Noi the Rookie Author

Noi wants to become a writer and have Mr. Enter, the most famous publisher, to publish her story. So, she asks her sister to be her editor.

Cover Art by Jacob Bading

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Fossil-Dragon-Messiah

Fossil-Dragon-Messiah #1 · Nov 3rd, 2014 · 1 · ·

adorable! I should have carrot top proof read my stuff:)

Starlight Nova

Starlight Nova #2 · Nov 3rd, 2014 · · ·

Mr.Enter? Are you talking about this guy?

pokefreak13

pokefreak13 #3 · Nov 3rd, 2014 · · ·

5220343 Nope.

Manaphy

Manaphy #4 · Nov 4th, 2014 · · 1 ·

Cute story, though I do have a few quick suggestions.

“There’s two paths in front of me, at the paths of one’s true self.” A stallion’s voice sang.

It should read like this.

“There’s two paths in front of me, at the paths of one’s true self,” a stallion’s voice sang.

There are other instances of this, but one example should suffice.

“Ah yes, that obnoxious book worm would defiantly like this story.”

Should be:

“Ah yes, that obnoxious bookworm would definitely like this story.”

Lastly, Shining Armor has one n instead of two.

Other than those minor, easily correctable errors, I really liked reading this. Thanks for entering the contest, and good luck!

pokefreak13

pokefreak13 #5 · Nov 5th, 2014 · 1 · ·

5228371 Thank you!

Manaphy

Manaphy #6 · Nov 5th, 2014 · 1 · ·

5228935 You're welcome!

Choral Note

Choral Note #7 · Nov 5th, 2014 · · ·

I thought this was really cute. I kind of wish it could be that easy to write a great story.

pokefreak13

pokefreak13 #8 · Nov 7th, 2014 · · ·

5230961 Yeah.

ConningOfficer

ConningOfficer #9 · Nov 26th, 2014 · 1 · ·

Thanks for inviting me to take a look at your story! I enjoyed the twist at the end - I certainly wasn't expecting Mr. Enter to appear, and wouldn't have guessed his identity in a million years. While I'll admit I didn't "get" the singers, I thought it was cute the way that Noi kept using real life events to inspire an improved story - sort of like what we all try to do in real life, right?

Thoroughly enjoyable and brought a badly needed smile to my face!