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The Summer Sun Celebration has gone off without a hitch, leaving Twilight embarrassed and confused. She is sent to remain in Ponyville to learn about friendship, the most powerful magic ever. However this task is interrupted by an unwanted guest. Not only is Twilight forced to put up with her new houseguest, she's starting to feel a change coming over her, taking over her mind. Can she resist the call of the night, or will she fall entirely into the grasp of Nightmare Moon?

Chapters (5)
Comments ( 74 )

For some reason Acts remind me of plays.
I like the flow and the story.
First comment :rainbowdetermined2:

Oo, another fic with this premise. It's a good thing I haven't actually read any of the countless other "Twilight becomes Nightmare Moon's student fics" or I might be disappointed. As is, I enjoyed it, but it was nothing spectacular.

Twilight working with Nightmare Moon. Awesome. :pinkiehappy:

I am really, really interested in this story. It seems to be really good so far, so I can't wait for more. :yay:

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Including this one, there are 19 known non-troll fics that have the two together in a meaningful way.

Thank you, everyone, for your support of my story. I'm working on schoolwork right now, so Chapter 3 isn't exactly going to come out this week. BUT, I am glad to get so many views, thumbs-up, and (most importantly) COMMENTS. I thrive on the stuff. Good, bad, neutral, as long as someone's talking, I'm happy.

PhoKingAzn: Thank you for your response, and I do pray I take this story all the way to Act III as planned.

Shredderman38: All I'm aiming for is entertainment. Spectacularity can wait until later. I'm happy that you enjoyed it.

Gweino: Ah, ah, ah... Define "together." As you can see there is a distinct lack of a Romance tag up top. Though that may change. I don't know. Act III is only a jumble of ideas right now, but I'll worry about that when I get there.

For the rest of you, thanks for your posts.

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Just having them interact in any way that is significant.

Past Sins spin offs are included in that count, it it is sort of loose.

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I second that motion!

Yes Twilight Join Nightmare! Give In...To the darkness...Or something i dunno. Great chapter looking forward to more :pinkiesmile:

488322 I'm calling bullshit on this number. I know I've seen way more fics than that with this premise (or at least a very similar one). Are you looking on FiMFiction only?

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Yes. Why would I bother with the pain of counting those elsewhere?

489465 To be accurate! You can't just leave out a significant portion of what you're supposed to be counting! You aren't the US Census Bureau!

I always love the Twilight and NMM fics. Not the pairing fics, mind you, but these kind. they are few and far in between and I can't get enough. Heres another favorite.

brilliant can barely wait for more :twilightsmile:

Hell yes, very good chapter. Nightmare Moon is starting to get some more control over Twilight, thats good.. hehe.. yes, very good.

You sir are too kind. More please?

Yes Twilight Agree With Nightmare. And when the time is right. March towards Chanterlot with your army. And strike down Celestia. Excellent Bring forth the chaos. Its soo Boring standing in the Palace Gardens all the time. Let me out...

Very nice update there, your story really has me engaged in whats going on. Introducing a night cast of characters like Ditzy and Star Hunter gets me wondering if you're going to do a different cast of elements. I've also enjoyed your foreshadowing. Just enough to get a general idea of the direction things are moving but not enough to make anything blatantly obvious. Well done!

Also, Nightmare Moon stealing cupcakes? Yes please. :twistnerd:

I take it Sugarcube Corner will be seeing much more business?

Man, I wonder how Pinkie will react when she learns her Cupcakes where so good they actually made Nightmare Moon cry. Loving this story so far, can't wait for more. :pinkiehappy:

Oh my, I absolutely loved this chapter! :rainbowkiss:
This is proving to be a positively lovely story and I can't wait to see more.

Such a wonderful story I love the back and forth between the two. I also look forward to Twilight's first letter to Celestia what crazy lesson can she gleam from this madness. Looking forward to the next chapter.

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What else would you suggest? I've been wrestling with that myself lately... I definitely need to add comedy to it but what else would fit?

this... is a rather clever plot actually

MMOOOUUURRRR!!!! :pinkiecrazy::pinkiecrazy::flutterrage::pinkiehappy::pinkiehappy:

I like it but I did spot the following:

"Ah, good night, Twilight." Nightmare Moon said cheerfully, a sparkle of humor in his eyes. "Did you enjoy your sleep?"

Wrong gender pronoun.

"It's not my fault he's you're familiar."

Wrong version. Should be your.

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Thank you aaaaannnddd... fixed!

Yay for creatures of the night! :yay: while twilight is all :facehoof:

I wonder where this will go...

This just keeps getting better and better :pinkiehappy:

moar!:flutterrage: that is if you want to.

Yes, finally a new chapter, thank you so much.:pinkiehappy: Twilight is a creature of the night, well let's see stays loyal to Celestia or joins Nightmare Moon. And I really hope the next update doesn't take almost a month long.

Ha! That certainly explains why Twilight was having her personality schism there. A very interesting approach you've taken with this. It's refreshingly original also. The whole spaz out on Twilight's part was perfectly done, well played sir. :yay:

I love this. I cant wait to see how this turns out. :pinkiehappy:

are you going to update this one?:fluttershysad:

i think we all see where this story is heading! I mean it's so obvious! Nightmare and Celestia will obviously go on Dr. Phil and talk about all their issues, and then they'll eventually hug, make up, and co-rule! Then cake!

Story technically needs an Alternate Universe tag since it's not following the actual show.

I do like where this is going.

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Yeah, I know, I think I'll get around to it someday

(Looks around at shocked faces) What?

Okay, back from the dead here, but I AM working on finishing Creatures of the Night (Act I) as we speak. In fact, I promise to have it at least completely written before I go back to school which is in... (Looks at watch) ... 18 days, blimey. So, summer's winding down, time to remember I have people still reading this and get to work.

holy damn this is heating up. wondering how long it'll be before at least one of her friends is a traitor's descendant, and or how long till Celestia talks about what would've happened or whatever went wrong etc.

There is more to what Nightmare Moon is saying...Twilight made some decent points on that subject...so what is she hideing?
*holds up bowl* MORE PLEASE!!!!

Ula, next time remove the 'e' from hiding.

Anyways. Love the new chapter, and i do wonder whats going to happen next. Grammatically there were no easily noticeable mistakes, but the ending seemed a little rushed. Heh my little grammar nazi editor is coming out. But otherwise not bad.

i already see Twilight's plan failing. anyway i feel sorry for nmm with her inept followers. when will twilight realize that nmm isn't completely evil?:trixieshiftright:

dangit i was hoping there would be ass wooping from twilight with the magic princess celestia really should have taught twilight being a political target and all

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