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The world of My Little Pony: Friendship is Magic lives under the typical definition of harmony: everything living in agreement and happiness. But what of a world where harmony is not a philosophy, but a force? What of a world where the Elements of Harmony uphold a cosmic system of balance despite what others say? What of a world where a thousand years of Celestia MUST be followed by a thousand years of Nightmare Moon?

Twilight Sparkle and her newly-discovered friends find out the hard way when they reawaken the Elements' power and become pawns of this system. Six ponies have to come to grips with themselves, struggling with their desire to fight destiny and their inability to resist it.

A little project I found lying around on my computer. Just putting it up here to see how it goes.

Chapters (3)
Comments ( 16 )

this is so darkly aweosme!

they can't help but bend over backwards for her! And i find that darkly hililarious...
:trollestia:

Rogue. The word is rogue, not rouge. That bugs the :yay: out of me.

Interesting intro! Can't wait to see how this plays out. :twilightsmile:

expository chapter.

Well gotta have then sometime!

Pretty neat, hopefully it gets at least somewhat of a update one day.

Cool story bro. No really, this is a very god story. wish you would update.

Oh this is delightful. I can understand having an uncertain ending in mind for a story does make it hard to write but I must admit I'm liking what I'm seeing here. Admittedly I do have a fetish for corrupted heroes but I think you are doing well with what you have so far.

I HAVE A SOLUTION! LYNCH MOB! GO!

Kill but one, and the Elements crumble! Shall we remove their bonds of Loyalty, or destroy their morale and Laughter? Maybe we can get rid of their Kindness and have them face each other! Or strip them of Generosity, and watch them drain Equestria of wealth against the wishes of NMM. Perhaps we could remove their Honesty as well... although I don't see what good that'll do. Honestly, I believe Loyalty and Laughter would be the hardest hits to their team unity. Coordinated strike team... go! Remove the two vital points, opening up the strongest of them all for removal! That's right, the primary target is Magic itself!

This is awsum, cant wait for more chapters.:pinkiehappy:

837210 In my opinion, pop 2 .22 caliber bullets into Twi's head and the Elements break down completely. :twilightsheepish:

It makes me wonder... If they stop being friends, will that break the sixth element, subsequently freeing them all, and removing the millennium spanning nightmare?

Will this ever be off hiatus?

Ah, Twilight, if you just killed yourself that would probably solve the issue quite nicely.

Gosh they're stupid. They could just go crawl down a ravine in the everfree or ask someone else to try and take the elements off.

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That would be interesting. I doubt it would happen as it would kind of kill the story.

I'm going through your stuff, and I like what I see.

I'm in despair because the good ones never get finished a little exaggerating here but i don't caaare like this one ;-;

2012......Ouch! I find this idea intriguing and wish there was more. Then I look at the dates on the chapters and my head hits the table. :ajbemused: I'm juts having no luck with fanfics lately.

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