Diamond's denial

by MichelleTwistaloo

Hum...what? Success?

But of course she did.

And when she finally got her point across, she was crying, her mane disheveled and an air of despair on her eyes, only thing that was remaining was for Apple Bloom to tell her the word “no”, and though she had heard the phrase “The worse they can say is no” she still wasn’t prepared for it.

Only it never came, she said yes.

And Diamond Tiara was going to do her best to make this work, everything going the opposite of what she wanted, or not.

Comments

[ShadowblazeCR]

I cried a little when I saw the word count of the chapters.

[Telaros]

I love what you did with breaking down her anxiety with the chapter titles. Seriously, that was adorable. Could have been done in one chapter and just leave the title in giant bolds to break her mental states as her anxiety and excuses pile up. But it was done rather well and didn't grow old on me.

[deadpansnarker]

Don't like it. Too soppy, pointlessly short chapters, minimum to no characterisation. Still, at least it gave you something to do on your lunch break.

[Telaros]

5148392 Well, it was done within 30 minutes. lol It basically plays off her being a tsundere type.

But yeah, it was a short little diddy. I had fun with it at least. Though I just read it on one page to save time. (chapter titles are actually a part of the story than just a throw away.)

Here's hoping there'll be supper served with this in the future ;3

[Airwave Rider]

Short but sweet. It's obviously not trying to be ambitious, and it worked just fine as a fun little distraction. The whole thing could have fit in one chapter, but I think the breaks actually worked with conveying DT's hesitation. Overall, not bad.

[Hoppa_21]

I liked it. It was interesting. Especially the way you described the emotions. I found the end a little...short/not emotional enough?, but other than that I enjoyed it.

5148117

I enjoyed the short chapters, since I often get distracted and can't concentrate on reading till the end, when it comes to reading chapters that are over 4000 words long.

[Viper Pit]

this was really sweet short but sweet