Spitfire Gives Soarin a Time-Out

OmniFox

OmniFox #1 · Sep 24th, 2014 · 2 · ·

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I think he should break her.

CloverTales

CloverTales #2 · Sep 25th, 2014 · 2 · ·

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5051616 well that might be a sequel!

Valen Machina

Valen Machina #3 · Sep 25th, 2014 · 3 · ·

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I agree with fatboi if one thrust pushes her over the edge then a nice hard rutting is exactly what she needs.

Galaxy Knight

Galaxy Knight #4 · Sep 28th, 2014 · · ·

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Why is Spitfire consistently a bitch in these kinds of stories.

JonathanLightningstorm

JonathanLightningstorm #5 · Sep 29th, 2014 · · ·

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5068087 Because she's no longer the sexiest mare on the show, and she's been reduced to fulfilling this particular fetish...

Whatever it is.

Bloodlust Insomnia

Bloodlust Insomnia #6 · Sep 29th, 2014 · · ·

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This was some what good, I liked the part with spitfire and soran getting it on but the story was a little to short and didn't have very much detail in it but it still was a nice story so good work.

Galaxy Knight

Galaxy Knight #7 · Sep 29th, 2014 · 1 · ·

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5071059 Wait a minute...if she's not the sexiest anymore, then who is?

JonathanLightningstorm

JonathanLightningstorm #8 · Oct 6th, 2014 · · ·

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5072868

Well... There's Trixie for the "She loves herself a lot, but she also loves me" fetish, there's Gilda for the "She loves me deep down, but hates showing any emotion besides angry rage", there's Mrs Harshwhinny for the "Angry serious tightly-wound mare who may or may not hate stallions ends up falling in love with one and becoming a nicer, kinder, more mellow person after a good hard bucking" fetish, there's Button's Mom for the "Sexy older mare" fetish, and when it comes to the "Forbidden love with a mare above my level" fetish, most just go for Celestia herself. Spitfire is just no longer relevant. Remember how there used to be tons of fanfics about Prince Blueblood when he was first revealed? Some where he got the crap beaten out of him as "Revenge" for how he treated Rarity, some where he had to redeem himself or Celestia would burn him in the sun or revoke his nobility, title and inheritance/money, some where he was actually a pretty cool dude who used the jerk act as a shield to ward off the worst of the golddiggers and loons who only wanted him for his money and power while also having fun at their expense. And now? Barely remembered by anypony. She's pretty much doomed to be the designated top-bitch in any clop story that involves any kind of BDSM, like most ShiningxCadence bdsm fics I see. (Seriously, good bdsm fics are so hard to find, I might give writing them a go myself).

As for the story... I agree, there needs to be a sequel, one where he gets revenge on her. Reading this fic disgusted me, made me feel sorry for Soarin, and killed my boner completely for the next hour or so.

Here are some scenarios you could work with:

Soarin's pal Thunderlane notices he hasn't come out of the office in a while, so goes in to check up on him. He sees him in that sorry state, unties him, and helps him out while demanding to know what happened. When Soarin eventually reveals it, there are two ways the story cold go down:
One: Spitfire gets in legal trouble for her horrible abuse of Soarin(Seriously, I vomited in my mouth a little. And I've read futa rape stories.), and the Wonderbolts suddenly has one extra space ready for Rainbow Dash, who is overjoyed to finally live her dream. This gives you some bonus points for Irony, with Spitfire making that earlier threat about replacing him with Rainbow Dash, only for it to happen to her.
Two: Thunderlane and Soaren conspire to capture/force anesthetic into Spitfire, and then when she wakes up, she's in a cold dark basement somewhere where Soren gets his sexual revenge upon her, breaking her slowly and painfully, making her his bitch and showing her what it's like to be dominated like that. Thunderlane just watches, maybe helps out with the chains and location if asked, and he might take a few "This is for hurting my friend!" shots at her, but this is Soarin's show, let him have his fun. Celestia knows he needs it after going through that. Also, at first using the threat of going to the police (Or more likely and more threatening and likely to achieve results, threatening to tell Rainbow who would then tell Twilight who would then tell Celestia, who would take serious action) to keep her in line, but then after a few chapters of hardcore breakage, she's mentally broken to the point where she can't focus/fly as well, he's easily outflying her now that he's satisfied and she's not(Look into including orgasm denial), she might also feel a little guilty about putting him through that, and is ready to do whatever it takes to make it up to him. The breaking continues, because progress has been made, and eventually a proper loving dom/sub relationship is formed with Soarin permanently on top.

Galaxy Knight

Galaxy Knight #9 · Oct 6th, 2014 · 1 · ·

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5106381 I...did not expect such a long responce.
If I had to pick sexiest mare I would probably have to go with...
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The lovely miss Twilight Sparkle if we're talking main six

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And the stunning Luna if we're talking princesses.

JonathanLightningstorm

JonathanLightningstorm #10 · Oct 6th, 2014 · · ·

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5106621 I agree with you on Twilight, but while Luna is cuter, Celestia is hotter/sexier. And I was assuming we were judging background characters and minor characters here, mainly because Twilight is too darn cute and sexy to not top the list. ...(And me)

Galaxy Knight

Galaxy Knight #11 · Oct 6th, 2014 · · ·

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5107034 Eh. Celestia may be hotter (literally) but I just have a soft spot for Luna; she's a bit smaller, I find her old equestrian speak attractive (don't judge), and Luna seems more emotional and a bit more timid than her older sister.

If we're talking background characters we have:
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The two toned Wub master Vinyl Scratch

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There's Flitter and her sister Cloudchaser, but they're on the lower side of the hotness spectrum for me.

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And of course Lyra and Bon Bon, who are together because I ship this.

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