this time isn't pretty, but not all germans were monsters, and that's something some people forget, or don't even know sometimes, and that makes me upset.

#20 · 129w, 4d ago · · · Captive ·

>>518034 I'm in no way attempting to make every german look like a heartless monster. I'm trying to simply show the harsh realitys of war in those dark days and how selfish people can be in moments of desperation. Americans, Germans, Britsh etc.

If your offended by this story I am really sorry. I'm not trying to make this a "God hates Germans story" As I truly hate people who dwell on the past. And I will never EVER judge a country's people based on events they could not control 70 years ago.

PS: I also like german beer :rainbowkiss:

#21 · 129w, 4d ago · · · Captive ·

>>518185

Thats good to know, thank you. Oh, and I forgot to tell you that this story is well written anyway. Except for the german parts, I guess you are not really used to the german language, are you?

For example: "Sie war mit der amerikanischen ja?" I guess it should sound more like:

"Sie war zusammen mit dem Amerikaner, ja?" But thats just my opinion.

PS: German beer is great, isn't it? :rainbowwild:

#22 · 129w, 4d ago · · · Captive ·

>>518034

Well, you'll be glad to know I'm not one of them. Not after actively studying world war two, as its one of my favorite subjects. :twilightsmile:

#23 · 129w, 4d ago · · · Captive ·

>>518281 Heh. Yeah. Google translate isn't very good. And I'm glad we understand eachother.

#24 · 129w, 4d ago · · · Captive ·

>>518319

Yup, thats really good to know. :pinkiesmile:

#25 · 129w, 4d ago · · · Horror ·

Perfect. You captured the darkness of war and Rainbow Dash's pain perfectly. Just watch the spelling and this fic is platinum.

Keep it up! :pinkiehappy:

#26 · 129w, 4d ago · · · Horror ·

Sadly, this is what happens in war. Aren't we humans just grand?

#27 · 129w, 4d ago · · · Horror ·

>>518336

FALLOUT 3 REFERENCE!

#28 · 129w, 4d ago · · · Horror ·

another good chapter keep it up.

also YAY explosions!  

#29 · 129w, 4d ago · · · Horror ·

Great chapter! ;)

#30 · 129w, 4d ago · · · Horror ·

Great story, but I beg you... PLEASE run this story through a spell check. Write it in a writing program, then copy paste it to there. Trust me... it helps a lot.

#31 · 129w, 4d ago · · · Horror ·

>>519020 Will do. As of now I'm going to sleep.

#32 · 129w, 4d ago · · · Captive ·

THIS  story can take ALL my fucks

#33 · 129w, 4d ago · · · Horror ·

DAAAAW poor rainbow dash she is all sad and scared....and coverd in blood DAAAAW poor dashie:fluttershysad:

#34 · 129w, 4d ago · · · Horror ·

>>518817 .... Wut?

#35 · 129w, 3d ago · · · Horror ·

Great chapter, you really captured the essence and brutallity of war. :twilightsmile:

#36 · 129w, 3d ago · · · Horror ·

oh poor rainbow she's so scared, great story as allways i looked for a war fic a long time ago and finally you made one excelent keep em coming

#37 · 129w, 3d ago · · · Reality ·

Dixon, I will rip your head off if only this were real and I could go back in time... Only after I killed Hitler personally, but hey, that's just me...

#38 · 129w, 3d ago · · · Reality ·

...Oh my god.

This is amazing.

#39 · 129w, 3d ago · · · Reality ·

Awesome. Thats all that needs to be said

#40 · 129w, 3d ago · · · Reality ·

This chapter felt comparitively unedited.

Is this some alternate reality where the mainland United States was attacked?  Sounds like it.

Also, equine animals have hair, not fur.  If saying hair sounds weird, just say "her coat."

You also mention her "arms"

#41 · 129w, 3d ago · · · Reality ·

>>524687 Thank you for pointing out this flaw. I'll change it now. I know some parts sound confusing but it'll all be be explained eventually

#42 · 129w, 3d ago · · · Reality ·

:rainbowkiss::rainbowkiss::rainbowkiss::rainbowkiss::rainbowkiss:

#43 · 129w, 3d ago · · · Reality ·

Alright i love history, and ponies. This story is just......the best. :raritywink:

#44 · 129w, 3d ago · · · Horror ·

This chapter was a lot better than the previous one. You really captured the as Ken Burns called it "The Universe of the Battle"

#45 · 129w, 3d ago · · · Reality ·

Wait was the United States attacked? What :rainbowhuh:?

Your descriptions seem rushed. Slow Down and don't do too many things in the same paragraph.

Eg: "Rainbow Dash looked at the piece of apple before grabbing it with her teeth, before she slowly started chewing on the fruit. The taste was pretty plain compared to how the apples tasted back in Equestria but she savored the taste as it reminded her of home. When she was finished she continued to look into the darkness in front of her. Bishop stayed silent, trying not to pressure the pony into saying something."

You try to combine two ideas (apple tasting plain and reminding her of home) in the same sentence. I personally think that it could be more than one sentence.

Eg: "The apple tasted bland in comparison to the ones in Equestria. Despite this, she savored the taste, as it reminded her of home."

#46 · 129w, 3d ago · · · Reality ·

Don't get me wrong it's a nice story it just needs some work. :pinkiesmile:

#47 · 129w, 3d ago · · · Captive ·

I like this so far....Why the hell does this remind me of the World at War campaign?

#48 · 129w, 3d ago · · · Reality ·

>>527409 Funnily eneough the origonal idea was suppose to be a call od duty crossover but in the end I thought that just being a war story with rainbow dash could be something diffrent yet unique

#49 · 129w, 3d ago · · · Reality ·

>>527449 Haha. Great story by the way. For some odd reason, Dixon making Rainbow freak out reminds me of when Gilda made Fluttershy cry...

#50 · 129w, 3d ago · · · Reality ·

That was great. I can only imagaine Rainbow's pain. But I think sh deserves a proper explaination as to how World War 2 began

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