A long time has passed since Cloud left Equestria behind. Now the time for the return is growing near, but what mental scars does the lost paragon carry? And can a romance shattered by foolishness regrow its roots?
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You keep spelling "all right" wrong. "Aight" is definitely NOT a word. It is something only used by 'dudebros'.
I hate you.
Wow, he really screwed up about his job didn't he? Berry is gonna be pissed.
6524080 It's intentional, you may notice that it's only Cloud that says it. It's a lazy perk of his.
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Last time I checked, it still is The Crystal Empire.
This has been an enjoyable read so far. There are a ton of grammar errors, but most of them are minor and can be easily fixed with a spell checker. Looking forward to some more.
6525345 It kinda bothers me. I might have to find one of those 'find and replace' things. I've never used one, but I've heard that they can be useful.
6525618 Your corrections are noted, added and appreciated.
6592481 First of wonderful that you're enjoying the story, as for your question. A Gary Stu, or the female counter part Mary Sue, is a character that is pretty much flawless. Wherever a Gary Stu goes he does no wrongs, is incredibly skilled at everything and has incredible powers that he just happens to learn to control perfectly in about a chapter or two. He's also liked by everyone he meets and is pretty much the center of attention at all times. There are gradients of how many of these traits come into play but all in all it's an overpowered character that doesn't have to work for anything.
6593215 Oh ok thanks.
I've noticed that you keep forgetting the apostrophe when you use the contraction of "we are".
Ok, so, I bucking love this story. I have completely forsaken all of my others to catch up with this one. O.o there is an amazing plot here (no pun intended)