It is the year 2552 and the Pillar Of Autumn has just entered Slip space to escape the Covenant fleet at Reach. A malfunction occurs with the Slip space drive and sends the Autumn and her crew into unknown space. The first planet that comes into range is very Earth like, and is giving off intelligent life signatures. What they don't know is that their only way back home is on this planet. The Autumn dispatches a scout party and what they report back is unbelievable. A world completely inhabited by ponies, millions of them..... Welcome to Halo: Equestria.
I'll add in more character tags as they are introduced in the story.
Cover image is: My Little Mjolnirs: Friendship is Mark VI
by *COBilly
Fan Art / Digital Art / Drawings / Games ©2012 *COBilly
Halo is the property of Bungie and Microsoft.
My Little Pony: Friendship Is Magic, is property of Hasbro and Lauren Faust
I do not own the cover image, Halo, or My Little Pony: Friendship Is Magic.
this man deserves a mustache.
Your concept intrigues me, and I would not be adverse to seeing this continue.
In layman's terms: MOAR!!!
Constructive criticism:
I would redo the formatting on the first paragraph, it looks like it was written in notepad without wordwrap.
"grabs a stake and"
The spelling you're looking for is "steak".
There is missing punctuation throughout, creating several run-on sentences.
Other than that, It is an engrossing tale. Being a Halo nerd myself, I can easily hear Keyes' voice at the beginning. It took a second read-trough to catch many of the grammar errors.
I would like to see this continue.
because of your actions the covenant took control of the ring and most likely fired it killing all life in the galaxy i hope your happy
Y...you spelled Commander Keyes' name wrong...
I like the story idea and you wrote the human characters well but Fluttershy, in my opinion, too confident. I think that she would have been scared and/or horrified that they shot at a Manticore. But other than that I think this is going to be a good story.
Dude when ever i read a halo pony story i always picture spike as a bad as spartin. Built in armor fire spartin green and he has wait for it fingers for guns. I just do. Anyways now that i said that very nice you get a
No man, just...no
I can't take another one. Sorry
408442
One of Fluttershy's major character traits is that she tends to forget herself when there are injured animals that need to be taken care of, so I think it is in character of her to approach the marines to help the injured medic. Also, once she is done treating the medic she does back away an act more cautious.
408439
Dang, I cant believe I got his name wrong. I will definitively fix that.
408415
Yeah, that's what I get for relying on spell check too much, and I'm not the best with grammar, but I will go back and fix everything that I can find.
408648
It's fine, I understand, but I actually had this going a while before the Halo/Equestria crossover became a main thing. It's just I never had enough time to get it up and running on here.
A Spartan Aria - Grant "Stemage" Henry
@ Jm4573r You have a valid point but I still point out that she would most likely run from the gunshots out of fear and not even see that anyone or thing was hurt.
I bet 5 trollestias that the covenant invade at some point.
Here are mine for proof:
(sigh) another crossover? well it is better than ship fics i guess.
408846
Yeah, I see where you are coming from, but i had planned on clearing that up in the beginning of the next chapter. Bad move on my part. But I was going for her being hidden and already seeing them and being so scared of them she is frozen and it only makes it worse with the Manticore and gunshots. But then she sees the wounded marine and her instincts kick in to take care of something that is injured.
And sorry about the chapter title at the very beginning, I cant get it to center for some reason. I'm still relatively new here, so there are some things I've still got to figure out.
Oh my god, 11 moustaches to you, my friend
By the way,
--as going into slip space while already in slip space.”--
YO DAWG, I HEARD YOU LIKE SLIP SPACE
OMG YOU DID NOT JUST COPY CATTED MY FANFIC NAME!!!!!!!! YOU STOLE IT!!!!!!!!!! I ABSOLUTLY DESPISE OF YOU !!! I KNOW TO LOVE AND TOLERATE, BUT THIS!!!!! THIS!!!!!!!!! IS JUST, UNDENIBLY RUDE!!!! IM GETTING THE ADMINS ON THIS!!!!!!!!
409544 whoa calm down Fan, it's just a title, Besides there's no rules about names in fanfiction
409558
Agreed. Besides, this title is kinda obvious. I mean, really... Halo: Equestria? I'm shocked the FIRST damn crossover of these wasn't named that.
Also, did anyone else notice a few shifts from present to past tense and back again?
Case in point, right from the start:
"Captain Keyes walked out of the bridge and back to his room on the massive Halcyon-class cruiser, exhausted from the battle he and his ship had just went through. Keyes punches in"
Right there. Those should be looked into.
409544
To be honest, it isn't the same name.
This title has a colon separating the 'Halo' from the 'Equestria.'
Yours does not.
You simply must understand that this makes it entirely different from yours, with the addition that if the site accepts it, the admins most likely will too.
- Midnight Specter
409544
Whoa, hey, I'm sorry. But Its just the first name that popped into my head. Like everyone says, its so simple that I'm surprised that it hadn't been used by the very first ones. And plus mine is a totally different plot line. I'm sorry for the name. I just couldn't think of anything all that creative that wasn't already used somewhere else.
410033 Thanks..m sorry for making that post
im realy sorry... its just been a really bad day... i happen to snap on you :( my fan fic is cal Halo Equestria
409786
I will definitively change the tense problem. I've always had a little trouble with that sort of thing, but i will fix it.
410055
Its all cool
This is an insult to the hardcore halo fans, IE, those like me. We play the game with a feel of deep honor and respect, this makes it feel like it's just another game. No, I don't believe any of halo is true. The fact that we think of it as something worth deep honor adn respect is because it defines the meaning of badassary! And another thing, Good work on the picture.
*slides away slowly*
I didn't say I wasn't gonna read it, or say it stinks.
i like the idea of this story but plot hole, wouldnt the covenant find the halo and continue with that unapposed?
Unseal the hushed casket?
410265
Don't worry, I've already taken this into consideration. Lets just say the Covenant's curiosity and rather large ego will play into this. It will be covered in the next chapter. but on a side note, isnt it because of the Pillar and Cortana's "some-what random" jump that lead the Covenant to Instillation 04 to begin with?
410230
I see what you mean, but its not meant as an insult, its just something i thought of while playing halo one day and decided to go with it and see where it would go. And the picture isn't mine. I just found it on google.
i only read a little bit and so far so good but might i add the picture is a bit miss leading when i first saw it i though it would be like the mane 6 as spartans but it turn out humans just land in eqestria
410314
Like I've said before, It will all be explained, I just wanted something that would cover the story as a whole towards the middle and end as well, plus its just a really awesome picture.
Good show, old boy!
Love this fic so far!
Nice start, tracked and waiting for more.
Wow. This is looking good so far. Not the best fic I've seen, but still great. The idea of a Halo story where Master Cheif never landed on Installation 04 is cool. Keep up the good work!
-Magi
P.S. While "FTL Drive" is technically correct, in the books I thought they were usually called Shaw-Fujikawa drives, or something along those lines.
Oh, and before i forget to mention this, this fic. will be updated at irregular times. Nothing like a collage English class to eat up a person's pony time.
k finished it its vary good keep it up and i see well ok then
410460
They are, FTL just comes from Shaw-Fujikawa Trans Light drive. But now that i look at it you would have thought it would have been called a STL or SFTL or something like that, you can tell I played Halo Wars. Anyway, another mistake, oh well. Its taken into account.
This is my personal opinion but you make the soldiers ramble a bit, I don't know but I personally think of soldiers being a bit more straight-forward. Though I must say... Kewl story bro
410500
True, I sort of have to work with it, but I kind of had to have them talk a little to sort of foreshadow what was to come, and thanks.
Like 410225 I am a hardcore Halo fan but I actually like these fanfics. I think it is due to the fact that I played the games for the story and plot more than the fighting and shooting and that Halos timeline sort of got railroaded with Halo Wars and Reach. What I'm trying to say is good job on the story and consider it tracked by me.
And since everyone is giving you these have a moustache and a
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Them being sent to Equestria will mess up the time line.
"Time line? Time doesn't go in lines. It goes in circles. That is why clocks are round."
Tell me who said that line and earn a Big Mac.
410529
Yeah I'm more or less the same when it comes to playing the games.
Cool, thanks man.
410311
Doesn' matter, it's still insulting. They can never use weapons with flat fricken hooves! If you want a story, do it with an animals that can hold the fricken thing and save it's own life! The nerve of some people.
Derp, not really much rage to use anymore, so, carry on, I've got a story to write.
410575
I'm getting to it latter, besides i never said they would use Human or Covenant weapons.
Great Story. I rate it 10 mustaches out of 5
410535
It was Caboose, but i don't deserve the Big Mac, I just couldn't remember so i had to look it up.
410529
Dude, if you really were as deep a fan as I, you'd know what I am talking about. You have to graspt eh feel, that unexplainable feel .What I am talking about has no name, no emotional distinction. It's a wonderful feeling, I will not lie, it is that feel which you have for the fact that you know you respect your country. It's that feeling of loyalty, honor, and respect all in one. Plus another.
410650
What do you not like? That people are making Halo/My Little Pony crossovers?